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<p>It would seem that the heavens have not heard your prayers. A spear whistles past your head and embeds itself in the neck of your galloping horse. With a shriek of pain, the horse topples forward and you both roll in a tangled heap on the highway.</p>
- <p>Dazed and pinned down by the weight of the dead body of your horse, the last thing you remember are the sharp penetrating spearheads of the Giak lances.</p>
+ <p>Dazed and pinned down by the weight of the dead body of your horse, the last thing you remember is the sharp penetrating spearheads of the Giak lances.</p>
<deadend>You have failed in your mission.</deadend>
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<p>You are dizzy from your wound and you stumble through the trees like a blind man.</p>
<p>Suddenly you fall forward as if the ground has been snatched from beneath your feet. You have fallen head-first into a hunting pit. As you look up, you can see four Drakkarim levelling their bows at you, evil sneers spreading simultaneously across their ugly faces.</p>
- <deadend>As the world darkens, the last things you feel are the black shafts of their arrows deep in your chest. You have failed in your mission.</deadend>
+ <deadend>As the world darkens, the last thing you feel is the black shafts of their arrows deep in your chest. You have failed in your mission.</deadend>
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<p>(<a idref="sect41">41</a>) Added a period to the end of the illustration<ch.apos/>s caption.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect46">46</a>) Moved the last choice (about Sixth Sense) into the first position.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect51">51</a>) Added a period to the end of the illustration<ch.apos/>s caption.</p>
+ <p>(<a idref="sect54">54</a>) Replaced <quote>the last thing you remember are</quote> with <quote>the last thing you remember is</quote>.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect57">57</a>) Replaced <quote>liquids and</quote> with <quote>liquids, and</quote>.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect58">58</a>) Made the choice that led to <a idref="sect286">Section 286</a> to lead to <a idref="sect251">Section 251</a> instead. Many readers have realized that there was an error here but assumed that the original numbers for the choices should simply be reversed, giving Lone Wolf a chance at survival for hiding and certain death for riding on. Actually, there is no certain death possibility here. Hiding is supposed to grant you certain survival. The proof of this correction is that there is no other path to <a idref="sect251">Section 251</a>, and it works perfectly.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect61">61</a>) Replaced <quote>blood-smeared and</quote> with <quote>blood-smeared, and</quote>.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect151">151</a>) Added <quote>If you wish to remove the pin, <!--link-text-->turn to 337<!--/link-text-->.</quote> This is the only other possible choice for what is a strangely one-sided option in the original text. More flavourful language might make more sense, such as <quote>If you still wish to remove the pin with your hands,</quote> but to best preserve the integrity of the text, we simply copied the choice from <a idref="sect23">Section 23</a>.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect152">152</a>) Added a period to the end of the illustration<ch.apos/>s caption.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect153">153</a>) Replaced <quote>Durncrag range</quote> with <quote>Durncrag Range</quote>.</p>
- <p>(<a idref="sect154">154</a>) Replaced <quote>head first</quote> with <quote>head-first</quote>. Replaced <quote>last thing you feel are the black shafts</quote> with <quote>last things you feel are the black shafts</quote>.</p>
+ <p>(<a idref="sect154">154</a>) Replaced <quote>head first</quote> with <quote>head-first</quote>. Replaced <quote>last thing you feel are the black shafts</quote> with <quote>last thing you feel is the black shafts</quote>.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect163">163</a>) Replaced <quote>nearly an half</quote> with <quote>nearly half</quote>.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect166">166</a>) Replaced <quote>tortuous</quote> with <quote>torturous</quote>.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect167">167</a>) Moved the last choice (about Sixth Sense) into the first position.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect181">181</a>) Removed <quote>You have lost your Weapons and Equipment, but not your life.</quote> from the end of the second paragraph because it is possible to reach this section of the book without having lost your equipment.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect184">184</a>) Replaced <quote>Sword and</quote> with <quote>Sword, and</quote>.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect192">192</a>) Replaced <quote>Kraan, and</quote> with <quote>Kraan and</quote>.</p>
- <p>(<a idref="sect197">197</a>) Deleted a superfluous space after the word <quote>wish</quote> at the very end of the second sentence.</p>
+ <p>(<a idref="sect197">197</a>) Removed a superfluous space after the word <quote>wish</quote> at the very end of the second sentence.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect196">196</a>) Replaced <quote>click</quote> with <quote><onomatopoeia>click</onomatopoeia></quote>.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect200">200</a>) Reversed the order of the choices. Added a period to the end of the illustration<ch.apos/>s caption.</p>
<p>(<a idref="sect201">201</a>) Changed the choice that led to <a idref="sect215">Section 215</a> to lead to <a idref="sect15">Section 15</a> instead. The original choice appears to make sense, but does not work out in a map. The indication that the correct section is really <a idref="sect15">15</a> is the fact that it is not otherwise accessible (though <a idref="sect215">Section 215</a> is) and <a idref="sect15">15</a> leads back to <a idref="sect201">Section 201</a> when taking the opposite direction.</p>
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