War of the Wizards: Corrections
Key
Erratum (Uncorrected)
Erratum (Rejected)
Erratum (Corrected)
Non-erratum (Uncorrected)
Non-erratum (Rejected)
Non-erratum (Corrected)
Footnote (Unimplementted)
Footnote (Rejected)
Footnote (Implemented)
Unknown (erratum vs. non-erratum)
Comment
Jonathan Blake
Justin Parks
David Davis
Ingo Klöcker
Simon Osborne
Thomas Wolmer
Corrections
Title Page #1: THE WORLD OF LONE WOLF -> <cite>The World of Lone Wolf</cite>
Make that <cite>
ok!
Title Page #2: tumultuous climax to your epic struggle to overthrow -> tumultuous climax of your epic struggle to overthrow
Flows better. Please tell me if this is an innapropriate type of change.
Acknowledgements #1: frontmatter -> front matter
as in gs01, gs03, lw05, lw06, lw08-lw12
The Game Rules #2: For WILLPOWER, add the standard footnote about going below 0 points.
This is the standard footnote: "It is possible for your WILLPOWER to fall below zero. For example, if you are the victim of an attack that drains your WILLPOWER, your score may be forced below zero. If your WILLPOWER falls to zero or below, you will not be able to cast spells or use your Wizard's Staff until your score is again above zero."
I was thinking, we may want to add some instructions about how to treat the Wizard's Staff in combat if your WP is at 0 or below, namely a normal non-magical weapon that has the normal penalty for not using the Wizard's Staff.
I am not sure of the Staff can be used as a normal weapon? But OK, it does say it looks like a normal quarterstaff and is stronger than all known metals, so I guess it should do. Change then "use your Wizard's Staff" -> "use the magical properties of your Wizard's Staff" and and add "You can still use your Wizard's Staff in combat as a normal weapon, but you must deduct 6 points from your COMBAT SKILL." either to this footnote or as a new footnote in Magical Powers, Wizard's Staff?
The Game Rules #3: Remove "If you run out of space, you can copy out the chart or have it photocopied."
The Game Rules #5: What happens to an existing CS score? Footnote similar to in 03btng (but note that WP and EP are covered already): "This section of the rules implies that you must re-pick your COMBAT SKILL even though you may have already completed a previous adventure. This is without precedent in other books and therefore appears to be a mistake. In order to preserve rule consistency among the books, you may choose to retain your COMBAT SKILL score."
The Game Rules #6: Endurance Points paragraph
Argh! Again, the sentance "Add *any* ENDURANCE points gained from playing previous Grey Star *adventures* {plural} to your initial score of 30..." is rather problematic. I can't possibly see how it would make sense to add EPs from all three of the previous Grey Star books! Surely it must mean the *last* successfully completed book? (So why use the phrasing as printed, then?). Also, it's standard practice in the Lone Wolf rules to restore your EPs to their original total when carrying them over (Dever explicitly endorses this in a Lone Wolf Club Newsletter) ... but I would hazard a guess that this isn't intended here. (Although the phrase "...points GAINED from playing previous...adventures" certainly doesn't clarify this - the phrase "left over from" would surely be the intended meaning?) ... Adding your restored EP total would just be too much of a bonus, I feel, and spoil gameplay. Hows about the following footnote: "The most likely interpretation of the rules here is that the player can take their final ENDURANCE points total from the end of their last successfully completed Grey Star adventure, and add 30 to this figure. Note that in the rules for the Lone Wolf books, it is standard practice to restore one's ENDURANCE points to their original total when carrying them across from one adventure to the next, but this does not appear to be appropriate here in this scenario with the Moonstone."
The Game Rules #7: Willpower paragraph
I find the sentence "If you possess unused WILLPOWER points from earlier Grey Star adventures, add them to the 50 WILLPOWER points which possession of the the Moonstone grants you" a bit problematic - it clearly says "adventures", plural - but surely it can only mean the *last* adventure you successfully completed? And of course, there's the whole "what WP score do I actually use - your initial total? the score you had at the end of the book?........... on balance, I'd suggest the following footnote: "The most likely interpretation of the rules here is that the player can take their final WILLPOWER total from the end of their last successfully completed Grey Star adventure, and add 50 to this figure."
The Game Rules #8: Combat Skill paragraph
Proposed footnote: "This implies that you must pick a new COMBAT SKILL from the Random Number Table even if have already completed previous Grey Star adventure(s). This conflicts with the rules for the Lone Wolf books, where you can carry over your score from a successfully completed previous adventure. For the sake of consistency, players may wish to carry over their existing CS score from the last Grey Star book they completed."
Magical Powers #11: to Shasarak once during the -> to Shasarak <em>once</em> during the
Magical Powers #12: magical powers -> Magical Powers
It's wrong in only one place.
Magical Powers #13: power(s) -> Power(s)
There's a shitload of them... It might be worth noting that unlike the other books, this book consistently does *not* capitalize single "Power".
Errata - Project Aon has come so far already, we might as well finish the job we started. ;-)
Magical Powers #17: Add a footnote about choosing Powers similar to in 03btng: "The wording of this section of the rules seems to indicate--if read literally--that you may choose your set of Lesser Magicks again if you have completed a previous adventure. This is without precedent in other books. In order to preserve consistency with other books, you should not choose your Lesser Magicks again. If you have currently mastered five Lesser Magicks, you may choose one additional Lesser Magick from the list. If you have already mastered six Lesser Magicks, you keep these. If you choose Alchemy as a new Lesser Magick, or you have not mastered the Lesser Magick of Alchemy but you have selected the Higher Magick of Theurgy, you also receive a Herb Pouch with contents, as detailed in the Equipment section."
damn, this got a bit longwinded.
For the footnote, change "currently master" to "have currently mastered", "already master" to "have already mastered", and "do not master" to "have not mastered".
OK fixed above.
Equipment #1: Add "Mark these 4 items in your Action Chart." below the Alchemny equipment list.
add to Errata!
Done!
Equipment #2: Remove " at the beginning of this book".
Equipment #4: Add a footnote about carrying over old equipment, like in 03btng: "If you have completed a previous adventure, you keep all equipment you had at the end of that adventure. You do not receive any new equipment, unless you have just selected Alchemy as your sixth Lesser Magick, or if you have not mastered the Lesser Magick of Alchemy but you have selected the Higher Magick of Theurgy, in which case you receive a Herb Pouch with contents as indicated in this section."
Change "or you do not master" to "or if you have not mastered".
OK fixed above.
Equipment #5: Add a bookmark about the Herb Pouch similar to in 03btng: "If you have mastered the Lesser Magick of Alchemy or the Higher Magick of Theurgy and therefore have a Herb Pouch, you may choose to keep potions, vials, or ingredients in either the Herb Pouch or your Backpack. All other Backpack Items must be kept in your Backpack."
Equipment #6: If you have chosen Alchemy -> If you have chosen Alchemy or Theurgy
Equipment #7: Un-paragraph the Alchemy equipment list
Equipment #8: It counts as 1 item -> It counts as one item
Rules for Combat #2: on the page after the Random Number Table -> in the back of this book
Sage Advice #2: higher and lesser magicks -> Higher and Lesser Magicks
as in the PAMoS
Sage Advice #3: choose the powers -> choose the Powers
Errata
1 #1: excitement. the -> excitement. The
1 #2: speaking to you. -> speaking to you.'
add to Errata!
There is no such fault! See new addition instead.
1 #3: Wytch-king, Shasarak. -> Wytch-king, Shasarak.'
add to Errata!
Done!
1 #5: speak again. -> speak again.'
Already added to errata.
2 #1: life force -> life-force
as in the PAMoS
5 #1: power -> Power
Errata - but I don't think this needs changing.
Right you are, I don't understand why I added this one. Rejected.
9 #1: If you have versed -> If you are versed
Errata - surprisingly.
9 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
9 #3: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
9 #4:
Should the links be reordered with the Higher Magick options together at the bottom?
If there was any standard order we'd have, I think it should be: 1) Higher Magicks 2) Lesser Magicks 3) Items 4) Wizard's Staff 5) Nothing (i.e. spend no WP). But I think Jon's latest command was to not change unless really needed for some reason?
It seems that Ian Page made deliberate choices about how to order certain choices sometimes seeming to place the rash, bad choices first, or I could just be seeing patterns where there are none. If there is no such order in this case - I leave that judgment to you - go ahead and reorder according to the scheme mentioned by Thomas. So let it be written, so let it be done.
I'll go through the book and see how many changes this scheme would require... (and then there's all the other books... but I remember on of the two first actually adhering to this scheme already).
I propose changing. See new errata item.
9 #5: Move the first two choices to the last positions, according to the "qualified before non-qualified" rule.
10 #1: Theurgey -> Theurgy
10 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
10 #3: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
10 #4: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
10 #5: powers -> Powers
Errata
12 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
12 #2: Dimension door -> Dimension Door
12 #3: The wordings of the 1st and 3rd choices are confusing I think. The 1st sounds like you have to use Thaumaturgy if you can, but of course you'd rather use a Temeris potion and save some WP. Therefore I propose that we: 1) move the second choice to the first position, and 2) (see the next errata entry).
12 #4: If you are using -> Otherwise, you may use
This abuses the sentence structure a bit, but it works, or?
15 #2: mid-day -> midday
as in all other books
15 #3: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
15 #4: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
15 #5:
Is there a missing link option that should go here? The final link lists 3 Magical Powers you can use, but you are only given the option of two of them. If not, 'Theurgy' should be removed from the final option.
To reach this section, you have to possess Theurgy, so the first choice implies that you use it. We could perhaps modify the choice text to make it explicit?
Ah, right. Would footnoting this would be best?
I vote for clarifying footnote.
OK, but... hm.
15 #6: Explain that the first choice means you use Theurgy.
I have no creative idea here. Anyone?
18 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
18 #2: cognitive powers -> cognitive Powers
??
Errata - Unsure whether this should be changed.
The phrase "cognitive powers" is used commonly enough that I tend to think that it was used in its mundane, non-capitalized form.
18 #3: these powers -> these Powers
Errata
19 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
19 #2: these powers -> these Powers
Errata
20 #1: life-less -> lifeless
as in all other books
21 #1: life force -> life-force
as in the PAMoS
24 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
24 #2: this power -> this Power
Errata
24 #3: these powers -> these Powers
Errata
24 #4:
Should there be a footnote explaining that only one 3 WP deduction should occur and only if player chooses that option?
I don't think that's necessary.
25 #1:
Remove all occurrences of '1' from the equipment list.
25 #2: (1) coil of Rope -> Coil of Rope
also
25 #3: Tinder box -> Tinderbox
As everywhere else.
This is Errata.
25 #4: What about those sheaths? In 02tfc we added this footnote: "If you wish to take the Sheath, record it as a Special Item on your Action Chart."
25 #5: 1 Torch counts as 1 Backpack Item -> each Torch counts as one Backpack Item
29 #1: Item-slung -> Item&emdash;slung
29 #2: Item-hung -> Item&emdash;hung
29 #3:
Also, remove all instances of '1' in the equipment list x6
29 #4: high magick -> Higher Magick
This is Errata.
32 #1: half-way -> halfway
as in the PAMoS
This isn't fixed yet although according to the colour in the EC it should already be fixed.
34 #1: you. they -> you. They
34 #3: you. they -> you. They
Rejected; duplicate.
34 #4: pestle and mortar -> Pestle and Mortar
34 #5: empty vial -> empty Vial
34 #8: empty vials -> empty Vials
34 #9: Zakutsk flower -> Zakutsk Flower
34 #10: Demeril root -> Demeril Root
34 #12: The Pestle and Mortar are Backpack Items -> The Pestle and Mortar and the Tinderbox are Backpack Items,
Seems odd that everything except the Tinderbox is accounted for.
34 #13: 1 Pestle and Mortar -> Pestle and Mortar
Note, keep numbers of the vials as they are, for contrast and in consistency with the Equipment section.
34 #14: 1 Tinderbox -> Tinderbox
36 #1: Tanith have -> Tanith has
Wait here, neither ... nor can be followed by both singular and plural, right?
38 #1: persectuion -> persecution
38 #2: dematerilize -> dematerialize
38 #5: feet away. The home -> feet away. 'The home
add to Errata!
Done!
42 #1: ceatures -> creatures
42 #2: despatching -> dispatching
as in the PAMoS
43 #1: surrrounds -> surrounds
43 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
43 #3: this power -> this Power
Errata
43 #4: these powers -> these Powers
Errata
46 #1: crab-Iike -> crab-like
47 #1: by the Agarash's inspired state -> by the Agarashi's inspired state
Agarash is a proper noun
Those with the "inspired state of crazed frenzy" are the (other) demons, not Agarash himself, right? I think this should say something else.
Dever later used the term Agarashi when referring to Agarash's minions; does this turn of phrase appear anywhere else in the book? If not, we could get away with inserting "Agarashi's".
I was also thinking about that too, but "Agarashi" is not used anywhere else in any of the GS books.
I vote for changing it to "Agarashi's" and adding an explanatory footnote. Are there any other occurences of this term where this tactic would be helpful?
OK changed above and new footnote issue added.
47 #2: half-way -> halfway
as in the PAMoS
47 #3: The term <cite>Agarashi</cite> is not used in any other place in the <cite>Worls of Lone Wolf</cite> books, but it is used elsewhere for the monstrous servants of Agarash the Damned.
That footnote really sucks. Better ideas anyone?
How about: "The term Agarashi is not found elsewhere in the World of Lone Wolf series. However, in the more recent Lone Wolf books, Dever has used the term to denote any monstrous servant of Agarash the Damned." Still not that great, though.
50 #1: Intinctively -> Instinctively
50 #2: this power -> this Power
Errata
58 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
58 #2: your power -> your Power
??
Errata
58 #3: Move the 3rd choice up to the 1st position, according to the "qualified before non-qualified" rule.
60 #1: Tanith have -> Tanith has
See sect36 #1!
67 #1: stone. and -> stone, and
67 #3: toadbeasts -> toad beasts
as in 91, 97, 200
67 #4: this power -> this Power
Errata
68 #1: jubliant -> jubilant
69 #1: incandesence -> incandescence
79 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
82 #1: reptillian -> reptilian
86 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
86 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
86 #3: This section is missing a choice for what to do if you do not have any of the Magical Powers! However, 280 has one: "If you do not possess any of the above Powers, you must attack the bridge with your Staff; turn to 175."
91 #1: clutches at it's clawed hand -> clutches at its clawed hand
91 #2: strenghtening -> strengthening
91 #3: sorcery -> Sorcery
Is it the Power of Sorcery or sorcery in general?
Errata. Don't know whether to change this or not.
93 #1: materialzed -> materialized
97 #1: semi-circle -> semicircle
as in the PAMoS
99 #1: fast flowing -> fast-flowing
as in the PAMoS
I assume that there was a "fast-flowing" at the other end of that arrow. :)
Fixed.
104 #1: crowd of demons are -> crowd of demons is
108 #1: enchantment -> Enchantment
Is it the Power of Enchantment or enchantment in general?
Errata
I'm not currently somewhere where I can view the graph to check, but I assume that there was no mention of which power was used when getting to this section. I vote for capitalization.
Section 170 has "If you have the Magical Power of Enchantment...". I don't quite see what you mean?
113 #1: magical Power -> Magical Power
Errata
115 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
115 #2: powers -> Powers
x2
Errata x2
125 #1: life forces -> life-forces
as in the PAMoS
129 #1: life force -> life-force
as in the PAMoS
135 #1: gallerys -> galleries
137 #1: group of demons are rushing -> group of demons is rushing
141 #1: large, reptilian -> large reptilian
142 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
142 #2:
Should the links be reordered?
Um... why?
Wasn't sure if the normal Magical Power options should occur before the Higher Magick ones. Is there any clear standard in the book?
There is a tendency to put first a Lesser Magick, then the corresponding Higher Magick, then the next Lesser Magick, etc. There are also other variants, like in this section...
I don't see a need to change this one.
Rejected, then. The original here follows "my scheme".
142 #3: these powers -> these Powers
Errata
147 #1: small, black -> small black
147 #2: half-way -> halfway
as in the PAMoS
154 #1: battle cry -> battle-cry
as in the PAMoS
154 #2: death blow -> death-blow
as in the PAMoS
159 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
159 #2: these powers -> these Powers
Errata
161 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
162 #1: power of Prophecy -> Power of Prophecy
Errata
165 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
166 #1: clawed feet tells -> clawed feet tell
Wait - note that it says "The scratch and scuffle of clawed feet tells ...". I disagree, even though it's "scratch and scuffle".
169 #1: WILLPDWER -> WILLPOWER
170 #1: growling and howling of the pack draws -> growling and howling of the pack draw
Disagree, see 166 #1.
170 #2: demon horde are -> demon horde is
170 #3: half-way -> halfway
Duplicate.
170 #4: out-rider -> outrider
as twice in lw15
170 #5: half-way -> halfway
as in the PAMoS
170 #6: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
170 #7: power of Sorcery -> Power of Sorcery
Errata
172 #1: retatively -> relatively
172 #2: she cries 'Something -> she cries. 'Something
175 #1:
This raises an interesting precedent. Could this be an alternative rule for negative WP scores?
I'd definately vote that we draw attention to it in the general Rules section where we discuss the possibility of "negative willpower". It still doesn't quite do away with the fact that the text in places has said "if your willpower has fallen to zero OR LESS" (am I remembering that correctly?) but it seems a good workable way to deal with the issue, and I think we'd do well to commend it to players as a rules suggestion.
I don't know if we should include it in the rules sections, but we could add footnotes in the places where you are told to use WP for a spell with no option to abstain. I don't think it's too many places actually; most are probably in the second half of 02tfc. Note that by only allowing it in these places, it is still possible to get negative WP when faced with Kleasas or Mother Magris.
180 #1: death blow -> death-blow
as in the PAMoS
Again, I assume that we want to change this to "death-blow". Is there an error in the scripts that I need to fix?
Fixed. Nope, human error.
181 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
181 #2: power of Physiurgy -> Power of Physiurgy
Errata
184 #1: spiralling -> spiraling
Apparently either use is OK. <http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=spiral> The rules that I learned as a wee lad make me think the original "ll" version is preferable.
184 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
191 #1: that of hate, for, indeed, I hate you, -> that of hate, for indeed I hate you,
Talks, like, William,... Shatner.
194 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
194 #2: these powers -> these Powers
Errata
196 #1: power of Sorcery -> Power of Sorcery
Errata
200 #1: shuffling column reach -> shuffling column reaches
200 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
201 #1: shore', he says -> shore,' he says
This is already correct in the XML file?
201 #2: great host of Masbaté warriors wait. -> great host of Masbaté warriors waits.
201 #3: wariors -> warriors
201 #4: you ashore. I am -> you ashore. 'I am
add to Errata!
Done!
202 #1: half-way -> halfway
Duplicate.
202 #2: half-way -> halfway
as in the PAMoS
203 #1: this power -> this Power
Errata
203 #2: cause all the demons
'all' should be italicised.
204 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
208 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
208 #2: these powers -> these Powers
Errata
208 #3: Magical Power of Thaumaturgy -> Higher Magick of Thaumaturgy
Higher Magicks are otherwise always noted as such.
213 #1: look-out -> lookout
as in all other books and even in this book in section 6
Duplicate.
213 #2: look-out -> lookout
as in the PAMoS
216 #1: pupiless -> pupilless (or pupil-less)
I think this is strange enough that I vote for "pupil-less".
Yuk! two hyphenated letter l's, I think that looks very ugly - I much prefer Ian Page's "pupiless"
Urgh, the Shadakine have eyes like female pupils? Any of the others, but not "pupiless"!
I just found a comparable example (in the Oxford Dictionary no less): "tailless" as in "a tailless cat". So I still opt for "pupilless" even though the Internet seems to favour "pupiless" with about 6:5.
217 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
217 #2: enchantment -> Enchantment
Is it the Power of Enchantment or enchantment in general?
I think this is being used generally and should be left uncapitalised.
Agreed, "enchantment".
Yeah it's a generic use of enchantment.
217 #3: power of Telergy -> Power of Telergy
Errata
218 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
221 #1: volley of shining javelins that arc -> volley of shining javelins that arcs
In this instance, I believe that it is more appropriate for the javelins to arc as individuals rather than the volley itself arcing. Very subjective in this case, but it is legal to have a group subject use a plural verb when acting as individuals. Very subjective. So, "arc"
The original text is OK. Think of it as one of those "a something of somethings" English constructions (collective nouns). It's more common to say the whole collective phrase in full, rather than just the collective noun on its own. (eg "a pride of lions", "a gaggle of geese"... you never introduce a 'gaggle' into your paragraph without at least having said the full "gaggle of geese" phrase first). Because the collected noun itself is always in its plural form in these contructions, it sounds more natural for the verb to to be in the plural form as well... ...thus the javelins arc, rather than the volley arcs (because you don't say the volley on its own, you say {the volley of javelins} arc. In fact, it's probably easiest to think of the collective noun as behaving more like an adjective...
221 #2: heads and plunge -> heads and plunges
223 #1: speed -> speeds
I think the phrase "that speed ..." modifies "denizens" rather than "onslaught". Basically, you must survive the onslaught of those denizens who are coming for you, rather than the idea of surviving the denizen's onslaught that rushes toward you. So, "speed".
The original text is OK. The clauses stack up as: "You survive the onslaught (of the denizens {that speed towards you})
225 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
225 #2: these powers -> these Powers
Errata
229 #1: Half-way -> Halfway
233 #1: half-way -> halfway
Duplicate.
233 #2: COMBATSKILL -> COMBAT SKILL
233 #3: half-way -> halfway
as in the PAMoS
233 #4: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
233 #5: Encode the combat correctly.
234 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
234 #2: these powers -> these Powers
Errata
237 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
237 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
237 #3: power of Necromancy -> Power of Necromancy
Errata
237 #4: power as a Visionary -> Power as a Visionary
Errata
237 #5: these powers -> these Powers
Errata
239 #1: fulfilment -> fulfillment
fulfilment is correct (British)
242 #1: you gasp, Beyond -> you gasp. Beyond
255 #1: sorcery -> Sorcery
??
I think this should be changed, yes.
268 #1: miles lies -> miles lie
280 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
280 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
280 #3: the above powers -> the above Powers
Errata
280 #4: Choice #4's link to 59 is obviously wrong. 175 is the right target (and this section is otherwise an orphan).
282 #1: crosed -> crossed
282 #2: reinforcments -> reinforcements
287 #1: realise -> realize
289 #1: this power -> this Power
Errata
291 #1: shield of sorcery -> Shield of Sorcery
And mark it as a <spell>. We did similarly in 02TFC.
Errata. Note issue 2 refers to this issue.
OK, removing issue 2.
293 #1: horde begin -> horde begins
This is debatable, but I don't think a horde can gloat as a group, therefore "begin". I know this ignores other instances of the same rule, but this is a subjective rule.
I really think "begins" sounds better here, but some other cases in this book: sect139 "The horde stop", sect174 "The horde falters", sect221 "The horde comes". I'd change 139.
293 #2: battle cry -> battle-cry
as in the PAMoS
294 #1: backpack -> Backpack
Errata
294 #2: empty vial -> empty Vial
This is Errata.
298 #1: over Tanith imperils -> over Tanith imperil
Disagree. I read "Mother Magri and her power over Tanith" as a unity. Is there a clear rule for this?
Absolutely - the original text is fine & correct.
298 #2: magical powers -> Magical Powers
Does GS refer to the "game term" or...?
I would leave this alone since it isn't referring to a specific Magical Power.
I vote to change it because it refers to Grey Star's powers which are the Magical Powers not generic magical powers.
yup
300 #1: Should be Kazim's song be formatted as verse?
The song is verse-formatted in the original.
304 #1: Turn 235 -> Turn to 235
309 #1: zig-zag -> zigzag
312 #1: sombre -> somber
sombre is correct (British)
312 #2: guildsmen -> Guildsmen
as everywhere else in this book
317 #1: fomation -> formation
317 #2: Combat last -> Combat lasts
321 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
324 #1: war horn -> war-horn
as in the PAMoS
328 #1: Shadkine -> Shadakine
328 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
328 #3: The first choice seems to allow you to teleport without cost! Proposed footnote: "If you possess a Temeris Potion you can teleport without using any WILLPOWER points. If you are versed in the Higher Magick of Thaumaturgy you can teleport by deducting 2 WILLPOWER points from your total. To use the Dimension Door of the Moonstone to teleport, deduct 4 WILLPOWER points. (Cf. Section 12.)
331 #1: six items -> eight items
332 #1: tree-tops -> treetops
as in gs02, gs03, lw11, lw15 (2x)
336 #1: Remember that your Herb Pouch will hold up to six items may be stored in your Backpack. -> Remember that your Herb Pouch can hold up to eight items, and any other potions may be stored in your Backpack.
337 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
337 #3: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
337 #4: hail of arrows that fly -> hail of arrows that flies
337 #5: Move the 1st choice to the last position, according to the "qualified before non-qualified" rule.
340 #1: forboding -> foreboding
343 #1: superstitous -> superstitious
347 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
347 #2: beleagured -> beleaguered
352 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
353 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
353 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick
as in the PAMoS
353 #3: This section is missing a choice for what to do if you do not have any of the Magical Powers! However, 280 has one: "If you do not possess any of the above Powers, you must attack the bridge with your Staff; turn to 175."
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