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48 <div class="cm jb">Jonathan Blake</div>
49 <div class="cm dd">David Davis</div>
50 <div class="cm ik">Ingo Klöcker</div>
51 <div class="cm so">Simon Osborne</div>
52 <div class="cm tp">Timothy Pederick</div>
53 <div class="cm ks">Keith Sheldon</div>
54 <div class="cm js">Jennifer Sigman</div>
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66 <div class="re"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #1: Right-Handed Magic -> Right-handed Magic <div class="cm tp">compare Left-handed Magic in PAMoS</div><div class="cm jb">redundant with the more complete issue #3</div></div>
67 <div class="ce"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #2: elite -> élite <div class="cm tp">as per PAMoS</div><div class="cm jb">Corrected, please verify errata/non-errata</div><div class="cm so">It is definitely Errata; élite is always spelled 'elite' in TSSF throughout the series, to the best of my knowledge.</div></div>
68 <div class="ce"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #3: Right-Handed Magic -> Right-handed magic <div class="cm ik">as most other occurrences</div></div>
69 <div class="cn"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #4: forrner -> former</div>
70 <div class="ce"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #5: mystery quickly and so you -> mystery quickly, and so you</div>
71 <div class="ce"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #6: vigilant for he fears -> vigilant, for he fears <div class="cm tp">Disagree with these commas</div><div class="cm jb">The word "for" is a valid conjunction requiring a comma to separate clauses.</div></div>
72 <div class="ce"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #7: Dark God and rarely -> Dark God, and rarely <div class="cm tp">Disagree with these commas</div></div>
73 <div class="ce"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #8: hellish strongholds fierce fighting -> hellish strongholds, fierce fighting</div>
74 <div class="re"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #9: practitioners of Right-Handed Magic -> practitioners of Right-handed magic <div class="cm ks">Left-handed and Old Kingdom above have a lower-case "magic, and "Handed" should be lower-case.</div><div class="cm jb">redundant with issue #3</div></div>
75 <div class="ce"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #10: their new-found responsibilities -> their newfound responsibilities <div class="cm ks">This has already been fixed in the Project Aon version.</div><div class="cm jb">I found "new-found skills" and "newfound responsibilities" in this section. Are both errata?</div><div class="cm so">Yes, in the original text both occurrences are in the hyphenated form.</div></div>
76 <div class="ce"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #11: that no Kai lord -> that no Kai Lord</div>
77 <div class="rn"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #12: its forrner glory -> its former glory<div class="cm jb">redundant with #4</div></div>
78 <div class="rn"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #13: Paragraph 4, Line 3: "forrner" should be "former"<div class="cm jb">redundant with #4</div></div>
79 <div class="re"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #14: Paragraph 13, Line 6: "extra vigilant". I would write this as a compound, "extra-vigilant"<div class="cm jb">"Extra" is a perfectly cromulent adverb - no need for a hyphen.</div></div>
80 <div class="ce"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #15: free-state -> Freeland</div>
81 <div class="re"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #16: Kai lord -> Kai Lord<div class="cm jb">redundant with #11</div></div>
82 <div class="re"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #17: Right-Handed -> Right-handed<div class="cm jb">redundant with #3</div></div>
83 <div class="ce"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #18: Vashna's body, and those of his loathsome troops, was -> Vashna's body, and those of his loathsome troops, were <div class="cm so">However, I don't much like this correction. I think it would be better to alter it this way--Vashna's body, along with those of his loathsome troops, was . . . because that keeps the subject fixed on Vashna and not on his army.</div><div class="cm jb">I like your correction better.</div></div>
84 <div class="ce"><a href="tssf.htm">The Story So Far . . .</a> #19: north-east -> northeast <div class="cm ik">as elsewhere</div></div>
85 <div class="section"><a name="gamerulz">gamerulz</a></div>
86 <div class="ce"><a href="gamerulz.htm">The Game Rules</a> #1: that you will find in the front of this book. For ease of use, and for further adventuring, it is recommended that you photocopy these pages <div class="cm so">Remove this.</div></div>
87 <div class="ce"><a href="gamerulz.htm">The Game Rules</a> #2: on the last page of this book <div class="cm so">Remove this.</div></div>
88 <div class="ce"><a href="gamerulz.htm">The Game Rules</a> #3: (ie, -> (i.e. <div class="cm so">x2</div></div>
89 <div class="cf"><a href="gamerulz.htm">The Game Rules</a> #4: The Discipline bonuses mentioned do not affect your permanent scores. If you have completed previous adventures, the Disciplines that you have mastered may still be beneficial. See the Grand Master Rules section of the Rules Handbook for details. <div class="cm so">copied directly from TDC.</div></div>
90 <div class="cf"><a href="gamerulz.htm">The Game Rules</a> #5: Note that this list is not identical to the one used in The Plague Lords of Ruel: this list is missing the Silver Bracers and Korlinium Scabbard. These items are restored to the list of permissible items from the Kai and Magnakai series again in The Deathlord of Ixia. Presumably, therefore, it should be permissible to leave the Silver Bracers and Korlinium Scabbard in safekeeping at the monastery during the intervening books and retrieve them at the outset of The Deathlord of Ixia. <div class="cm so">copied directly from TDC.</div></div>
91 <div class="section"><a name="discplnz">discplnz</a></div>
92 <div class="n"><a href="discplnz.htm">. . . Disciplines</a> #1: If you successfully complete the mission as set in this, the first of the Lone Wolf Grand Master series jb: check all books for this, you may add a further Grand Master Discipline of your choice to your Action Chart in Book 16. -> If you successfully complete the mission as set in this, the fourth of the Lone Wolf Grand Master series, you may add a further Grand Master Discipline of your choice to your Action Chart in Book 17. <div class="cm jb">Still need to check for occurrences of this error in previous books.</div></div>
93 <div class="re"><a href="discplnz.htm">. . . Disciplines</a> #2: Grand Defender, with which you -> Grand Defender, at which you <div class="cm ks">"With" makes the rank sound like a possession, "at" might not be the best answer, but sounds more appropriate.</div> <div class="cm tp">It's common for ranks, Disciplines, etc. to be referred to like possessions. I think it's just a quirk of Joe Dever's style, not necessarily something to correct.</div><div class="cm jb">Although I tend to agree that "at" sounds better, I don't think it makes so much difference that I want to start correcting every instance of it in all of the books.</div></div>
94 <div class="ce"><a href="discplnz.htm">. . . Disciplines</a> #3: hearing, smell and night vision. -> hearing, smell, and night vision <div class="cm ks">Comma for last item in a list before "and"?</div> <div class="cm tp">Disagree with these commas</div><div class="cm jb">We've adopted using the serial comma in lists of three or more items. Famous example of how things can go very wrong without it: book dedication "To my parents, Ayn Rand and God".</div></div>
95 <div class="ce"><a href="discplnz.htm">. . . Disciplines</a> #4: <div class="cm so">Newsletter 24 contains the following information: "Please note that in some early editions of Grand Master gamebooks 13-17 a literal error appears in the rules for the Grand Master Discipline of Deliverance. The section should read "their ENDURANCE is reduced to 8 points or less" (not "COMBAT SKILL" is reduced).</div></div>
96 <div class="re"><a href="discplnz.htm">. . . Disciplines</a> #5: gods -> Gods</div>
97 <div class="ce"><a href="discplnz.htm">. . . Disciplines</a> #6: Magi-Magic -> Magi-magic</div>
98 <div class="ce"><a href="discplnz.htm">. . . Disciplines</a> #7: opposite and overleaf -> below</div>
99 <div class="re"><a href="discplnz.htm">. . . Disciplines</a> #8: COMBAT SKILL is reduced to 8 -> ENDURANCE is reduced to 8<div class="cm jb">redundant with #4</div></div>
100 <div class="section"><a name="powers">powers</a></div>
101 <div class="section"><a name="equipmnt">equipmnt</a></div>
102 <div class="ce"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #1: eg -> e.g.</div>
103 <div class="ce"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #2: jb: update for this book and add to errata These are always carried in the Belt Pouch. It will hold a maximum of fifty Crowns. The currency of Nyras is the Kika. The exchange rate is 10 Kika for 1 Gold Crown. -> The currency of Magador is the Gold Crown. These are always carried in the Belt Pouch. It will hold a maximum of fifty Crowns. <div class="cm ks">Omitted from the original book.</div></div>
104 <div class="ce"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #3: it adds 3 points to your -> it adds 5 points to your <div class="cm ks">This has already been corrected in the PA version.</div></div>
105 <div class="cn"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #4: Wolf adventures. (Books 1-14), -> Wolf adventures (Books 1-15), <div class="cm ks">Two errors: eliminate period between adventures and ( and change 14 to 15.</div></div>
106 <div class="ce"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #5: Magador you take -> Magador, you take <div class="cm tp">Disagree with these commas</div><div class="cm jb">Long initial adverbial phrase needs a comma.</div></div>
107 <div class="ce"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #6: map of the area -> map of the Maakengorge and surrounding territories <div class="cm cjl">And remove "(see the inside front cover of this book)"</div></div>
108 <div class="ce"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #7: safe-keeping -> safekeeping</div>
109 <div class="ce"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #8: (see the inside front cover of this book <div class="cm so">remove this.</div></div>
110 <div class="cn"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #9: map <div class="cm so">encode as link to map.</div></div>
111 <div class="re"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #10: safe-keeping -> safekeeping<div class="cm jb">redundant with #8</div></div>
112 <div class="re"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #11: (eg -> (e.g.<div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
113 <div class="ce"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #12: arrow -> Arrow <div class="cm so">x5</div></div>
114 <div class="ce"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #13: bow -> Bow <div class="cm so">x8</div></div>
115 <div class="re"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #14: adds 3 points -> adds 5 points<div class="cm jb">redundant with #3</div></div>
116 <div class="ce"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #15: quiver -> Quiver</div>
117 <div class="cn"><a href="equipmnt.htm">Equipment</a> #16: map of the the Maakengorge -> map of the Maakengorge</div>
118 <div class="section"><a name="cmbtrulz">cmbtrulz</a></div>
119 <div class="re"><a href="cmbtrulz.htm">Rules for Combat</a> #1: reducing his ENDURANCE points -> reducing its ENDURANCE points <div class="cm ks">Encompasses female opponents as well as creatures of unknown gender.</div> <div class="cm tp">Seems a bit PC for my tastes. ;) "His" is (or was, before the PC police attacked the language) an acceptable pronoun for nonspecific genders.</div><div class="cm jb">I'm not a fan of gender neutral revisionism either.</div></div>
120 <div class="ce"><a href="cmbtrulz.htm">Rules for Combat</a> #2: on the inside back cover of this book <div class="cm so">Remove this</div></div>
121 <div class="ce"><a href="cmbtrulz.htm">Rules for Combat</a> #3: on the page after the Random Number Table -> in the back of this book</div>
122 <div class="ce"><a href="cmbtrulz.htm">Rules for Combat</a> #4: Lone Wolf (Combat Skill 32) -> Lone Wolf (Combat Skill 27)</div>
123 <div class="ce"><a href="cmbtrulz.htm">Rules for Combat</a> #5: adds 3 points to his -> adds 8 points to his</div>
124 <div class="section"><a name="lorecrcl">lorecrcl</a></div>
125 <div class="section"><a name="levels">levels</a></div>
126 <div class="section"><a name="imprvdsc">imprvdsc</a></div>
127 <div class="ce"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #1: Kai-Blast -> Kai-blast <div class="cm ik">2x; as Kai-surge</div></div>
128 <div class="re"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #2: eg -> e.g.<div class="cm jb">redundant with #3</div></div>
129 <div class="ce"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #3: eg: -> e.g.</div>
130 <div class="re"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #4: eg: water -> e.g. water<div class="cm jb">redundant with #3</div></div>
131 <div class="ce"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #5: kinds of surface, -> kinds of surfaces, <div class="cm tp">Disagreed. Only kind needs to be pluralised. One kind of surface, many kinds of surface.</div><div class="cm jb">I think a good analogy is "many different kinds of people" - you wouldn't say "many different kinds of person".</div></div>
132 <div class="ce"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #6: body-weight -> body weight</div>
133 <div class="re"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #7: Kai-Blast -> Kai-blast <div class="cm ks">Everything else that is hyphenated is lower-case for the second word. Should this follow suit?</div><div class="cm jb">redundant with #1 - but yes, it should be lowercase</div></div>
134 <div class="cn"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #8: Grand Mastery you will -> Grand Mastery, you will <div class="cm ks">This is the original script, but the PA version may be correct. It seemed right with a comma to me.</div><div class="cm so">There's definitely a comma in the original text ("...higher levels of Kai Grand Mastery, you will...") Whether it should be there or not is another matter.</div></div>
135 <div class="ce"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #9: Paragraph headed "Kai Surge" - A footnote may be required to further explain the rules for Kai-Blast. Firstly, how do you generate a random result between 2 and 18? Presumably the idea is to add two picks from the Random Number Table (which is not actually stated in the description) but this gives a range of 0-18. Should you: a) Treat any result of 0-1 as 2? b) Re-pick any 0s you get from the RNT? Option a) makes Kai-Blast less powerful, of course. It trebles the chance of doing 2 EP damage to your opponent at a cost of 4 EP to yourself. Secondly, no indication is given of whether it is permissible to use Kai-Blast over and over again instead of actually fighting your opponent - should any kind of limitation be stipulated?<div class="cm so">I think this is accurate. It will probably be worth footnoting this in TLoV for clarity, even with the addendum of the missing sentence taken from Newsletter #24. (See "16tlov imprvdsc #9:" )</div><div class="cm ">"Also, since kai blast/kai ray cannot be used in conjuction with any other mindforce attack, does it mean that during a battle where you are using Kai Surge +8 cs, and during one of the rounds you wish to use kai blast/ kai ray, you will need to reduce your cs by 8, conduct that round, include additional ep loss by yourself & enemy through kai blast, then resume your +8cs the following round?"</div><div class="cm jb">Added as erratum.</div></div>
136 <div class="ce"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #10: lava -> lava, <div class="cm jw">commas have been used before the word "and" in lists previously in book</div><div class="cm so">This is errata.</div></div>
137 <div class="rf"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #11: <div class="cm cjl">Were we ever going to add a footnote, explaining the means by which one resolves a Kai-blast? If I recall, there was an official ruling on this. It might be helpful to mention it here.</div><div class="cm so">Newsletter 24: "In Lone Wolf 16, the Improved Discipline of Kai-surge (at rank of Sun Lord) is not fully explained (a sentence is missing from the paragraph). A Kai Sun Lord using Kai Blast (Errata, should say Kai-blast) determines the damage inflicted on an enemy by picking two numbers from the Random Number Table. These numbers should be added together (a '0' = 1) and the resultant total equals the damage inflicted."</div><div class="cm jb">redundant with #9</div></div>
138 <div class="re"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #12: spectrum, jb: i.e. ie. they -> spectrum, i.e. they<div class="cm jb">redundant with #13</div></div>
139 <div class="ce"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #13: ie. -> i.e.</div>
140 <div class="ce"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #14: Kai Surge -> Kai-surge</div>
141 <div class="re"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #15: Kai-Blast -> Kai-blast <div class="cm so">x2. This is then consistent with Kai-surge.</div><div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
142 <div class="re"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #16: eg: -> e.g.<div class="cm jb">redundant with #3</div></div>
143 <div class="re"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #17: arrow,or -> arrow, or <div class="cm jb">rejected in preference for #21</div></div>
144 <div class="rf"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #18: How often can a Kai-blast be used? How is a number between 2 and 18 generated? <div class="cm so">I would venture 'once per combat'. I would advocate pick two numbers, ignoring all 0s.</div><div class="cm jb">There's nothing official that I can see leaving this open to reader's preference.</div><div class="cm so">Actually, I think this can go away. Having played around with the LWAC java program, since the enemy gets to fight back each round, there appears to be no reason to limit the number of Kai-blasts a Kai Grand Master can make per combat. Perhaps instead footnote that you must conduct the round of combat as normal, but ignore all points lost by your opponent. I confess I never worked that out before now. >_< </div></div>
145 <div class="ce"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #19: 'Lightning Hand' -> Lightning Hand <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell.</div></div>
146 <div class="ce"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #20: 'Improved Grand Master Disciplines' -> Improved Grand Master Disciplines</div>
147 <div class="ce"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #21: arrow,or -> Arrow or</div>
148 <div class="ce"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #22: arrow -> Arrow <div class="cm jb">many occurences</div></div>
149 <div class="cn"><a href="imprvdsc.htm">Improved . . . Disciplines</a> #23: Guardian -> Kai Grand Guardian</div>
150 <div class="section"><a name="kaiwisdm">kaiwisdm</a></div>
151 <div class="cn"><a href="kaiwisdm.htm">. . . Wisdom</a> #1: the completion Of this -> the completion of this</div>
152 <div class="ce"><a href="kaiwisdm.htm">. . . Wisdom</a> #2: Incorrect order <div class="cm so">In my UK copy of TLoV, Grand Master's Wisdom appears before Improved Grand Master Disciplines and Levels of Kai Grand Mastership. Books 17 and 18 also have this change in order, but books 19 and 20 have the normal order.</div><div class="cm jb">Made note of this change in the errata list.</div></div>
153 <div class="section"><a name="sage">sage</a></div>
154 <div class="section"><a name="numbered">numbered</a></div>
155 <div class="section"><a name="part1">part1</a></div>
156 <div class="section"><a name="sect1">sect1</a></div>
157 <div class="ce"><a href="sect1.htm">1</a> #1: skyship Skyrider. -> skyship, Skyrider.</div>
158 <div class="re"><a href="sect1.htm">1</a> #2: "aided by your innate Kai skills of invisibility" Invisibility? This is a question of house style more than anything else, but the book is consistent throughout. I will assume PA intends to follow suit, please advise me if wrong.<div class="cm jb">This seems to be referred to in the generic sense encompassing Camouflage and Invisibility.</div></div>
159 <div class="cn"><a href="sect1.htm">1</a> #3: Skyrider <div class="cm so">italicise</div></div>
160 <div class="cf"><a href="sect1.htm">1</a> #4: Also in this section you are given a scroll without any instruction to record it on your Action Chart. The same happens with the Deathstaff later on. Should any footnotes be added in these cases?</div>
161 <div class="ce"><a href="sect1.htm">1</a> #5: scroll -> Scroll</div>
162 <div class="section"><a name="sect2">sect2</a></div>
163 <div class="ce"><a href="sect2.htm">2</a> #1: animal kinship -> Animal Kinship <div class="cm tp">capitalise discipline name</div></div>
164 <div class="re"><a href="sect2.htm">2</a> #2: of animal kinship. -> of Animal Kinship. <div class="cm ks">The Kai Disciplines were always capitalized in books 1-5.</div><div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
165 <div class="re"><a href="sect2.htm">2</a> #3: the first-floor window -> the first floor window <div class="cm jb">"first-floor" is correct when used as an adjective, but if you're referring to the first floor of a building. . .</div></div>
166 <div class="section"><a name="sect3">sect3</a></div>
167 <div class="ce"><a href="sect3.htm">3</a> #1: Knight, or higher, turn to 31. -> Knight or higher, turn to 31.</div>
168 <div class="ce"><a href="sect3.htm">3</a> #2: "the basalt island and the entire fiery plain beyond is engulfed" "are engulfed"? Both things are engulfed.</div>
169 <div class="section"><a name="sect4">sect4</a></div>
170 <div class="section"><a name="sect5">sect5</a></div>
171 <div class="section"><a name="sect6">sect6</a></div>
172 <div class="ce"><a href="sect6.htm">6</a> #1: upper tier and -> upper tier, and</div>
173 <div class="cf"><a href="sect6.htm">6</a> #2: This is the correct answer to the Crystal Dais code puzzlein Section 164.</div>
174 <div class="section"><a name="sect7">sect7</a></div>
175 <div class="cn"><a href="sect7.htm">7</a> #1: Huntmastery and Assimilance <div class="cm so">italicise and</div></div>
176 <div class="section"><a name="sect8">sect8</a></div>
177 <div class="re"><a href="sect8.htm">8</a> #1: boat which is -> boat, which is</div>
178 <div class="re"><a href="sect8.htm">8</a> #2: first-floor ruins of -> first floor ruins of <div class="cm jb">cf. Section 2 #3</div></div>
179 <div class="section"><a name="sect9">sect9</a></div>
180 <div class="ce"><a href="sect9.htm">9</a> #1: panther you leap -> panther, you leap</div>
181 <div class="ce"><a href="sect9.htm">9</a> #2: appear but the -> appear, but the</div>
182 <div class="ce"><a href="sect9.htm">9</a> #3: in hand you climb -> in hand, you climb</div>
183 <div class="section"><a name="sect10">sect10</a></div>
184 <div class="cf"><a href="sect10.htm">10</a> #1: This is the correct answer to Shamath's riddle in section 189.</div>
185 <div class="section"><a name="sect11">sect11</a></div>
186 <div class="ce"><a href="sect11.htm">11</a> #1: most-favoured -> most favoured <div class="cm tp">seems idiosyncratic, if permissible, and PAMoS appears to support me on it</div></div>
187 <div class="cn"><a href="sect11.htm">11</a> #2: horse-meat -> horsemeat <div class="cm ik">as in 208</div></div>
188 <div class="ce"><a href="sect11.htm">11</a> #3: rounds, by turning -> rounds by turning</div>
189 <div class="ce"><a href="sect11.htm">11</a> #4: Sun Knight, or higher, -> Sun Knight or higher,</div>
190 <div class="ce"><a href="sect11.htm">11</a> #5: skull and, as the -> skull, and as the</div>
191 <div class="ce"><a href="sect11.htm">11</a> #6: weakened state and this -> weakened state, and this</div>
192 <div class="ce"><a href="sect11.htm">11</a> #7: Vorndarol jackals -> Vorndarol Jackals</div>
193 <div class="re"><a href="sect11.htm">11</a> #8: rounds, by turning -> rounds by turning <div class="cm jb">redundant with #3</div></div>
194 <div class="ce"><a href="sect11.htm">11</a> #9: Durncrag scavenger -> Durncrag Scavenger</div>
195 <div class="section"><a name="sect12">sect12</a></div>
196 <div class="ce"><a href="sect12.htm">12</a> #1: morning sun and the -> morning sun, and the</div>
197 <div class="section"><a name="sect13">sect13</a></div>
198 <div class="section"><a name="sect14">sect14</a></div>
199 <div class="ce"><a href="sect14.htm">14</a> #1: two rounds, by turning -> two rounds by turning</div>
200 <div class="ce"><a href="sect14.htm">14</a> #2: Vakovarian brigand captain -> Vakovarian Brigand Captain</div>
201 <div class="section"><a name="sect15">sect15</a></div>
202 <div class="ce"><a href="sect15.htm">15</a> #1: strong will and you -> strong will, and you</div>
203 <div class="section"><a name="sect16">sect16</a></div>
204 <div class="ce"><a href="sect16.htm">16</a> #1: T'is -> 'Tis <div class="cm tp">apostrophe at the point of contraction</div></div>
205 <div class="ce"><a href="sect16.htm">16</a> #2: 'not less you be -> 'not 'less you be <div class="cm ks">My guess here is that "less" is a contraction for "unless", therefore using the same apostrophe to fill in missing letters as her dialect in the rest of the sentence would indicate.</div></div>
206 <div class="re"><a href="sect16.htm">16</a> #3: At length you come -> At length, you come <div class="cm jb">Short adverbial phrase, comma unnecessary</div></div>
207 <div class="section"><a name="sect17">sect17</a></div>
208 <div class="cn"><a href="sect17.htm">17</a> #1: is grey-bearded man -> is a grey-bearded man</div>
209 <div class="section"><a name="sect18">sect18</a></div>
210 <div class="section"><a name="sect19">sect19</a></div>
211 <div class="ce"><a href="sect19.htm">19</a> #1: a sudden massive bolt -> a sudden, massive bolt</div>
212 <div class="re"><a href="sect19.htm">19</a> #2: energy which buckles -> energy that buckles <div class="cm jb">"which" is fine here</div></div>
213 <div class="ce"><a href="sect19.htm">19</a> #3: erect a psi-screen to protect -> erect a Psi-screen to protect</div>
214 <div class="section"><a name="sect20">sect20</a></div>
215 <div class="re"><a href="sect20.htm">20</a> #1: Vashna's Dagger -> Vashna's dagger <div class="cm ks">Unless the abbreviation of the Dagger of Vashna receives caps because it's a special item.</div> <div class="cm dd">the point of the capitalisation is so players know whether or not they can pick up the Item in question and add it to their Action Chart</div> <div class="cm jb">It's like the Sommerswerd - someday I hope to make some other distintion with items rather than capitalization, too much confusion</div></div>
216 <div class="re"><a href="sect20.htm">20</a> #2: "from the tip of Vashna's Dagger" -> "from the tip of Vashna's dagger?" <div class="cm jb">See #1</div></div>
217 <div class="section"><a name="sect21">sect21</a></div>
218 <div class="re"><a href="sect21.htm">21</a> #1: city guard never patrol -> city guards never patrol <div class="cm tp">"City guard" can refer to a unit of guardsmen, as well as its members.</div></div>
219 <div class="ce"><a href="sect21.htm">21</a> #2: open doorway and the -> open doorway, and the <div class="cm tp">Both work fine without commas, to my reading.</div> <div class="cm jb">comma necessary to separate independant clauses.</div></div>
220 <div class="cf"><a href="sect21.htm">21</a> #3: This section assumes you have 1 GC, but you may have spent all your money already...</div>
221 <div class="section"><a name="sect22">sect22</a></div>
222 <div class="section"><a name="sect23">sect23</a></div>
223 <div class="ce"><a href="sect23.htm">23</a> #1: your sixth sense, -> your Sixth Sense, <div class="cm ks">This Discipline was always capitalized in the earlier books.</div> <div class="cm tp">If it were any other Discipline, I'd agree, and if it were anyone but a Kai Lord, I'd disagree. As it is, it's hard to say. Unlike other Disciplines, it works fine without a capital, and drawing attention to it serves no purpose--Sixth Sense is assumed at this point, and so this is just flavour text. As such, I think it works better without capitals.</div> <div class="cm jb">There are other examples where other assumed Disciplines are used and capitalized. The safe answer is to capitalize this one to fend off the impression of a mistake.</div></div>
224 <div class="section"><a name="sect24">sect24</a></div>
225 <div class="section"><a name="sect25">sect25</a></div>
226 <div class="ce"><a href="sect25.htm">25</a> #1: The brigands give chase but they soon lose you among the dense pines and they give up the pursuit. -> The brigands give chase but they soon lose you among the dense pines and give up the pursuit. <div class="cm ks">No need to repeat the subject pronoun, IMO.</div> <div class="cm jb">The brigands give chase, but they soon lose you among the dense pines and give up the pursuit.</div></div>
227 <div class="ce"><a href="sect25.htm">25</a> #2: Rather than fight them you decide it better to escape whilst you still can and so you take to your heels, pausing only to snatch up the captain's satchel as you leave. -> Rather than fight them, you decide it better to escape whilst you still can; you take to your heels, pausing only to snatch up the captain's satchel as you leave. <div class="cm ks">Reads like a run-on sentence, although it may be fine grammatically.</div> <div class="cm tp">Reads well enough to me, though it could perhaps do with a comma after "fight them".</div> <div class="cm jb">With one exception - a new sentence instead of a semicolon.</div></div>
228 <div class="re"><a href="sect25.htm">25</a> #3: brigand captain -> Brigand Captain <div class="cm so">not sure about this one</div> <div class="cm jb">According to our manual of style, "Captain" only when before person's name, not on its own.</div></div>
229 <div class="section"><a name="sect26">sect26</a></div>
230 <div class="section"><a name="sect27">sect27</a></div>
231 <div class="section"><a name="sect28">sect28</a></div>
232 <div class="section"><a name="sect29">sect29</a></div>
233 <div class="ce"><a href="sect29.htm">29</a> #1: 'You will not escape this time,' shouts Cadak, as if he has been reading your mind. 'Not while I am alive.' -> 'You will not escape this time!' shouts Cadak, as if he has been reading your mind. 'Not while I am alive!' <div class="cm ks">Since he's shouting, shouldn't this be imperative?</div> <div class="cm tp">The exclamation mark isn't mandatory, and it actually strikes me as redundant since we're told he's shouting anyway.</div></div>
234 <div class="ce"><a href="sect29.htm">29</a> #2: second strike an umbrella -> second strike, an umbrella <div class="cm tp">Both work fine without commas, to my reading.</div></div>
235 <div class="ce"><a href="sect29.htm">29</a> #3: Bow and arrow -> Bow and Arrow</div>
236 <div class="section"><a name="sect30">sect30</a></div>
237 <div class="ce"><a href="sect30.htm">30</a> #1: Remove "or higher" <div class="cm jb">Sun Lord is highest rank possible for this book.</div></div>
238 <div class="section"><a name="sect31">sect31</a></div>
239 <div class="ce"><a href="sect31.htm">31</a> #1: prey on which -> prey with which <div class="cm tp">Both are acceptable, "on which to feed" is a rearrangement of the verb "to feed on".</div></div>
240 <div class="ce"><a href="sect31.htm">31</a> #2: life force -> life-force <div class="cm ik">as in the PAMoS</div></div>
241 <div class="section"><a name="sect32">sect32</a></div>
242 <div class="re"><a href="sect32.htm">32</a> #1: plateau which is -> plateau that is <div class="cm ks">*or* plateau, which is</div> <div class="cm tp">Disagreed. This is IMO one of those technical rules like not ending a sentence with a preposition.</div> <div class="cm jb"><a href="http://www.wsu.edu/~brians/errors/which.html">http://www.wsu.edu/~brians/errors/which.html</a></div></div>
243 <div class="section"><a name="sect33">sect33</a></div>
244 <div class="ce"><a href="sect33.htm">33</a> #1: huntmastery -> Huntmastery <div class="cm tp">capitalise discipline name</div></div>
245 <div class="ce"><a href="sect33.htm">33</a> #2: swarthy-face villain -> swarthy-faced villain</div>
246 <div class="re"><a href="sect33.htm">33</a> #3: Magnakai skill of huntmastery -> Magnakai skill of Huntmastery <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
247 <div class="section"><a name="sect34">sect34</a></div>
248 <div class="ce"><a href="sect34.htm">34</a> #1: Kraagenskul -> Kraagenskûl</div>
249 <div class="section"><a name="sect35">sect35</a></div>
250 <div class="section"><a name="sect36">sect36</a></div>
251 <div class="ce"><a href="sect36.htm">36</a> #1: Vortex -> Vortexi <div class="cm tp">as elsewhere in this section and others</div></div>
252 <div class="cf"><a href="sect36.htm">36</a> #2: <div class="cm cjl">Is this Endurance boost meant to be a permanent addition to your current score, or merely a buffer that prevents up to 5 damage from occurring in this battle alone? Why would possessing the Sommerswerd heal you in this situation? Soaking up the psychic rays or something?</div><div class="cm dd">Good point. The text does explicitly state that the Combat Skill bonus is only for the duration of the fight, and then the next sentance speaks of the Endurance bonus (with no "only for the duration of this fight" caveat) - moreover, there'd be little practical point having an +5 EP bonus which only lasted for the duration of a fight, because if you really did win the fight with less than 5 EP left, and then took away the bonus 5EP in the next section, you'd be dead! /laughs/ So - that can't possibly be the intention. The question is then, is the +5EP an addition to your basic EP score? Or is it just a normal +5EP, as if you'd just swigged a potion of laumspur? (which means that your EP total can't go above the original). The former is quite a special situation - it would surely be flagged as such in the text, and it seems implausible that simply wielding the Sommerswerd against this enemy would permanently increase your EP total by 5! So it must be the rather mundane latter scenario. It is definately confusing - it's the word "add" which does it - usually the word "restore" is used. How about this footnote: If you possess the Sommerswerd, restore 5 ENDURANCE points to your total before the combat begins. Remember that your number of ENDURANCE points cannot rise above the number you have when you start the adventure." (Not sure if the second sentance is the best way to phrase this <div class="cm ">since you could find a special item which gave you an extra few ENDURANCE points beyond the basic score you rolled at the start of the adventure</div> but I've lifted it directly from 'The Game Rules' page 18 of the 16tLoV.)</div><div class="cm so">I would imagine this is purely for the duration of the combat. If, during the combat, you lose less than 5 EPs, you must reduce your EP total to your original amount before the battle. If you lose 5 or more, leave your EP score unchanged.</div> <div class="cm jb">The originally published edition of this book instructed you to add 5 points to your ENDURANCE score. We believe that our alteration to specify restoration instead of addition is closer to the intent of the author. The original led to several questions. Would this additional score be a permanent increase of your maximum ENDURANCE? Permanent alterations of basic scores in the middle of an adventure are rare making this option unlikely. Nor does the context support this conclusion. Then would this addition only be for the duration of the combat similar to the bonus to COMBAT SKILL? This makes the bonus useless. If you were to complete the combat with fewer than 5 ENDURANCE points remaining and then removed the bonus after the combat was over, you would be just as dead as without the bonus. Another proposal was that you should remove the bonus from your score only if it leaves your score above the normal maximum after the combat. Although reasonable, this probably wasn't the intent of the author since he didn't specify this procedure. We have opted for the simplest, most straightforward choice: that this is just a restorative effect.</div></div>
253 <div class="rf"><a href="sect36.htm">36</a> #3: <div class="cm ded">If you possess the Sommerswerd, restore 5 ENDURANCE points to your total before the combat begins. Remember that your number of ENDURANCE points cannot rise above the number you have when you start the adventure.</div> <div class="cm jb">see #2</div></div>
254 <div class="ce"><a href="sect36.htm">36</a> #4: vortexi -> Vortexi</div>
255 <div class="section"><a name="sect37">sect37</a></div>
256 <div class="section"><a name="sect38">sect38</a></div>
257 <div class="section"><a name="sect39">sect39</a></div>
258 <div class="ce"><a href="sect39.htm">39</a> #1: six rounds, by turning -> six rounds by turning</div>
259 <div class="ce"><a href="sect39.htm">39</a> #2: Magnakai curing skills -> Magnakai Curing skills</div>
260 <div class="ce"><a href="sect39.htm">39</a> #3: Vakovarian brigands -> Vakovarian Brigands</div>
261 <div class="section"><a name="sect40">sect40</a></div>
262 <div class="ce"><a href="sect40.htm">40</a> #1: 'Lightning Hand' -> Lightning Hand <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
263 <div class="section"><a name="sect41">sect41</a></div>
264 <div class="section"><a name="sect42">sect42</a></div>
265 <div class="cn"><a href="sect42.htm">42</a> #1: Grand Huntmastery and have reached <div class="cm so">italicise and</div></div>
266 <div class="section"><a name="sect43">sect43</a></div>
267 <div class="section"><a name="sect44">sect44</a></div>
268 <div class="ce"><a href="sect44.htm">44</a> #1: the light and in its dim -> the light, and in its dim</div>
269 <div class="re"><a href="sect44.htm">44</a> #2: Confidently you walk -> Confidently, you walk</div>
270 <div class="ce"><a href="sect44.htm">44</a> #3: A dim blue vista -> A dim, blue vista</div>
271 <div class="ce"><a href="sect44.htm">44</a> #7: streches -> stretches</div>
272 <div class="section"><a name="sect45">sect45</a></div>
273 <div class="re"><a href="sect45.htm">45</a> #1: region; -> region <div class="cm tp">stray semicolon</div> <div class="cm jb">redundant with #4</div></div>
274 <div class="ce"><a href="sect45.htm">45</a> #2: says, as he places -> says as he places</div>
275 <div class="re"><a href="sect45.htm">45</a> #3: near to a tributary -> near a tributary <div class="cm ks">Sounds better (IMO)</div> <div class="cm so">The original wording seems OK to me, but . . .</div> <div class="cm dd">"Near TO a tributary" scans better when read out loud</div></div>
276 <div class="re"><a href="sect45.htm">45</a> #4: this region; has been -> this region has been <div class="cm ks">This semi-colon appears to be a comma with an ink-smudge above it, a bit too far to the right to have been intended as a dot. Anyone else agree? Either way, it doesn't belong.</div> <div class="cm so">An odd one. I'd suggest that it isn't actually supposed to be a semi-colon at all, in which case this is "ne", but it should certainly be changed.</div> <div class="cm jb">noted the smudge in the errata list</div></div>
277 <div class="re"><a href="sect45.htm">45</a> #5: storms which have swept -> storms that have swept</div>
278 <div class="re"><a href="sect45.htm">45</a> #6: parchment which he spreads -> parchment, which he spreads</div>
279 <div class="re"><a href="sect45.htm">45</a> #7: says, as he places -> says as he places <div class="cm jb">redundant with #2</div></div>
280 <div class="rn"><a href="sect45.htm">45</a> #8: map <div class="cm so">encode as link to map?</div> <div class="cm jb">I don't think this really refers to the map given in the book.</div></div>
281 <div class="section"><a name="sect46">sect46</a></div>
282 <div class="ce"><a href="sect46.htm">46</a> #1: vortexi -> Vortexi <div class="cm ik">as elsewhere</div></div>
283 <div class="section"><a name="sect47">sect47</a></div>
284 <div class="section"><a name="sect48">sect48</a></div>
285 <div class="ce"><a href="sect48.htm">48</a> #1: Black corvayl -> Black Corvayl</div>
286 <div class="ce"><a href="sect48.htm">48</a> #2: bow -> Bow</div>
287 <div class="ce"><a href="sect48.htm">48</a> #3: arrow -> Arrow</div>
288 <div class="section"><a name="sect49">sect49</a></div>
289 <div class="re"><a href="sect49.htm">49</a> #1: engraving which depicts -> engraving, which depicts</div>
290 <div class="section"><a name="sect50">sect50</a></div>
291 <div class="ce"><a href="sect50.htm">50</a> #1: dodge them they swirl -> dodge them, they swirl</div>
292 <div class="section"><a name="sect51">sect51</a></div>
293 <div class="ce"><a href="sect51.htm">51</a> #1: Magnakai discipline of Nexus -> Magnakai Discipline of Nexus</div>
294 <div class="section"><a name="sect52">sect52</a></div>
295 <div class="ce"><a href="sect52.htm">52</a> #1: six rounds, by turning -> six rounds by turning</div>
296 <div class="ce"><a href="sect52.htm">52</a> #2: psychic ability that -> psychic abilities that <div class="cm ks">Sounds better, at least IMO. Anyone else?</div> <div class="cm so">A case could certainly be made for this change.</div></div>
297 <div class="section"><a name="sect53">sect53</a></div>
298 <div class="section"><a name="sect54">sect54</a></div>
299 <div class="ce"><a href="sect54.htm">54</a> #1: invisibility yet it -> invisibility, yet it</div>
300 <div class="cf"><a href="sect54.htm">54</a> #2: Should Arch Druid Cadak be immune to Mindblast and Psi-surge? The wording of the section would seem to suggest that he is. <div class="cm so">This was first mentioned by Andrew Godfrey in April 2003. He wrote: "Also, as a rules point on the fight with Cadak - should he not be immune to Mind Blast and Psi-Surge? This is not a transcription error - just a consideration of a few other points. Firstly, in Bk13, the Cener High Priest that you fight is immune to both, and Cadak is surely just a more powerful version of him. Secondly, if you attack him with Kai Surge in passage 267, it says his 'inner mind is well-shielded.'</div> <div class="cm jb">I can see the case for this, but does this rise above the threshold where we can say this with any weight of authority? Maybe a footnote here and in the other sections where you fight him?</div></div>
301 <div class="section"><a name="sect55">sect55</a></div>
302 <div class="re"><a href="sect55.htm">55</a> #1: acolytes -> Acolytes <div class="cm tp">capitalise as name of the order, Acolytes of Vashna</div></div>
303 <div class="section"><a name="sect56">sect56</a></div>
304 <div class="re"><a href="sect56.htm">56</a> #1: second storey -> second story <div class="cm so">This isn't actually an error, but the UK-english spelling. It shouldn't be changed. Though the reverse confused me many times when I read US-published books until I discovered the variant spelling was also accurate! ;-)</div></div>
305 <div class="ce"><a href="sect56.htm">56</a> #2: eagle eyes -> eagle-eyes</div>
306 <div class="section"><a name="sect57">sect57</a></div>
307 <div class="ce"><a href="sect57.htm">57</a> #1: Brotherhood spell Net -> Brotherhood Spell Net <div class="cm ks">Should we be capitalizing Spell after Brotherhood like we do Discipline after Grand Master?</div> <div class="cm jb">yes</div></div>
308 <div class="ce"><a href="sect57.htm">57</a> #2: 'Net' -> Net <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
309 <div class="section"><a name="sect58">sect58</a></div>
310 <div class="section"><a name="sect59">sect59</a></div>
311 <div class="re"><a href="sect59.htm">59</a> #1: safety and mindful -> safety, and mindful <div class="cm jb">part of the same long clause</div></div>
312 <div class="ce"><a href="sect59.htm">59</a> #2: bandits and you have to -> bandits, and you have to</div>
313 <div class="section"><a name="sect60">sect60</a></div>
314 <div class="ce"><a href="sect60.htm">60</a> #1: ascend but you -> ascend, but you</div>
315 <div class="ce"><a href="sect60.htm">60</a> #2: hard pressed -> hard-pressed <div class="cm ik">as in the PAMoS</div></div>
316 <div class="section"><a name="sect61">sect61</a></div>
317 <div class="ce"><a href="sect61.htm">61</a> #1: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship <div class="cm tp">this one's debatable--used as discipline name or not?</div></div>
318 <div class="re"><a href="sect61.htm">61</a> #2: outcrop which overlooks -> outcrop, which overlooks</div>
319 <div class="re"><a href="sect61.htm">61</a> #3: pathsmanship skills -> Pathsmanship skills <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
320 <div class="ce"><a href="sect61.htm">61</a> #4: peak but you -> peak, buy you <div class="cm so">^_^ I think you mean: peak but you -> peak, but you</div></div>
321 <div class="section"><a name="sect62">sect62</a></div>
322 <div class="re"><a href="sect62.htm">62</a> #1: reach to your belt -> reach for your belt <div class="cm ks">Sounds awkward, to me anyway.</div> <div class="cm jb">I agree it's unusual, but not incorrect.</div></div>
323 <div class="ce"><a href="sect62.htm">62</a> #2: gods -> Gods <div class="cm so">maybe?</div></div>
324 <div class="section"><a name="sect63">sect63</a></div>
325 <div class="ce"><a href="sect63.htm">63</a> #1: shadow gate -> Shadow Gate</div>
326 <div class="section"><a name="sect64">sect64</a></div>
327 <div class="ce"><a href="sect64.htm">64</a> #1: huntmastery -> Huntmastery <div class="cm ik">disciple</div></div>
328 <div class="ce"><a href="sect64.htm">64</a> #2: streets and a square -> streets, and a square</div>
329 <div class="ce"><a href="sect64.htm">64</a> #3: desolate but it -> desolate, but it</div>
330 <div class="re"><a href="sect64.htm">64</a> #4: skill of huntmastery -> skill of Huntmastery <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
331 <div class="section"><a name="sect65">sect65</a></div>
332 <div class="section"><a name="sect66">sect66</a></div>
333 <div class="re"><a href="sect66.htm">66</a> #1: storms and has -> storms, and has <div class="cm jb">same clause - no comma</div></div>
334 <div class="section"><a name="sect67">sect67</a></div>
335 <div class="ce"><a href="sect67.htm">67</a> #1: base of a gulley -> base of a gully</div>
336 <div class="section"><a name="sect68">sect68</a></div>
337 <div class="section"><a name="sect69">sect69</a></div>
338 <div class="section"><a name="sect70">sect70</a></div>
339 <div class="section"><a name="sect71">sect71</a></div>
340 <div class="ce"><a href="sect71.htm">71</a> #1: Brotherhood spell -> Brotherhood Spell <div class="cm ks">Capitalize like "Discipline"?</div></div>
341 <div class="ce"><a href="sect71.htm">71</a> #2: 'Counterspell' -> Counterspell <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
342 <div class="section"><a name="sect72">sect72</a></div>
343 <div class="ce"><a href="sect72.htm">72</a> #1: a shadow gate. Her -> a Shadow Gate. Her <div class="cm ks">Again, this is usually capitalized, although apparently not in this book.</div> <div class="cm so">I think Shadow Gate is always capitalised, yeah.</div></div>
344 <div class="ce"><a href="sect72.htm">72</a> #2: closing of the shadow gate and you -> closing of the Shadow Gate, and you <div class="cm ks">Most instances of this that I've seen are capitalized, also feels like it needs a comma. Peregrine may disagree with the second suggestion. ;)</div> <div class="cm so">I think Shadow Gate is always capitalised, yeah.</div></div>
345 <div class="ce"><a href="sect72.htm">72</a> #3: successful summonation -> successful summoning <div class="cm ks">Or perhaps successful resurrection?</div> <div class="cm so">I think summoning is a better alternative (summonation??).</div></div>
346 <div class="ce"><a href="sect72.htm">72</a> #4: downpour you can -> downpour, you can</div>
347 <div class="section"><a name="sect73">sect73</a></div>
348 <div class="ce"><a href="sect73.htm">73</a> #1: flood you lose -> flood, you lose</div>
349 <div class="ce"><a href="sect73.htm">73</a> #2: edge of the gulley. -> edge of the gully.</div>
350 <div class="ce"><a href="sect73.htm">73</a> #3: along the gulley, -> along the gully,</div>
351 <div class="section"><a name="sect74">sect74</a></div>
352 <div class="ce"><a href="sect74.htm">74</a> #1: strong and you fear -> strong, and you fear</div>
353 <div class="section"><a name="sect75">sect75</a></div>
354 <div class="re"><a href="sect75.htm">75</a> #1: We wern't after -> We weren't after <div class="cm ks">This might be part of the 'dialect' of the brigand, but I can't imagine eliminating a silent vowel to do so. I think it's an error.</div> <div class="cm so">I agree!</div> <div class="cm jb">I agree it doesn't make sense when read aloud, but on the printed page it does serve the purpose of emphasizing his vulgarity (to use an archaic meaning of the word).</div></div>
355 <div class="ce"><a href="sect75.htm">75</a> #2: arm lock and demand -> armlock and demand</div>
356 <div class="re"><a href="sect75.htm">75</a> #3: wern't -> weren't <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
357 <div class="section"><a name="sect76">sect76</a></div>
358 <div class="ce"><a href="sect76.htm">76</a> #1: Kai camouflage skills -> Kai Camouflage skills <div class="cm ks">This is an iffy one. I would definitely say to capitalize it if 'skills' were singular, but since it's plural, I'm just not sure. Have at it! :)</div></div>
359 <div class="section"><a name="sect77">sect77</a></div>
360 <div class="ce"><a href="sect77.htm">77</a> #1: furrier's -> furriers' <div class="cm ik">as in 161, 174</div></div>
361 <div class="section"><a name="sect78">sect78</a></div>
362 <div class="section"><a name="sect79">sect79</a></div>
363 <div class="re"><a href="sect79.htm">79</a> #1: dais or the Deathstaff -> dais, or the Deathstaff</div>
364 <div class="section"><a name="sect80">sect80</a></div>
365 <div class="ce"><a href="sect80.htm">80</a> #1: huntmastery -> Huntmastery <div class="cm ik">disciple</div></div>
366 <div class="ce"><a href="sect80.htm">80</a> #2: desolate but it is -> desolate, but it is</div>
367 <div class="section"><a name="sect81">sect81</a></div>
368 <div class="section"><a name="sect82">sect82</a></div>
369 <div class="re"><a href="sect82.htm">82</a> #1: deck and the -> deck, then the <div class="cm ks">Repetetive use of "and"</div> <div class="cm jb">see #3</div></div>
370 <div class="re"><a href="sect82.htm">82</a> #2: Weapons -> Weapons <div class="cm so">not sure about this</div> <div class="cm jb">I assume you meant "Weapons -> Weapon". I assume that you lose both weapons when you drop your belt, you're not just handing over one weapon.</div></div>
371 <div class="ce"><a href="sect82.htm">82</a> #3: deck and the -> deck, and the <div class="cm jb">two separate clauses</div></div>
372 <div class="section"><a name="sect83">sect83</a></div>
373 <div class="ce"><a href="sect83.htm">83</a> #1: Kai Grand Guardian, turn to 36. -> Kai Grand Guardian or higher, turn to 36.</div>
374 <div class="ce"><a href="sect83.htm">83</a> #2: Kai Grand Guardian, turn to 103. -> Kai Grand Guardian or higher, turn to 103.</div>
375 <div class="ce"><a href="sect83.htm">83</a> #3: vortexi -> Vortexi</div>
376 <div class="section"><a name="sect84">sect84</a></div>
377 <div class="ce"><a href="sect84.htm">84</a> #1: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship <div class="cm tp">not so debatable, capitalise discipline name</div></div>
378 <div class="ce"><a href="sect84.htm">84</a> #2: Kai pathsmanship skill -> Magnakai Pathsmanship skill <div class="cm ks">Or at least "Kai Pathsmanship skill" if nothing else is changed.</div></div>
379 <div class="ce"><a href="sect84.htm">84</a> #3: The Black Talisman is called Black Amulet everywhere else in this book! (I.e. sections 178, 294 and 323.)</div>
380 <div class="section"><a name="sect85">sect85</a></div>
381 <div class="section"><a name="sect86">sect86</a></div>
382 <div class="ce"><a href="sect86.htm">86</a> #1: Brotherhood spell Sense Evil -> Brotherhood Spell Sense Evil</div>
383 <div class="ce"><a href="sect86.htm">86</a> #2: 'Sense Evil' -> Sense Evil <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
384 <div class="section"><a name="sect87">sect87</a></div>
385 <div class="ce"><a href="sect87.htm">87</a> #1: Durncrag scavengers -> Durncrag Scavengers</div>
386 <div class="section"><a name="sect88">sect88</a></div>
387 <div class="cn"><a href="sect88.htm">88</a> #1: clack! needs encoding as onomatopoeia.</div>
388 <div class="ce"><a href="sect88.htm">88</a> #2: arrow -> Arrow</div>
389 <div class="ce"><a href="sect88.htm">88</a> #3: arrow -> Arrow</div>
390 <div class="section"><a name="sect89">sect89</a></div>
391 <div class="section"><a name="sect90">sect90</a></div>
392 <div class="re"><a href="sect90.htm">90</a> #1: ice which stretches -> ice, which stretches</div>
393 <div class="ce"><a href="sect90.htm">90</a> #2: drop and the great -> drop, and the great</div>
394 <div class="section"><a name="sect91">sect91</a></div>
395 <div class="ce"><a href="sect91.htm">91</a> #1: dawn the storm -> dawn, the storm</div>
396 <div class="section"><a name="sect92">sect92</a></div>
397 <div class="ce"><a href="sect92.htm">92</a> #1: shadow gate -> Shadow Gate</div>
398 <div class="section"><a name="sect93">sect93</a></div>
399 <div class="section"><a name="sect94">sect94</a></div>
400 <div class="cn"><a href="sect94.htm">94</a> #1: Crack! needs encoding as onomatopoeia.</div>
401 <div class="section"><a name="sect95">sect95</a></div>
402 <div class="section"><a name="sect96">sect96</a></div>
403 <div class="ce"><a href="sect96.htm">96</a> #1: heat and shock of the explosion rips -> heat and shock ofthe explosion rip <div class="cm ks">I believe it's the 'heat and shock' that are doing the ripping, instead of the 'explosion'. </div></div>
404 <div class="ce"><a href="sect96.htm">96</a> #2: flame and suddenly -> flame; suddenly <div class="cm ks">Feels like a run-on.</div></div>
405 <div class="section"><a name="sect97">sect97</a></div>
406 <div class="ce"><a href="sect97.htm">97</a> #1: Kai Blast -> Kai -Blast or Kai-blast <div class="cm ks">I know Joe lists it as Kai-Blast elsewhere, but considering the rules for Kai-surge and Psi-surge I imagine it should be lower case for the 'blast' part.</div></div>
407 <div class="re"><a href="sect97.htm">97</a> #2: Kai Blast -> Kai-blast <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
408 <div class="re"><a href="sect97.htm">97</a> #3: Kai Blast -> Kai-blast <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
409 <div class="section"><a name="sect98">sect98</a></div>
410 <div class="ce"><a href="sect98.htm">98</a> #1: one his brutish -> one, his brutish</div>
411 <div class="section"><a name="sect99">sect99</a></div>
412 <div class="ce"><a href="sect99.htm">99</a> #1: rounds, by turning -> rounds by turning</div>
413 <div class="ce"><a href="sect99.htm">99</a> #2: Knight, or higher, -> Knight or higher</div>
414 <div class="ce"><a href="sect99.htm">99</a> #3: jackals -> Jackals <div class="cm so">x4</div></div>
415 <div class="ce"><a href="sect99.htm">99</a> #4: Vorndarol jackals -> Vorndarol Jackals <div class="cm jb">I missed the "x4" in #3 - now fixed</div></div>
416 <div class="section"><a name="sect100">sect100</a></div>
417 <div class="re"><a href="sect100.htm">100</a> #1: t'is -> 'tis <div class="cm tp">apostrophe at the point of contraction</div></div>
418 <div class="ce"><a href="sect100.htm">100</a> #2: 'At first I, too, made -> 'At first, I too made</div>
419 <div class="re"><a href="sect100.htm">100</a> #3: 'Aye, t'is so,' -> Aye, 'tis so,' <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
420 <div class="re"><a href="sect100.htm">100</a> #4: t'is -> 'tis <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
421 <div class="section"><a name="sect101">sect101</a></div>
422 <div class="section"><a name="sect102">sect102</a></div>
423 <div class="ce"><a href="sect102.htm">102</a> #1: investigate and your Kai -> investigate. Your Kai <div class="cm ks">Sounds like a run-on, IMO.</div></div>
424 <div class="re"><a href="sect102.htm">102</a> #2: Silently you draw -> Silently, you draw <div class="cm jb">Clause is short enough to not need comma.</div></div>
425 <div class="section"><a name="sect103">sect103</a></div>
426 <div class="ce"><a href="sect103.htm">103</a> #1: vortexi -> Vortexi</div>
427 <div class="cf"><a href="sect103.htm">103</a> #2: Endurance bonus <div class="cm so">I would imagine this is purely for the duration of the combat. If, during the combat, you lose less than 5 EPs, you must reduce your EP total to your original amount before the battle. If you lose 5 or more, leave your EP score unchanged.</div> <div class="cm jb">See 36 #2.</div></div>
428 <div class="cn"><a href="sect103.htm">103</a> #3: If you possess the Sommerswerd, restor 5 points to your ENDURANCE score <div class="cm js">should be restore</div></div>
429 <div class="cf"><a href="sect103.htm">103</a> #4: If you possess the Sommerswerd, add 5 to your ENDURANCE points score. -> If you possess the Sommerswerd, restore 5 points to your ENDURANCE score.</div>
430 <div class="cn"><a href="sect103.htm">103</a> #5: restor -> restore</div>
431 <div class="cn"><a href="sect103.htm">103</a> #6: restor -> restore <div class="cm ik">according to the EC this has already been fixed</div> <div class="cm jb">done</div></div>
432 <div class="section"><a name="sect104">sect104</a></div>
433 <div class="ce"><a href="sect104.htm">104</a> #1: gulley -> gully <div class="cm ik">as elsewhere</div></div>
434 <div class="section"><a name="sect105">sect105</a></div>
435 <div class="re"><a href="sect105.htm">105</a> #1: destoyed -> destroyed</div>
436 <div class="re"><a href="sect105.htm">105</a> #2: experience at Vakovar -> experience in Vakovar</div>
437 <div class="re"><a href="sect105.htm">105</a> #3: beggar-city -> beggar city <div class="cm jb">Hyphenation in compound noun-noun OK.</div></div>
438 <div class="ce"><a href="sect105.htm">105</a> #4: Citystate -> City-state <div class="cm so">not sure about this one</div></div>
439 <div class="section"><a name="sect106">sect106</a></div>
440 <div class="ce"><a href="sect106.htm">106</a> #1: life force -> life-force <div class="cm ik">as in the PAMoS</div></div>
441 <div class="section"><a name="sect107">sect107</a></div>
442 <div class="cn"><a href="sect107.htm">107</a> #1: the, churning water. -> the churning water.</div>
443 <div class="ce"><a href="sect107.htm">107</a> #2: 'Invisible Fist' -> Invisible Fist <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
444 <div class="cn"><a href="sect107.htm">107</a> #3: amidst the, churning -> amidst the churning</div>
445 <div class="section"><a name="sect108">sect108</a></div>
446 <div class="ce"><a href="sect108.htm">108</a> #1: hesitation he picks -> hesitation, he picks</div>
447 <div class="section"><a name="sect109">sect109</a></div>
448 <div class="ce"><a href="sect109.htm">109</a> #1: bow -> Bow <div class="cm ">x2</div></div>
449 <div class="ce"><a href="sect109.htm">109</a> #2: arrow -> Arrow <div class="cm ">x2</div></div>
450 <div class="section"><a name="sect110">sect110</a></div>
451 <div class="ce"><a href="sect110.htm">110</a> #1: shadow gate beneath -> Shadow Gate beneath</div>
452 <div class="cf"><a href="sect110.htm">110</a> #2: This is the correct answer to the Crystal Dais code puzzle in Section 235.</div>
453 <div class="ce"><a href="sect110.htm">110</a> #3: shadow gate -> Shadow Gate</div>
454 <div class="section"><a name="sect111">sect111</a></div>
455 <div class="ce"><a href="sect111.htm">111</a> #1: Sun Lord, or higher, -> Sun Lord or higher, <div class="cm ks">May even be able to remove "or higher" altogether, since that is the highest rank available at this point.</div> <div class="cm jb">removed or higher</div></div>
456 <div class="section"><a name="sect112">sect112</a></div>
457 <div class="cf"><a href="sect112.htm">112</a> #1: Unless you possess Grand Huntmastery, you must eat 2 meals or lose 6 ENDURANCE points. -> Unless you possess Grand Huntmastery, you must eat 2 Meals or lose 6 ENDURANCE points. <div class="cm ks">Should there be a note about the option to eat one meal and lose only 3 EP?</div></div>
458 <div class="ce"><a href="sect112.htm">112</a> #2: shore and you are -> shore, and you are</div>
459 <div class="ce"><a href="sect112.htm">112</a> #3: jackals -> Jackals <div class="cm ">x2</div> <div class="cm jb">I may reconsider this someday: "Jackals" in a sentence seems too much.</div></div>
460 <div class="section"><a name="sect113">sect113</a></div>
461 <div class="ce"><a href="sect113.htm">113</a> #1: chase but they -> chase, but they</div>
462 <div class="ce"><a href="sect113.htm">113</a> #2: still can and so you -> still can; you take <div class="cm ks">Or add a comma after "fight them", near the beginning of the sentence. I think this came up before. . .</div> <div class="cm jb">Comma after "them" and "can", removed comma after "heels".</div></div>
463 <div class="ce"><a href="sect113.htm">113</a> #3: yourself off-balance. -> yourself off balance</div>
464 <div class="re"><a href="sect113.htm">113</a> #4: brigand captain -> Brigand Captain <div class="cm so">not sure about this</div></div>
465 <div class="section"><a name="sect114">sect114</a></div>
466 <div class="section"><a name="sect115">sect115</a></div>
467 <div class="section"><a name="sect116">sect116</a></div>
468 <div class="section"><a name="sect117">sect117</a></div>
469 <div class="re"><a href="sect117.htm">117</a> #1: hours' uninterrupted sleep -> hours uninterrupted sleep <div class="cm ks">Or "hours of uninterrupted sleep"</div> <div class="cm jb">It may be colloquial, but a counterexample is "a full day's work".</div></div>
470 <div class="section"><a name="sect118">sect118</a></div>
471 <div class="cf"><a href="sect118.htm">118</a> #1: Endurance bonus <div class="cm so">I would imagine this is purely for the duration of the combat. If, during the combat, you lose less than 5 EPs, you must reduce your EP total to your original amount before the battle. If you lose 5 or more, leave your EP score unchanged.</div> <div class="cm jb">cf. 36 #2</div></div>
472 <div class="ce"><a href="sect118.htm">118</a> #2: For possessing the Sommerswerd, add 5 to your ENDURANCE points score. <div class="cm js">I'd make the language match the one above it, just for constistancy's sake (it's the same battle).</div></div>
473 <div class="ce"><a href="sect118.htm">118</a> #3: sun-sword -> Sun-sword <div class="cm cjl">I noticed this, but ignored it, on my first pass through. I had the vague notion that this had come up before and a decision had been made not to capitalize. But since you did in section 166 and 176, here's the heads-up.</div></div>
474 <div class="cf"><a href="sect118.htm">118</a> #4: For possessing the Sommerswerd, add 5 to your ENDURANCE points score. -> For possessing the Sommerswerd, restore 5 points to your ENDURANCE score.</div>
475 <div class="re"><a href="sect118.htm">118</a> #5: sun-sword -> Sun-sword <div class="cm jb">redundant with #3</div></div>
476 <div class="section"><a name="sect119">sect119</a></div>
477 <div class="section"><a name="sect120">sect120</a></div>
478 <div class="ce"><a href="sect120.htm">120</a> #1: bow -> Bow</div>
479 <div class="ce"><a href="sect120.htm">120</a> #2: arrow -> Arrow</div>
480 <div class="section"><a name="sect121">sect121</a></div>
481 <div class="section"><a name="sect122">sect122</a></div>
482 <div class="ce"><a href="sect122.htm">122</a> #1: healing -> Healing <div class="cm so">not sure about this</div></div>
483 <div class="section"><a name="sect123">sect123</a></div>
484 <div class="ce"><a href="sect123.htm">123</a> #1: Brotherhood spell Lightning -> Brotherhood Spell Lightning <div class="cm ks">Like "Kai Discipline"</div></div>
485 <div class="ce"><a href="sect123.htm">123</a> #2: 'Lightning Hand' -> Lightning Hand <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
486 <div class="cf"><a href="sect123.htm">123</a> #3: see 267 re Cadak's immunity to mental attacks.</div>
487 <div class="section"><a name="sect124">sect124</a></div>
488 <div class="ce"><a href="sect124.htm">124</a> #1: adgana -> Adgana <div class="cm ik">as in 07cd and 12tmod</div></div>
489 <div class="ce"><a href="sect124.htm">124</a> #2: long discordant tone. -> long, discordant tone.</div>
490 <div class="section"><a name="sect125">sect125</a></div>
491 <div class="re"><a href="sect125.htm">125</a> #1: reflexes are sleep-dulled -> reflexes are sleep dulled</div>
492 <div class="ce"><a href="sect125.htm">125</a> #2: erect a psi-screen -> erect a Psi-screen</div>
493 <div class="ce"><a href="sect125.htm">125</a> #3: far sinister origin. -> far more sinister origin. <div class="cm ks">Or "more sinister origin."</div></div>
494 <div class="re"><a href="sect125.htm">125</a> #4: psi-screen -> Psi-screen <div class="cm so">not sure about this one; the context makes it an unusual usage.</div> <div class="cm jb">redundant with #2</div></div>
495 <div class="section"><a name="sect126">sect126</a></div>
496 <div class="section"><a name="sect127">sect127</a></div>
497 <div class="ce"><a href="sect127.htm">127</a> #1: If you possess Kai-alchemy, turn to 57. If you do not possess this Grand Master Discipline, turn to 282. <div class="cm ks">Is this even necessary? Obviously the player does, or they couldn't have reached this section to begin with! I think it should say "Turn to 57." at the bottom of the page.</div></div>
498 <div class="ce"><a href="sect127.htm">127</a> #2: Brotherhood spell Levitation you -> Brotherhood Spell Levitation, you</div>
499 <div class="ce"><a href="sect127.htm">127</a> #3: 'Levitation' -> Levitation <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
500 <div class="section"><a name="sect128">sect128</a></div>
501 <div class="ce"><a href="sect128.htm">128</a> #1: keen sixth sense -> keen Sixth Sense</div>
502 <div class="ce"><a href="sect128.htm">128</a> #2: animal control to calm -> Animal Control to calm</div>
503 <div class="re"><a href="sect128.htm">128</a> #3: mountain wolf -> Mountain Wolf <div class="cm jb">Since you never fight the wolf...</div></div>
504 <div class="re"><a href="sect128.htm">128</a> #4: animal control -> Animal Control <div class="cm jb">redundant with #2</div></div>
505 <div class="section"><a name="sect129">sect129</a></div>
506 <div class="ce"><a href="sect129.htm">129</a> #1: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm <div class="cm so">encode as Spell</div></div>
507 <div class="section"><a name="sect130">sect130</a></div>
508 <div class="ce"><a href="sect130.htm">130</a> #1: Vasha -> Vashna</div>
509 <div class="section"><a name="sect131">sect131</a></div>
510 <div class="ce"><a href="sect131.htm">131</a> #1: weapon -> Weapon <div class="cm so">not sure about this</div></div>
511 <div class="section"><a name="sect132">sect132</a></div>
512 <div class="ce"><a href="sect132.htm">132</a> #1: including Kai Blast -> including Kai-blast <div class="cm ks">or Kai-Blast, whichever we've decided on.</div></div>
513 <div class="re"><a href="sect132.htm">132</a> #2: Kai Blast -> Kai-blast <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
514 <div class="section"><a name="sect133">sect133</a></div>
515 <div class="section"><a name="sect134">sect134</a></div>
516 <div class="ce"><a href="sect134.htm">134</a> #1: an acolyte Elder comes -> an Elder comes <div class="cm ks">Does this sound wrong somehow?</div></div>
517 <div class="section"><a name="sect135">sect135</a></div>
518 <div class="cf"><a href="sect135.htm">135</a> #1: see 54 re Cadak's immunities</div>
519 <div class="section"><a name="sect136">sect136</a></div>
520 <div class="ce"><a href="sect136.htm">136</a> #1: Magnakai skills of invisibility -> Magnakai skills of Invisibility</div>
521 <div class="ce"><a href="sect136.htm">136</a> #2: arrow -> Arrow</div>
522 <div class="re"><a href="sect136.htm">136</a> #3: brigand leader -> Brigand Leader <div class="cm so">not sure about this</div> <div class="cm jb">never capitalized in this book, and doesn't rise to high enough status to stand on its own</div></div>
523 <div class="ce"><a href="sect136.htm">136</a> #4: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
524 <div class="section"><a name="sect137">sect137</a></div>
525 <div class="ce"><a href="sect137.htm">137</a> #1: Kai camouflage skills -> Kai Camouflage skills</div>
526 <div class="ce"><a href="sect137.htm">137</a> #2: unconscious and quickly -> unconscious, and quickly</div>
527 <div class="re"><a href="sect137.htm">137</a> #3: camouflage -> Camouflage <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
528 <div class="section"><a name="sect138">sect138</a></div>
529 <div class="ce"><a href="sect138.htm">138</a> #1: vortexi -> Vortexi <div class="cm ik">as elsewhere</div></div>
530 <div class="section"><a name="sect139">sect139</a></div>
531 <div class="re"><a href="sect139.htm">139</a> #1: fire-escape ladder -> fire escape ladder</div>
532 <div class="section"><a name="sect140">sect140</a></div>
533 <div class="ce"><a href="sect140.htm">140</a> #1: battle frenzy -> battle-frenzy <div class="cm ik">as in the PAMoS</div></div>
534 <div class="section"><a name="sect141">sect141</a></div>
535 <div class="ce"><a href="sect141.htm">141</a> #1: shadow gate -> Shadow Gate</div>
536 <div class="section"><a name="sect142">sect142</a></div>
537 <div class="cf"><a href="sect142.htm">142</a> #1: Endurance bonus <div class="cm so">I would imagine this is purely for the duration of the combat. If, during the combat, you lose less than 5 EPs, you must reduce your EP total to your original amount before the battle. If you lose 5 or more, leave your EP score unchanged.</div></div>
538 <div class="section"><a name="sect143">sect143</a></div>
539 <div class="ce"><a href="sect143.htm">143</a> #1: 'we celebrate this -> 'We celebrate this <div class="cm ks">This may be okay, but I imagine it is the beginning of a sentence on the speakers' parts and that it should be capitalized.</div></div>
540 <div class="re"><a href="sect143.htm">143</a> #2: Spluttering candles -> Sputtering candles <div class="cm ks">This may be okay, but the definitions of the latter seem more like what he meant IMO.</div> <div class="cm jb">Not enough of a difference to change this word choice - "splutter" may be an alteration of "sputter" anyway.</div></div>
541 <div class="re"><a href="sect143.htm">143</a> #3: words, 'we -> words, 'We <div class="cm so">cf. sect150</div> <div class="cm jb">redundant with #2</div></div>
542 <div class="cf"><a href="sect143.htm">143</a> #4: You only add 2 if you possess any of the Disciplines. You do not add 4 if you possess two of the Disciplines mentioned.</div>
543 <div class="section"><a name="sect144">sect144</a></div>
544 <div class="ce"><a href="sect144.htm">144</a> #1: vortexi -> Vortexi</div>
545 <div class="ce"><a href="sect144.htm">144</a> #2: Vortexi horde swoop -> Vortexi horde swoops <div class="cm cjl">Although horde refers to multiple Vortexi, the word is singular, so I think swoops is in order.</div></div>
546 <div class="section"><a name="sect145">sect145</a></div>
547 <div class="re"><a href="sect145.htm">145</a> #1: brigand captain's -> Brigand Captain's <div class="cm so">not sure about this one</div></div>
548 <div class="section"><a name="sect146">sect146</a></div>
549 <div class="section"><a name="sect147">sect147</a></div>
550 <div class="section"><a name="sect148">sect148</a></div>
551 <div class="cn"><a href="sect148.htm">148</a> #1: coited -> coiled <div class="cm ik">or something else?</div></div>
552 <div class="rn"><a href="sect148.htm">148</a> #2: a coited heap -> a coiled heap <div class="cm ks">This is correct in the text.</div> <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
553 <div class="section"><a name="sect149">sect149</a></div>
554 <div class="ce"><a href="sect149.htm">149</a> #1: command and suddenly -> command, and suddenly</div>
555 <div class="section"><a name="sect150">sect150</a></div>
556 <div class="re"><a href="sect150.htm">150</a> #1: Spluttering candles dimly -> Sputtering candles dimly <div class="cm ks">Same as entry 143.</div></div>
557 <div class="cf"><a href="sect150.htm">150</a> #2: see ft 143</div>
558 <div class="section"><a name="sect151">sect151</a></div>
559 <div class="section"><a name="sect152">sect152</a></div>
560 <div class="section"><a name="sect153">sect153</a></div>
561 <div class="ce"><a href="sect153.htm">153</a> #1: If you do not possess these skills, or if you have yet to attain the rank of Sun Lord, turn to 232. -> If you do not possess these skills, or if you possess Telegnosis but you have yet to attain the rank of Sun Lord, turn to 232. <div class="cm ks">Seems obvious to me the way it was originally worded what one must do, but I wonder if somebody else might get confused.</div> <div class="cm jb">I almost feel bad simplifying it down so much - feels like throwing away the author's work. *grin*</div></div>
562 <div class="section"><a name="sect154">sect154</a></div>
563 <div class="ce"><a href="sect154.htm">154</a> #1: the rusty guttering -> the rusty gutter <div class="cm ks">"guttering"is a verb, this is clearly used as a noun, hence "gutter" is the proper form of the word.</div></div>
564 <div class="section"><a name="sect155">sect155</a></div>
565 <div class="section"><a name="sect156">sect156</a></div>
566 <div class="section"><a name="sect157">sect157</a></div>
567 <div class="ce"><a href="sect157.htm">157</a> #1: shadow gate -> Shadow Gate</div>
568 <div class="section"><a name="sect158">sect158</a></div>
569 <div class="ce"><a href="sect158.htm">158</a> #1: five rounds, by turning to 276. -> five rounds by turning to 276.</div>
570 <div class="section"><a name="sect159">sect159</a></div>
571 <div class="ce"><a href="sect159.htm">159</a> #1: mind and it makes it impossible -> mind which makes it impossible <div class="cm ks">Sounds repetetive</div></div>
572 <div class="ce"><a href="sect159.htm">159</a> #2: vortexi -> Vortexi</div>
573 <div class="section"><a name="sect160">sect160</a></div>
574 <div class="section"><a name="sect161">sect161</a></div>
575 <div class="ce"><a href="sect161.htm">161</a> #1: If you wish to enter the furrier's shop, turn to 226. ->If you wish to enter the furriers' shop, turn to 226. <div class="cm ks">Might be off-base on this one, but since there are multiple furriers, shouldn't this be pluralized?</div></div>
576 <div class="section"><a name="sect162">sect162</a></div>
577 <div class="ce"><a href="sect162.htm">162</a> #1: vortexi -> Vortexi</div>
578 <div class="re"><a href="sect162.htm">162</a> #2: If you possess Kai-surge, add 4 to this number. If you possess Kai-screen, add 2. If you possess Assimilance, add 1. Also, if your current ENDURANCE points total is 18 or more, add 1; if your current ENDURANCE points total is 17 or less, deduct 1. <div class="cm js">Should be one paragraph, not two.</div> <div class="cm jb">The original seems to be separating discipline bonuses from ENDURANCE bonuses. Reasonable enough.</div></div>
579 <div class="section"><a name="sect163">sect163</a></div>
580 <div class="section"><a name="sect164">sect164</a></div>
581 <div class="cn"><a href="sect164.htm">164</a> #1: legacy of vashna, page 164 and 253, missing dias puzzle illustrations...</div>
582 <div class="rn"><a href="sect164.htm">164</a> #2: There is no grid of numbers <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
583 <div class="rn"><a href="sect164.htm">164</a> #3: Illustration needed after third paragraph. <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
584 <div class="ce"><a href="sect164.htm">164</a> #4: close the shadow gate. -> close the Shadow Gate.</div>
585 <div class="ce"><a href="sect164.htm">164</a> #5: of the shadow gate. -> of the Shadow Gate.</div>
586 <div class="cf"><a href="sect164.htm">164</a> #6: <div class="cm js">It's missing the standard footnote about how you get one chance to go to the numbered section that represents the answer to the riddle</div></div>
587 <div class="section"><a name="sect165">sect165</a></div>
588 <div class="section"><a name="sect166">sect166</a></div>
589 <div class="re"><a href="sect166.htm">166</a> #1: vortex of whirling cloud is -> vortex of whirling cloudsis <div class="cm ks">Sounds better to me, anyone else?</div></div>
590 <div class="ce"><a href="sect166.htm">166</a> #2: here, Kai lord. -> here, Kai Lord.</div>
591 <div class="ce"><a href="sect166.htm">166</a> #3: in our midst,' screams Cadak, -> in our midst!' screams Cadak, <div class="cm ks">I feel his screaming requires an exclamation mark.</div></div>
592 <div class="re"><a href="sect166.htm">166</a> #4: sun-sword -> Sun-sword <div class="cm so">not sure about this one</div></div>
593 <div class="ce"><a href="sect166.htm">166</a> #5: maniacally, 'You -> maniacally. 'You <div class="cm so">not sure about this one</div></div>
594 <div class="re"><a href="sect166.htm">166</a> #6: Kai lord -> Kai Lord <div class="cm jb">redundant with #2</div></div>
595 <div class="cn"><a href="sect166.htm">166</a> #7: Sun-sword -> sun-sword <div class="cm ik">as in the PAMoS; alternatively change the PAMoS and all occurrences (at least 28) in all previous books</div></div>
596 <div class="section"><a name="sect167">sect167</a></div>
597 <div class="ce"><a href="sect167.htm">167</a> #1: Magnakai skills of invisibility -> Magnakai skills of Invisibility</div>
598 <div class="re"><a href="sect167.htm">167</a> #2: invisibility -> Invisibility <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
599 <div class="ce"><a href="sect167.htm">167</a> #3: arrow -> Arrow</div>
600 <div class="re"><a href="sect167.htm">167</a> #4: brigand leader -> Brigand Leader <div class="cm so">not sure about this</div></div>
601 <div class="ce"><a href="sect167.htm">167</a> #5: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
602 <div class="section"><a name="sect168">sect168</a></div>
603 <div class="section"><a name="sect169">sect169</a></div>
604 <div class="cn"><a href="sect169.htm">169</a> #1: plus <div class="cm so">italicise</div></div>
605 <div class="section"><a name="sect170">sect170</a></div>
606 <div class="re"><a href="sect170.htm">170</a> #1: sparks which blister -> sparks that blister</div>
607 <div class="section"><a name="sect171">sect171</a></div>
608 <div class="section"><a name="sect172">sect172</a></div>
609 <div class="section"><a name="sect173">sect173</a></div>
610 <div class="re"><a href="sect173.htm">173</a> #1: later I fancy -> later, I fancy <div class="cm so">not sure about this one</div></div>
611 <div class="section"><a name="sect174">sect174</a></div>
612 <div class="ce"><a href="sect174.htm">174</a> #1: the furrier's shop, -> the furriers' shop <div class="cm ks">As stated elsewhere.</div></div>
613 <div class="section"><a name="sect175">sect175</a></div>
614 <div class="ce"><a href="sect175.htm">175</a> #1: acolytes of Vashna -> Acolytes of Vashna <div class="cm so">unsure about this one</div></div>
615 <div class="section"><a name="sect176">sect176</a></div>
616 <div class="re"><a href="sect176.htm">176</a> #1: sun-sword -> Sun-sword <div class="cm so">unsure about this one</div></div>
617 <div class="cn"><a href="sect176.htm">176</a> #2: Sun-sword -> sun-sword <div class="cm ik">as in the PAMoS; alternatively change the PAMoS and all occurrences (at least 28) in all previous books</div></div>
618 <div class="section"><a name="sect177">sect177</a></div>
619 <div class="section"><a name="sect178">sect178</a></div>
620 <div class="section"><a name="sect179">sect179</a></div>
621 <div class="section"><a name="sect180">sect180</a></div>
622 <div class="ce"><a href="sect180.htm">180</a> #1: paces for you -> paces, for you</div>
623 <div class="ce"><a href="sect180.htm">180</a> #2: bow -> Bow</div>
624 <div class="ce"><a href="sect180.htm">180</a> #3: scavengers -> Scavengers</div>
625 <div class="ce"><a href="sect180.htm">180</a> #4: Durncrag scavengers -> Durncrag Scavengers</div>
626 <div class="section"><a name="sect181">sect181</a></div>
627 <div class="section"><a name="sect182">sect182</a></div>
628 <div class="section"><a name="sect183">sect183</a></div>
629 <div class="ce"><a href="sect183.htm">183</a> #1: arrow -> Arrow <div class="cm ">x2</div></div>
630 <div class="ce"><a href="sect183.htm">183</a> #2: bow -> Bow <div class="cm so">not sure about this one</div></div>
631 <div class="section"><a name="sect184">sect184</a></div>
632 <div class="ce"><a href="sect184.htm">184</a> #1: whom you almost collided with -> with whom you almost collided</div>
633 <div class="section"><a name="sect185">sect185</a></div>
634 <div class="ce"><a href="sect185.htm">185</a> #1: drunkard, when you -> drunkard when you <div class="cm ks">Yes, I'm actually suggesting eliminating a comma for a second time! ;)</div></div>
635 <div class="ce"><a href="sect185.htm">185</a> #2: screwjaws -> screwjaw <div class="cm so">since there is only one of Lone Wolf . . . ?</div> <div class="cm jb">Doubled vision can be a side effect of a life drowning in the Bor Brew.</div></div>
636 <div class="section"><a name="sect186">sect186</a></div>
637 <div class="ce"><a href="sect186.htm">186</a> #1: your tunic, and hurl it away. -> your tunic and hurl it away. <div class="cm ks">Yes, I'm actually suggesting eliminating a comma for a change! ;)</div></div>
638 <div class="section"><a name="sect187">sect187</a></div>
639 <div class="section"><a name="sect188">sect188</a></div>
640 <div class="cn"><a href="sect188.htm">188</a> #1: <div class="cm js">The list has both a dot and a close parenthesis</div></div>
641 <div class="rn"><a href="sect188.htm">188</a> #2: ) 6 Arrows -> 6 Arrows <div class="cm cjl">x10, not sure where those parentheses in the item list came from.</div> <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
642 <div class="section"><a name="sect189">sect189</a></div>
643 <div class="f"><a href="sect189.htm">189</a> #1: Are we going to alter the riddle to offer the correct solution? <div class="cm jb">We'll wait on an answer from Joe Dever. Until then, what has been done should suffice.</div></div>
644 <div class="section"><a name="sect190">sect190</a></div>
645 <div class="section"><a name="sect191">sect191</a></div>
646 <div class="section"><a name="sect192">sect192</a></div>
647 <div class="section"><a name="sect193">sect193</a></div>
648 <div class="section"><a name="sect194">sect194</a></div>
649 <div class="section"><a name="sect195">sect195</a></div>
650 <div class="re"><a href="sect195.htm">195</a> #1: thousand jets of flame, which roar from jets set into the smooth, glassy floor. -> thousand flames, which roar from jets set into the smooth, glassy floor. <div class="cm ks">Sounds redundant IMO.</div> <div class="cm jb">I agree, but "jets of flame" is much more evococative than a simple flame. I'd hate to lose that. Can't think of a better way to word it without losing that phrase.</div></div>
651 <div class="section"><a name="sect196">sect196</a></div>
652 <div class="section"><a name="sect197">sect197</a></div>
653 <div class="ce"><a href="sect197.htm">197</a> #1: man on to the balcony, turn to 9. -> man onto the balcony, turn to 9.</div>
654 <div class="section"><a name="sect198">sect198</a></div>
655 <div class="ce"><a href="sect198.htm">198</a> #1: its gaping jaw. -> its gaping jaws. <div class="cm ks">Sounds better IMO.</div></div>
656 <div class="ce"><a href="sect198.htm">198</a> #2: bow -> Bow</div>
657 <div class="ce"><a href="sect198.htm">198</a> #3: arrow -> Arrow</div>
658 <div class="section"><a name="sect199">sect199</a></div>
659 <div class="section"><a name="part2">part2</a></div>
660 <div class="section"><a name="sect200">sect200</a></div>
661 <div class="ce"><a href="sect200.htm">200</a> #1: face it you see, two -> face it, you see two <div class="cm ks">Or perhaps eliminate this comma altogether.</div></div>
662 <div class="ce"><a href="sect200.htm">200</a> #2: acolyte Elders -> Acolyte Elders</div>
663 <div class="ce"><a href="sect200.htm">200</a> #3: acolytes of Vashna -> Acolytes of Vashna</div>
664 <div class="ce"><a href="sect200.htm">200</a> #4: counter-attack -> counterattack <div class="cm ik">as in the PAMoS</div></div>
665 <div class="section"><a name="sect201">sect201</a></div>
666 <div class="section"><a name="sect202">sect202</a></div>
667 <div class="section"><a name="sect203">sect203</a></div>
668 <div class="re"><a href="sect203.htm">203</a> #1: Vakovarian bandits -> Vakovarian Bandits</div>
669 <div class="section"><a name="sect204">sect204</a></div>
670 <div class="ce"><a href="sect204.htm">204</a> #1: acolytes of Vashna -> Acolytes of Vashna</div>
671 <div class="section"><a name="sect205">sect205</a></div>
672 <div class="ce"><a href="sect205.htm">205</a> #1: Sun Lord, or higher, turn to 229. -> Sun Lord, turn to 229. <div class="cm ks">Sun Lord is currently the maximum attainable rank.</div></div>
673 <div class="section"><a name="sect206">sect206</a></div>
674 <div class="section"><a name="sect207">sect207</a></div>
675 <div class="ce"><a href="sect207.htm">207</a> #1: Huntmastery you must -> Huntmastery, you must</div>
676 <div class="section"><a name="sect208">sect208</a></div>
677 <div class="ce"><a href="sect208.htm">208</a> #1: after four rounds, by turning to 222. -> after four rounds by turning to 222.</div>
678 <div class="ce"><a href="sect208.htm">208</a> #2: Sun Knight, or higher, you -> Sun Knight or higher, you</div>
679 <div class="ce"><a href="sect208.htm">208</a> #3: their most-favoured food: -> their favorite food: <div class="cm ks">Or 'their most favoured food:'</div> <div class="cm jb">most favoured</div></div>
680 <div class="ce"><a href="sect208.htm">208</a> #4: Durncrag scavenger -> Durncrag Scavenger</div>
681 <div class="ce"><a href="sect208.htm">208</a> #5: jackals -> Jackals <div class="cm ">x4</div></div>
682 <div class="section"><a name="sect209">sect209</a></div>
683 <div class="ce"><a href="sect209.htm">209</a> #1: so you suddenly -> so, you suddenly</div>
684 <div class="ce"><a href="sect209.htm">209</a> #2: skill of animal kinship. -> skill of Animal Kinship.</div>
685 <div class="re"><a href="sect209.htm">209</a> #3: animal kinship -> Animal Kinship <div class="cm jb">redundant with #2</div></div>
686 <div class="ce"><a href="sect209.htm">209</a> #4: gulley -> gully <div class="cm ik">as elsewhere</div></div>
687 <div class="section"><a name="sect210">sect210</a></div>
688 <div class="section"><a name="sect211">sect211</a></div>
689 <div class="ce"><a href="sect211.htm">211</a> #1: camouflage -> Camouflage</div>
690 <div class="section"><a name="sect212">sect212</a></div>
691 <div class="ce"><a href="sect212.htm">212</a> #1: Brotherhood spell -> Brotherhood Spell <div class="cm ks">If we are changing to this format.</div></div>
692 <div class="ce"><a href="sect212.htm">212</a> #2: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
693 <div class="section"><a name="sect213">sect213</a></div>
694 <div class="ce"><a href="sect213.htm">213</a> #1: her, Kai lord? -> her, Kai Lord?</div>
695 <div class="re"><a href="sect213.htm">213</a> #2: Kai lord -> Kai Lord <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
696 <div class="section"><a name="sect214">sect214</a></div>
697 <div class="section"><a name="sect215">sect215</a></div>
698 <div class="section"><a name="sect216">sect216</a></div>
699 <div class="section"><a name="sect217">sect217</a></div>
700 <div class="ce"><a href="sect217.htm">217</a> #1: healing -> Healing <div class="cm so">not sure about this one</div></div>
701 <div class="section"><a name="sect218">sect218</a></div>
702 <div class="section"><a name="sect219">sect219</a></div>
703 <div class="section"><a name="sect220">sect220</a></div>
704 <div class="section"><a name="sect221">sect221</a></div>
705 <div class="section"><a name="sect222">sect222</a></div>
706 <div class="ce"><a href="sect222.htm">222</a> #1: horse to the gallop -> horse to a gallop</div>
707 <div class="ce"><a href="sect222.htm">222</a> #2: jackals -> Jackals <div class="cm ">x2</div></div>
708 <div class="section"><a name="sect223">sect223</a></div>
709 <div class="ce"><a href="sect223.htm">223</a> #1: gulley -> gully <div class="cm ik">as elsewhere, occurs twice</div></div>
710 <div class="section"><a name="sect224">sect224</a></div>
711 <div class="section"><a name="sect225">sect225</a></div>
712 <div class="ce"><a href="sect225.htm">225</a> #1: of the shadow gate. -> of the Shadow Gate.</div>
713 <div class="section"><a name="sect226">sect226</a></div>
714 <div class="ce"><a href="sect226.htm">226</a> #1: Coney-skin mitts -> Coney-skin Mitts</div>
715 <div class="ce"><a href="sect226.htm">226</a> #2: Wolfskin cloaks -> Wolfskin Cloaks</div>
716 <div class="ce"><a href="sect226.htm">226</a> #3: Wildcat pelts -> Wildcat Pelts</div>
717 <div class="ce"><a href="sect226.htm">226</a> #4: Bearskin cloaks -> Bearskin Cloaks</div>
718 <div class="ce"><a href="sect226.htm">226</a> #5: White wolf pelts -> White Wolf Pelts</div>
719 <div class="ce"><a href="sect226.htm">226</a> #6: Kalkoth hides -> Kalkoth Hides</div>
720 <div class="ce"><a href="sect226.htm">226</a> #7: Black corvayl cloaks -> Black Corvayl Cloaks</div>
721 <div class="ce"><a href="sect226.htm">226</a> #8: furrier's -> furriers' <div class="cm ik">as in 161, 174</div></div>
722 <div class="section"><a name="sect227">sect227</a></div>
723 <div class="ce"><a href="sect227.htm">227</a> #1: furs clutching a loaded -> furs and clutching a loaded</div>
724 <div class="section"><a name="sect228">sect228</a></div>
725 <div class="ce"><a href="sect228.htm">228</a> #1: here, Kai lord. -> here, Kai Lord.</div>
726 <div class="re"><a href="sect228.htm">228</a> #2: Kai lord -> Kai Lord <div class="cm jb">redundant with #</div></div>
727 <div class="section"><a name="sect229">sect229</a></div>
728 <div class="ce"><a href="sect229.htm">229</a> #1: Kai blast -> Kai-blast <div class="cm so">x2 unsure about this one</div></div>
729 <div class="cf"><a href="sect229.htm">229</a> #2: Endurance bonus <div class="cm so">I would imagine this is purely for the duration of the combat. If, during the combat, you lose less than 5 EPs, you must reduce your EP total to your original amount before the battle. If you lose 5 or more, leave your EP score unchanged.</div></div>
730 <div class="cf"><a href="sect229.htm">229</a> #3: Is this a Kai-blast without EP penalty? <div class="cm so">Footnote that LW should really lose 4EP.</div></div>
731 <div class="section"><a name="sect230">sect230</a></div>
732 <div class="ce"><a href="sect230.htm">230</a> #1: in a horseshoe circle -> in a horseshoe shape <div class="cm ks">If it's shaped like a horseshoe, it isn't a circle, is it?</div></div>
733 <div class="section"><a name="sect231">sect231</a></div>
734 <div class="section"><a name="sect232">sect232</a></div>
735 <div class="ce"><a href="sect232.htm">232</a> #1: Crypt spawn: COMBAT -> Crypt Spawn: COMBAT</div>
736 <div class="ce"><a href="sect232.htm">232</a> #2: cloud of crypt spawn -> cloud of Crypt Spawn</div>
737 <div class="re"><a href="sect232.htm">232</a> #3: crypt spawn -> Crypt-spawn <div class="cm so">I think this is how it is presented in the preceding books</div> <div class="cm jb">redundant with #2</div></div>
738 <div class="section"><a name="sect233">sect233</a></div>
739 <div class="re"><a href="sect233.htm">233</a> #1: glittering ice which -> glittering ice, which <div class="cm ks">Due to length of sentence.</div> <div class="cm jb">I can understand the urge to break up the sentence, but I just don't like separating the adjective phrase from what it modifies.</div></div>
740 <div class="ce"><a href="sect233.htm">233</a> #2: freezes and -> freezes, and</div>
741 <div class="section"><a name="sect234">sect234</a></div>
742 <div class="ce"><a href="sect234.htm">234</a> #1: amulet -> Amulet <div class="cm ">x2</div> <div class="cm jb">x3</div>o</div>
743 <div class="ce"><a href="sect234.htm">234</a> #2: acolytes of Vashna -> Acolytes of Vashna</div>
744 <div class="section"><a name="sect235">sect235</a></div>
745 <div class="cn"><a href="sect235.htm">235</a> #1: <div class="cm ks">Illustration still needs to be added.</div></div>
746 <div class="ce"><a href="sect235.htm">235</a> #2: shadow gate in time. -> Shadow Gate in time.</div>
747 <div class="cf"><a href="sect235.htm">235</a> #3: <div class="cm js">It's missing the standard footnote about how you get one chance to go to the numbered section that represents the answer to the riddle</div></div>
748 <div class="section"><a name="sect236">sect236</a></div>
749 <div class="ce"><a href="sect236.htm">236</a> #1: weapon -> Weapon <div class="cm ">x2</div></div>
750 <div class="section"><a name="sect237">sect237</a></div>
751 <div class="section"><a name="sect238">sect238</a></div>
752 <div class="cn"><a href="sect238.htm">238</a> #1: questioning <div class="cm so">first instance should be italicised</div></div>
753 <div class="section"><a name="sect239">sect239</a></div>
754 <div class="ce"><a href="sect239.htm">239</a> #1: here, Kai lord. -> here, Kai Lord.</div>
755 <div class="re"><a href="sect239.htm">239</a> #2: Kai lord -> Kai Lord <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
756 <div class="section"><a name="sect240">sect240</a></div>
757 <div class="section"><a name="sect241">sect241</a></div>
758 <div class="ce"><a href="sect241.htm">241</a> #1: Your Kai hunting skills -> Your Kai Hunting skills <div class="cm ks">Maybe, maybe not on this one.</div></div>
759 <div class="re"><a href="sect241.htm">241</a> #2: hunting -> Hunting <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
760 <div class="ce"><a href="sect241.htm">241</a> #3: arrow -> Arrow</div>
761 <div class="re"><a href="sect241.htm">241</a> #4: brigand leader -> Brigand Leader <div class="cm so">not sure about this</div></div>
762 <div class="ce"><a href="sect241.htm">241</a> #5: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
763 <div class="ce"><a href="sect241.htm">241</a> #6: longer , -> longer,</div>
764 <div class="section"><a name="sect242">sect242</a></div>
765 <div class="section"><a name="sect243">sect243</a></div>
766 <div class="section"><a name="sect244">sect244</a></div>
767 <div class="section"><a name="sect245">sect245</a></div>
768 <div class="section"><a name="sect246">sect246</a></div>
769 <div class="section"><a name="sect247">sect247</a></div>
770 <div class="rn"><a href="sect247.htm">247</a> #1: 80 GC? That is way more that you can carry; is this correct? <div class="cm so">It is correct. Just because you can't take them doesn't mean they wouldn't have them. They are Brigands after all ;) .</div></div>
771 <div class="section"><a name="sect248">sect248</a></div>
772 <div class="re"><a href="sect248.htm">248</a> #1: Elder-magi -> Elder Magi <div class="cm ik">as everywhere else</div> <div class="cm jb">should have been 288</div></div>
773 <div class="section"><a name="sect249">sect249</a></div>
774 <div class="ce"><a href="sect249.htm">249</a> #1: power of animal control -> power of Animal Control</div>
775 <div class="re"><a href="sect249.htm">249</a> #2: animal control -> Animal Control <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
776 <div class="section"><a name="sect250">sect250</a></div>
777 <div class="ce"><a href="sect250.htm">250</a> #1: rock, shaped like -> rock shaped like</div>
778 <div class="ce"><a href="sect250.htm">250</a> #2: vortexi -> Vortexi</div>
779 <div class="ce"><a href="sect250.htm">250</a> #3: Then, as -> Then as</div>
780 <div class="section"><a name="sect251">sect251</a></div>
781 <div class="ce"><a href="sect251.htm">251</a> #1: arrow -> Arrow</div>
782 <div class="section"><a name="sect252">sect252</a></div>
783 <div class="section"><a name="sect253">sect253</a></div>
784 <div class="rn"><a href="sect253.htm">253</a> #1: legacy of vashna, page 164 and 253, missing dias puzzle illustrations... <div class="cm jb">Actually should be in 235.</div></div>
785 <div class="section"><a name="sect254">sect254</a></div>
786 <div class="ce"><a href="sect254.htm">254</a> #1: domain, a temperature -> domain: a temperature</div>
787 <div class="ce"><a href="sect254.htm">254</a> #2: beast approaching. -> beast approaching from. <div class="cm ks">Sounds better IMO.</div></div>
788 <div class="ce"><a href="sect254.htm">254</a> #3: arrow -> Arrow <div class="cm ">x2</div></div>
789 <div class="ce"><a href="sect254.htm">254</a> #4: bow -> Bow</div>
790 <div class="section"><a name="sect255">sect255</a></div>
791 <div class="ce"><a href="sect255.htm">255</a> #1: The runic disc -> The Runic Disc <div class="cm ks">Special item: should be capitalized.</div></div>
792 <div class="re"><a href="sect255.htm">255</a> #2: runic disc -> Runic Disc <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
793 <div class="section"><a name="sect256">sect256</a></div>
794 <div class="ce"><a href="sect256.htm">256</a> #1: north-easterly direction. -> northeasterly direction.</div>
795 <div class="section"><a name="sect257">sect257</a></div>
796 <div class="ce"><a href="sect257.htm">257</a> #1: Black corvayl: -> Black Corvayl <div class="cm ks">Capitalize both words for an opponent?</div></div>
797 <div class="re"><a href="sect257.htm">257</a> #2: corvayl -> Corvayl <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
798 <div class="section"><a name="sect258">sect258</a></div>
799 <div class="section"><a name="sect259">sect259</a></div>
800 <div class="section"><a name="sect260">sect260</a></div>
801 <div class="re"><a href="sect260.htm">260</a> #1: fleeing Vythaz herd -> fleeing vythaz herd <div class="cm jb">I tend to agree, but that's not how the books have been written this far. Someday, it may be good to go back and change this (I mean "Jackal"?!) but that is not today. *wink*</div></div>
802 <div class="re"><a href="sect260.htm">260</a> #2: herd of Vythaz -> herd of vythaz <div class="cm ks">Not a race but an animal.</div></div>
803 <div class="section"><a name="sect261">sect261</a></div>
804 <div class="ce"><a href="sect261.htm">261</a> #1: enter the shadow gate -> enter the Shadow Gate</div>
805 <div class="section"><a name="sect262">sect262</a></div>
806 <div class="section"><a name="sect263">sect263</a></div>
807 <div class="ce"><a href="sect263.htm">263</a> #1: vortexi -> Vortexi</div>
808 <div class="section"><a name="sect264">sect264</a></div>
809 <div class="re"><a href="sect264.htm">264</a> #1: reflexes are pain-dulled -> reflexes are pain dulled <div class="cm ks">Modifies reflexes, so no hyphen when it appears after the noun, correct?</div> <div class="cm jb">Hmm... noun-adjective modifier I believe is OK to hyphenate.</div></div>
810 <div class="ce"><a href="sect264.htm">264</a> #2: erect a psi-screen -> erect a Psi-screen</div>
811 <div class="section"><a name="sect265">sect265</a></div>
812 <div class="section"><a name="sect266">sect266</a></div>
813 <div class="section"><a name="sect267">sect267</a></div>
814 <div class="cf"><a href="sect267.htm">267</a> #1: See 54 re Cadak's immunities</div>
815 <div class="section"><a name="sect268">sect268</a></div>
816 <div class="ce"><a href="sect268.htm">268</a> #1: six rounds, by -> six rounds by</div>
817 <div class="ce"><a href="sect268.htm">268</a> #2: Vakovarian brigands: -> Vakovarian Brigands:</div>
818 <div class="section"><a name="sect269">sect269</a></div>
819 <div class="ce"><a href="sect269.htm">269</a> #1: Brotherhood spell of -> Brotherhood Spell of <div class="cm ks">We always capitalize Discipline when directly associated with the use of one, why not Spell when listed with one?</div></div>
820 <div class="ce"><a href="sect269.htm">269</a> #2: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
821 <div class="section"><a name="sect270">sect270</a></div>
822 <div class="section"><a name="sect271">sect271</a></div>
823 <div class="section"><a name="sect272">sect272</a></div>
824 <div class="ce"><a href="sect272.htm">272</a> #1: arrow -> Arrow</div>
825 <div class="rn"><a href="sect272.htm">272</a> #2: The hardened steel tip of your Arrow penetrates the roof of the creature's mouth and skewers its brain. <div class="cm js">Don't need the capital A</div></div>
826 <div class="section"><a name="sect273">sect273</a></div>
827 <div class="cn"><a href="sect273.htm">273</a> #1: the legacy of vashna, page 273, text seems to have some code visible: There is a terrific jb: crack! Crack! as the tip penetrates the energy wall and, with a breathtaking suddenness, the wall disappears.</div>
828 <div class="cn"><a href="sect273.htm">273</a> #2: Crack! <div class="cm so">encode as onomatopoeia</div></div>
829 <div class="section"><a name="sect274">sect274</a></div>
830 <div class="re"><a href="sect274.htm">274</a> #1: fire-escape ladder -> fire escape ladder</div>
831 <div class="section"><a name="sect275">sect275</a></div>
832 <div class="ce"><a href="sect275.htm">275</a> #1: acolyte Elders -> Acolyte Elders</div>
833 <div class="re"><a href="sect275.htm">275</a> #2: tracking -> Tracking <div class="cm jb"><em>natural</em> tracking instincts</div></div>
834 <div class="section"><a name="sect276">sect276</a></div>
835 <div class="ce"><a href="sect276.htm">276</a> #1: Sun Knight, or higher -> Sun Knight or higher</div>
836 <div class="section"><a name="sect277">sect277</a></div>
837 <div class="ce"><a href="sect277.htm">277</a> #1: humble-but-honest -> humble but honest</div>
838 <div class="ce"><a href="sect277.htm">277</a> #2: acolytes of Vashna -> Acolytes of Vashna</div>
839 <div class="section"><a name="sect278">sect278</a></div>
840 <div class="section"><a name="sect279">sect279</a></div>
841 <div class="section"><a name="sect280">sect280</a></div>
842 <div class="section"><a name="sect281">sect281</a></div>
843 <div class="re"><a href="sect281.htm">281</a> #1: has just seen a ghost. -> had just seen a ghost. <div class="cm ks">Sounds better imo</div> <div class="cm jb">Matches present tense of sentence.</div></div>
844 <div class="re"><a href="sect281.htm">281</a> #2: the first-floor window -> the first floor window <div class="cm ks">I can't remember what we decided on this one, but dictionary.com doesn't list it with a hyphen.</div></div>
845 <div class="section"><a name="sect282">sect282</a></div>
846 <div class="section"><a name="sect283">sect283</a></div>
847 <div class="ce"><a href="sect283.htm">283</a> #1: Sun Lord, or higher, -> Sun Lord, <div class="cm ks">This is currently the highest rank available.</div></div>
848 <div class="section"><a name="sect284">sect284</a></div>
849 <div class="ce"><a href="sect284.htm">284</a> #1: vortexi -> Vortexi</div>
850 <div class="section"><a name="sect285">sect285</a></div>
851 <div class="ce"><a href="sect285.htm">285</a> #1: fast-flowing -> fast flowing <div class="cm ks">Modifies River Storn, but comes after the noun. Should be no hyphen, yes?</div></div>
852 <div class="section"><a name="sect286">sect286</a></div>
853 <div class="ce"><a href="sect286.htm">286</a> #1: chasm of doom -> Chasm of Doom <div class="cm ks">Not sure, but would this be capitalized if it were another accepted name for the proper noun "Maakengorge"?</div></div>
854 <div class="ce"><a href="sect286.htm">286</a> #2: a shadow gate which -> a Shadow Gate which</div>
855 <div class="section"><a name="sect287">sect287</a></div>
856 <div class="re"><a href="sect287.htm">287</a> #1: 'F' sure -> 'F'sure <div class="cm so">unsure about this one</div> <div class="cm jb">Not incorrect enough for me to correct. *smile*</div></div>
857 <div class="ce"><a href="sect287.htm">287</a> #2: gold crowns -> Gold Crowns</div>
858 <div class="section"><a name="sect288">sect288</a></div>
859 <div class="ce"><a href="sect288.htm">288</a> #1: Elder-magi -> Elder Magi <div class="cm ik">as everywhere else</div></div>
860 <div class="cn"><a href="sect288.htm">288</a> #2: Gloar. -> <div class="cm ks">Should be italicized, it is in the book. Companion wouldn't let me use brackets to put the i's in.</div></div>
861 <div class="re"><a href="sect288.htm">288</a> #3: the power-word of -> the Power-Word of <div class="cm ks">Capitalizing spells? Also may need italics</div> <div class="cm jb">I'm not convinced that this is a spell.</div></div>
862 <div class="rn"><a href="sect288.htm">288</a> #4: Gloar <div class="cm so">encode as Spell</div> <div class="cm jb">Is it a spell?</div></div>
863 <div class="cn"><a href="sect288.htm">288</a> #5: "Gloar" - should this be italicised?</div>
864 <div class="section"><a name="sect289">sect289</a></div>
865 <div class="section"><a name="sect290">sect290</a></div>
866 <div class="ce"><a href="sect290.htm">290</a> #1: belt pouch -> Belt Pouch <div class="cm so">unsure about this one</div></div>
867 <div class="section"><a name="sect291">sect291</a></div>
868 <div class="section"><a name="sect292">sect292</a></div>
869 <div class="section"><a name="sect293">sect293</a></div>
870 <div class="ce"><a href="sect293.htm">293</a> #1: backpack -> Backpack</div>
871 <div class="cf"><a href="sect293.htm">293</a> #2: The reader might think that the Meals restore EP too (which I assume that they don't). Footnote? <div class="cm so">Maybe they do?</div></div>
872 <div class="section"><a name="sect294">sect294</a></div>
873 <div class="ce"><a href="sect294.htm">294</a> #1: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
874 <div class="section"><a name="sect295">sect295</a></div>
875 <div class="section"><a name="sect296">sect296</a></div>
876 <div class="ce"><a href="sect296.htm">296</a> #1: ever-nearer to the storm. -> ever nearer to the storm.</div>
877 <div class="section"><a name="sect297">sect297</a></div>
878 <div class="ce"><a href="sect297.htm">297</a> #1: your tracking skills -> your Tracking skills <div class="cm ks">Again: maybe or maybe not.</div></div>
879 <div class="ce"><a href="sect297.htm">297</a> #2: Guardian, or higher, -> Guardian or higher,</div>
880 <div class="re"><a href="sect297.htm">297</a> #3: tracking -> Tracking <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
881 <div class="section"><a name="sect298">sect298</a></div>
882 <div class="section"><a name="sect299">sect299</a></div>
883 <div class="section"><a name="sect300">sect300</a></div>
884 <div class="ce"><a href="sect300.htm">300</a> #1: camouflage skills, -> Camouflage skills, <div class="cm ks">Maybe, maybe not. Thought I'd mention it anyway.</div></div>
885 <div class="re"><a href="sect300.htm">300</a> #2: camouflage -> Camouflage <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
886 <div class="section"><a name="sect301">sect301</a></div>
887 <div class="ce"><a href="sect301.htm">301</a> #1: bow -> Bow</div>
888 <div class="ce"><a href="sect301.htm">301</a> #2: arrow -> Arrow</div>
889 <div class="ce"><a href="sect301.htm">301</a> #3: quiver -> Quiver</div>
890 <div class="section"><a name="sect302">sect302</a></div>
891 <div class="ce"><a href="sect302.htm">302</a> #1: Kai pathsmanship Discipline -> Kai Pathsmanship Discipline <div class="cm ks">-or- Magnakai Pathsmanship Discipline</div> <div class="cm so">My own pref is the second one since Pathsmanship is a Magnakai Discipline.</div></div>
892 <div class="re"><a href="sect302.htm">302</a> #2: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
893 <div class="section"><a name="sect303">sect303</a></div>
894 <div class="section"><a name="sect304">sect304</a></div>
895 <div class="ce"><a href="sect304.htm">304</a> #1: Thok -> thok <div class="cm ik">as 2x in 13tplor; actually, this should be <quote>thok</quote> as in 13tplor 225</div> <div class="cm jb">We should correct 13tplor</div></div>
896 <div class="re"><a href="sect304.htm">304</a> #2: Thok -> thok <div class="cm so">encode as onomatopoeia</div> <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
897 <div class="rn"><a href="sect304.htm">304</a> #3: a loud Thok! <div class="cm ks">In the text, the word Thok! (is that a word?;)) is italicized.</div><div class="cm so">It's onomatopoeia and should be encoded as such. There are no real rules governing onomatopoeic words since they're all made up! ;-)</div> <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
898 <div class="ce"><a href="sect304.htm">304</a> #5: arrow -> Arrow</div>
899 <div class="re"><a href="sect304.htm">304</a> #6: brigand leader -> Brigand Leader</div>
900 <div class="rn"><a href="sect304.htm">304</a> #7: Thok! <div class="cm so">encode as onomatopoeia</div> <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
901 <div class="re"><a href="sect304.htm">304</a> #8: Vakovarian brigands -> Vakovarian Brigands</div>
902 <div class="rn"><a href="sect304.htm">304</a> #9: "with a loud Thok!" (house style?) <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
903 <div class="section"><a name="sect305">sect305</a></div>
904 <div class="ce"><a href="sect305.htm">305</a> #1: vortexi -> Vortexi</div>
905 <div class="section"><a name="sect306">sect306</a></div>
906 <div class="ce"><a href="sect306.htm">306</a> #1: corvayl -> Corvayl</div>
907 <div class="section"><a name="sect307">sect307</a></div>
908 <div class="ce"><a href="sect307.htm">307</a> #1: Magnakai pathsmanship skills -> Magnakai Pathsmanship skills</div>
909 <div class="ce"><a href="sect307.htm">307</a> #2: north-easterly direction -> northeasterly direction <div class="cm ks">I could be wrong about this one, but thought I'd at least mention it.</div></div>
910 <div class="re"><a href="sect307.htm">307</a> #3: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
911 <div class="section"><a name="sect308">sect308</a></div>
912 <div class="ce"><a href="sect308.htm">308</a> #1: weapon -> Weapon <div class="cm so">unsure about this</div></div>
913 <div class="section"><a name="sect309">sect309</a></div>
914 <div class="section"><a name="sect310">sect310</a></div>
915 <div class="section"><a name="sect311">sect311</a></div>
916 <div class="ce"><a href="sect311.htm">311</a> #1: energy comes arching -> energy comes arcing <div class="cm ks">Never seen "arching" energy or electricity, it's always "arcing". Just my thoughts. . . ;)</div></div>
917 <div class="section"><a name="sect312">sect312</a></div>
918 <div class="re"><a href="sect312.htm">312</a> #1: brigand captain's -> Brigand Captain's</div>
919 <div class="section"><a name="sect313">sect313</a></div>
920 <div class="section"><a name="sect314">sect314</a></div>
921 <div class="re"><a href="sect314.htm">314</a> #1: Elder is wide-eyed -> Elder is wide eyed <div class="cm ks">Not sure if the hyphen rule applies to this one or not.</div> <div class="cm jb">Hyphenated seems to be in general use.</div></div>
922 <div class="section"><a name="sect315">sect315</a></div>
923 <div class="ce"><a href="sect315.htm">315</a> #1: the king's death -> the King's death <div class="cm ks">Important office title capitalized here?</div><div class="cm so">I think capitalising King is probably best in this instance because it is talking about a specific King; it's not a general term.</div></div>
924 <div class="section"><a name="sect316">sect316</a></div>
925 <div class="ce"><a href="sect316.htm">316</a> #1: token -> Token <div class="cm so">or, Black Token</div></div>
926 <div class="section"><a name="sect317">sect317</a></div>
927 <div class="section"><a name="sect318">sect318</a></div>
928 <div class="ce"><a href="sect318.htm">318</a> #1: the shadow gate. -> the Shadow Gate.</div>
929 <div class="section"><a name="sect319">sect319</a></div>
930 <div class="re"><a href="sect319.htm">319</a> #1: rank of Kai Grand Mastership, -> rank of Kai mastery, <div class="cm ks">I can't think of anywhere else that a choice was phrased that way, does this seem odd to anyone else? Everything else I saw was Kai mastery.</div> <div class="cm so">I think we decided before to leave occurrences of 'Grand Mastership', although it is a weird phrase.</div></div>
931 <div class="re"><a href="sect319.htm">319</a> #2: Huntmastery and have reached the Kai rank of Grand Guardian, or higher, -> Huntmastery, and have reached the Kai rank of Grand Guardian or higher,</div>
932 <div class="re"><a href="sect319.htm">319</a> #3: without trace. -> without a trace. <div class="cm ks">Never heard it that way before. Could be me. . .</div><div class="cm so">The original is probably a UK variant. 'Vanished without trace' is quite acceptable.</div></div>
933 <div class="ce"><a href="sect319.htm">319</a> #4: Guardian, or higher -> Guardian or higher</div>
934 <div class="re"><a href="sect319.htm">319</a> #7: Kai rank of Grand Guardian -> rank of Kai Grand Guardian <div class="cm jb">This occurs in multiple places throughout the book, and doesn't seem <em>too</em> odd.</div></div>
935 <div class="ce"><a href="sect319.htm">319</a> #8: gulley -> gully <div class="cm ik">as elsewhere, occurs twice (once in the caption)</div></div>
936 <div class="section"><a name="sect320">sect320</a></div>
937 <div class="section"><a name="sect321">sect321</a></div>
938 <div class="section"><a name="sect322">sect322</a></div>
939 <div class="ce"><a href="sect322.htm">322</a> #1: acolyte Elder -> Acolyte Elder</div>
940 <div class="section"><a name="sect323">sect323</a></div>
941 <div class="section"><a name="sect324">sect324</a></div>
942 <div class="ce"><a href="sect324.htm">324</a> #1: vortexi -> Vortexi</div>
943 <div class="section"><a name="sect325">sect325</a></div>
944 <div class="ce"><a href="sect325.htm">325</a> #1: safety of the ruins, by turning -> safety of the ruins by turning <div class="cm jb">Leads to an ambiguous statement: who's turning the to 275, you or the acolyte? *grin*</div></div>
945 <div class="ce"><a href="sect325.htm">325</a> #2: acolytes of Vashna -> Acolytes of Vashna</div>
946 <div class="section"><a name="sect326">sect326</a></div>
947 <div class="ce"><a href="sect326.htm">326</a> #1: Grand Guardian, or higher, -> Grand Guardian or higher,</div>
948 <div class="section"><a name="sect327">sect327</a></div>
949 <div class="ce"><a href="sect327.htm">327</a> #1: circle of stalagtites -> circle of stalactites <div class="cm ks">Stalactites hang from a ceiling or wall, stalagmites rise from a floor. No such thing as stalagtites.</div></div>
950 <div class="ce"><a href="sect327.htm">327</a> #2: young teenage girl -> young, teenage girl <div class="cm so">unsure about this one</div></div>
951 <div class="cn"><a href="sect327.htm">327</a> #3: semi-circular -> semicircular <div class="cm ik">as in the PAMoS</div> <div class="cm so">Occurs on a line-break</div></div>
952 <div class="section"><a name="sect328">sect328</a></div>
953 <div class="ce"><a href="sect328.htm">328</a> #1: arrow -> Arrow</div>
954 <div class="section"><a name="sect329">sect329</a></div>
955 <div class="section"><a name="sect330">sect330</a></div>
956 <div class="ce"><a href="sect330.htm">330</a> #1: bow -> Bow</div>
957 <div class="ce"><a href="sect330.htm">330</a> #2: arrow -> Arrow</div>
958 <div class="ce"><a href="sect330.htm">330</a> #3: arrows -> Arrows <div class="cm jb">x3</div></div>
959 <div class="ce"><a href="sect330.htm">330</a> #4: quiver -> Quiver</div>
960 <div class="section"><a name="sect331">sect331</a></div>
961 <div class="section"><a name="sect332">sect332</a></div>
962 <div class="cf"><a href="sect332.htm">332</a> #1: This section assumes you have 1 GC, but you may have spent all your money already...</div>
963 <div class="section"><a name="sect333">sect333</a></div>
964 <div class="section"><a name="sect334">sect334</a></div>
965 <div class="ce"><a href="sect334.htm">334</a> #1: automatons -> Automatons <div class="cm ">x2</div></div>
966 <div class="ce"><a href="sect334.htm">334</a> #2: Kai Blast -> Kai-blast <div class="cm so">also, italicised in original--unnecessary IMHO</div></div>
967 <div class="section"><a name="sect335">sect335</a></div>
968 <div class="section"><a name="sect336">sect336</a></div>
969 <div class="ce"><a href="sect336.htm">336</a> #1: corvayl -> Corvayl</div>
970 <div class="section"><a name="sect337">sect337</a></div>
971 <div class="ce"><a href="sect337.htm">337</a> #1: Magnakai pathsmanship skills -> Magnakai Pathsmanship skills</div>
972 <div class="re"><a href="sect337.htm">337</a> #2: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
973 <div class="section"><a name="sect338">sect338</a></div>
974 <div class="ce"><a href="sect338.htm">338</a> #1: your sixth sense warns -> your Sixth Sense warns <div class="cm ks">Yes, no, maybe?</div></div>
975 <div class="re"><a href="sect338.htm">338</a> #2: sixth sense -> Sixth Sense <div class="cm so">unsure about this one</div> <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
976 <div class="section"><a name="sect339">sect339</a></div>
977 <div class="re"><a href="sect339.htm">339</a> #1: first-floor ruins -> first floor ruins <div class="cm so">I think the original hypenated form is OK here.</div><div class="cm ks">I'd never seen it that way, and dictionary.com didn't recognize it either, so I would still recommend the latter. Just my thoughts.</div> <div class="cm jb">Ambiguity: ruins of the first floor or first ruins of the floor.</div></div>
978 <div class="re"><a href="sect339.htm">339</a> #2: first-floor ruins -> first floor ruins <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
979 <div class="section"><a name="sect340">sect340</a></div>
980 <div class="ce"><a href="sect340.htm">340</a> #1: 'T'as -> ''T'as</div>
981 <div class="ce"><a href="sect340.htm">340</a> #2: black corvayl -> Black Corvayl</div>
982 <div class="section"><a name="sect341">sect341</a></div>
983 <div class="ce"><a href="sect341.htm">341</a> #1: towards the north-east. -> towards the northeast. <div class="cm ks">Just suggesting. . .</div></div>
984 <div class="ce"><a href="sect341.htm">341</a> #2: a north-easterly route -> a northeasterly route <div class="cm ks">Again, not sure on this one.</div><div class="cm so">A ruling on hyphenated (or not) compass points would be a welcome addition to the MoS.</div></div>
985 <div class="section"><a name="sect342">sect342</a></div>
986 <div class="ce"><a href="sect342.htm">342</a> #1: insignia identify him -> insignia identifies him</div>
987 <div class="ce"><a href="sect342.htm">342</a> #2: trees so you -> trees, so you</div>
988 <div class="ce"><a href="sect342.htm">342</a> #3: acolyte of Vashna -> Acolyte of Vashna</div>
989 <div class="ce"><a href="sect342.htm">342</a> #4: gulley -> gully <div class="cm ik">as elsewhere</div></div>
990 <div class="section"><a name="sect343">sect343</a></div>
991 <div class="ce"><a href="sect343.htm">343</a> #1: your sixth sense -> your Sixth Sense <div class="cm ks">Yes, no, maybe. . . I don't know.</div></div>
992 <div class="re"><a href="sect343.htm">343</a> #2: sixth sense -> Sixth Sense <div class="cm so">unsure about this one</div> <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
993 <div class="section"><a name="sect344">sect344</a></div>
994 <div class="ce"><a href="sect344.htm">344</a> #1: skim the tree-tops -> skim the treetops</div>
995 <div class="section"><a name="sect345">sect345</a></div>
996 <div class="ce"><a href="sect345.htm">345</a> #1: the shadow gate and -> the Shadow Gate and</div>
997 <div class="ce"><a href="sect345.htm">345</a> #2: forwards on to -> forwards onto</div>
998 <div class="re"><a href="sect345.htm">345</a> #3: shadow gate -> Shadow Gate <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
999 <div class="section"><a name="sect346">sect346</a></div>
1000 <div class="section"><a name="sect347">sect347</a></div>
1001 <div class="ce"><a href="sect347.htm">347</a> #1: jackal -> Jackal <div class="cm ">x2</div></div>
1002 <div class="section"><a name="sect348">sect348</a></div>
1003 <div class="ce"><a href="sect348.htm">348</a> #1: skills of invisibility -> skills of Invisibility</div>
1004 <div class="re"><a href="sect348.htm">348</a> #2: invisibility -> Invisibility <div class="cm jb">redundant with #1</div></div>
1005 <div class="re"><a href="sect348.htm">348</a> #3: Brigand leader -> Brigand Leader</div>
1006 <div class="ce"><a href="sect348.htm">348</a> #4: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm <div class="cm so">and encode as Spell</div></div>
1007 <div class="section"><a name="sect349">sect349</a></div>
1008 <div class="section"><a name="sect350">sect350</a></div>
1009 <div class="cn"><a href="sect350.htm">350</a> #1: consumed ... everything, -> consumed . . . everything, <div class="cm ks">Appears the ellipses are not spaced correctly, but I may be wrong.</div><div class="cm so">I think this might be caused by an extra space before the encoded ellipsis.</div></div>
1010 <div class="ce"><a href="sect350.htm">350</a> #2: collapsing shadow gate -> collapsing Shadow Gate</div>
1011 <div class="ce"><a href="sect350.htm">350</a> #3: the shadow gate and -> the Shadow Gate and</div>
1012 <div class="section"><a name="sect351">sect351</a></div>
1013 <div class="section"><a name="sect352">sect352</a></div>
1014 <div class="section"><a name="sect353">sect353</a></div>
1015 <div class="section"><a name="sect354">sect354</a></div>
1016 <div class="section"><a name="sect355">sect355</a></div>
1017 <div class="section"><a name="sect356">sect356</a></div>
1018 <div class="section"><a name="sect357">sect357</a></div>
1019 <div class="section"><a name="sect358">sect358</a></div>
1020 <div class="section"><a name="sect359">sect359</a></div>
1021 <div class="section"><a name="sect360">sect360</a></div>
1022 <div class="section"><a name="sect361">sect361</a></div>
1023 <div class="section"><a name="sect362">sect362</a></div>
1024 <div class="section"><a name="sect363">sect363</a></div>
1025 <div class="section"><a name="sect364">sect364</a></div>
1026 <div class="section"><a name="sect365">sect365</a></div>
1027 <div class="section"><a name="sect366">sect366</a></div>
1028 <div class="section"><a name="sect367">sect367</a></div>
1029 <div class="section"><a name="sect368">sect368</a></div>
1030 <div class="section"><a name="sect369">sect369</a></div>
1031 <div class="section"><a name="sect370">sect370</a></div>
1032 <div class="section"><a name="sect371">sect371</a></div>
1033 <div class="section"><a name="sect372">sect372</a></div>
1034 <div class="section"><a name="sect373">sect373</a></div>
1035 <div class="section"><a name="sect374">sect374</a></div>
1036 <div class="section"><a name="sect375">sect375</a></div>
1037 <div class="section"><a name="sect376">sect376</a></div>
1038 <div class="section"><a name="sect377">sect377</a></div>
1039 <div class="section"><a name="sect378">sect378</a></div>
1040 <div class="section"><a name="sect379">sect379</a></div>
1041 <div class="section"><a name="sect380">sect380</a></div>
1042 <div class="section"><a name="sect381">sect381</a></div>
1043 <div class="section"><a name="sect382">sect382</a></div>
1044 <div class="section"><a name="sect383">sect383</a></div>
1045 <div class="section"><a name="sect384">sect384</a></div>
1046 <div class="section"><a name="sect385">sect385</a></div>
1047 <div class="section"><a name="sect386">sect386</a></div>
1048 <div class="section"><a name="sect387">sect387</a></div>
1049 <div class="section"><a name="sect388">sect388</a></div>
1050 <div class="section"><a name="sect389">sect389</a></div>
1051 <div class="section"><a name="sect390">sect390</a></div>
1052 <div class="section"><a name="sect391">sect391</a></div>
1053 <div class="section"><a name="sect392">sect392</a></div>
1054 <div class="section"><a name="sect393">sect393</a></div>
1055 <div class="section"><a name="sect394">sect394</a></div>
1056 <div class="section"><a name="sect395">sect395</a></div>
1057 <div class="section"><a name="sect396">sect396</a></div>
1058 <div class="section"><a name="sect397">sect397</a></div>
1059 <div class="section"><a name="sect398">sect398</a></div>
1060 <div class="section"><a name="sect399">sect399</a></div>
1061 <div class="section"><a name="sect400">sect400</a></div>
1062 <div class="section"><a name="ill1">ill1</a></div>
1063 <div class="section"><a name="ill2">ill2</a></div>
1064 <div class="section"><a name="ill3">ill3</a></div>
1065 <div class="section"><a name="ill4">ill4</a></div>
1066 <div class="section"><a name="ill5">ill5</a></div>
1067 <div class="section"><a name="ill6">ill6</a></div>
1068 <div class="section"><a name="ill7">ill7</a></div>
1069 <div class="section"><a name="ill8">ill8</a></div>
1070 <div class="section"><a name="ill9">ill9</a></div>
1071 <div class="section"><a name="ill10">ill10</a></div>
1072 <div class="section"><a name="ill11">ill11</a></div>
1073 <div class="section"><a name="ill12">ill12</a></div>
1074 <div class="section"><a name="ill13">ill13</a></div>
1075 <div class="section"><a name="ill14">ill14</a></div>
1076 <div class="section"><a name="ill15">ill15</a></div>
1077 <div class="section"><a name="ill16">ill16</a></div>
1078 <div class="section"><a name="ill17">ill17</a></div>
1079 <div class="section"><a name="ill18">ill18</a></div>
1080 <div class="section"><a name="ill19">ill19</a></div>
1081 <div class="section"><a name="ill20">ill20</a></div>
1082 <div class="section"><a name="passing">passing</a></div>
1083 <div class="section"><a name="map">map</a></div>
1084 <div class="section"><a name="action">action</a></div>
1085 <div class="section"><a name="crsumary">crsumary</a></div>
1086 <div class="section"><a name="crtable">crtable</a></div>
1087 <div class="cn"><a href="crtable.htm">Combat Results Table</a> #1: It's missing! <div class="cm so">online version fine</div></div>
1088 <div class="section"><a name="random">random</a></div>
1089 <div class="cn"><a href="random.htm">Random Number Table</a> #1: It's missing! <div class="cm so">the online version works fine.</div></div>
1090 <div class="section"><a name="errata">errata</a></div>
1091 <div class="cn"><a href="errata.htm">Errata</a> #1: In Lone Wolf Club Newsletter 24: 'In -> Lone Wolf Club Newsletter 24 states: 'In <div class="cm so">I think it sounds better this way.</div></div>
1092 <div class="cn"><a href="errata.htm">Errata</a> #2: Disc'both -> Disc' both</div>
1093 <div class="rn"><a href="errata.htm">Errata</a> #3: 'ENDURANCE' according to Lone Wolf Club Newsletter 24 -> 'ENDURANCE' as per Lone Wolf Club Newsletter 24 <div class="cm so">Personal preference, perhaps, but I think it sounds better this way.</div></div>
1094 <div class="cn"><a href="errata.htm">Errata</a> #4: (223) Replaced both occurrences of 'gulley' with 'gulley'. <div class="cm ik">I guess the error is obvious</div></div>
1095 <div class="cn"><a href="errata.htm">Errata</a> #5: (283) Removed ', or higher' from 'Sun Lord, or higher'since Sun Lord is the highest available rank in this book. <div class="cm ik">space missing between higher' and since</div></div>
1096 <div class="cn"><a href="errata.htm">Errata</a> #6: (340) Replaced 'T'as' with ''T'' -> Replaced 'T'as' with ''T'as'</div>
1097 <div class="cn"><a href="errata.htm">Errata</a> #7: The drunkard errata item for 185 seems to be the reverse of the actual change.</div>
1098 <div class="section"><a name="footnotz">footnotz</a></div>
1099 <div class="section"><a name="illstrat">illstrat</a></div>
1100 <div class="cn"><a href="illstrat.htm">Table of Illustrations</a> #1: The Action Chart and the map are not in the same order as in the XML file (and thus in the index too)... (well, my scripts complain about this :-)</div>
1101 <div class="section"><a name="license">license</a></div>
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1106 <div class="cm so">ridge-backed jackal vs. Ridge-backed Jackal (11, 208)?</div>
1107 <div class="cm so">brigand(s) vs. Brigand(s)? (i.e. 113)</div>
1108 <div class="cm so">acolyte(s) vs. Acolyte(s)? (i.e. 126)</div>
1109 <div class="cm so">Kai mastery vs. Kai Mastery? (i.e. 193)</div>
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