From: Simon Osborne Date: Sat, 27 Sep 2014 09:15:35 +0000 (+0000) Subject: Footnote updates (Books 8 and 9); "thing--is" changes (LW1, 19; FW3, 4) X-Git-Tag: 20150414~60 X-Git-Url: http://git.projectaon.org/?p=project-aon.git;a=commitdiff_plain;h=fe5a32764b1db8d60458847d4782c34ae6c286a4 Footnote updates (Books 8 and 9); "thing--is" changes (LW1, 19; FW3, 4) git-svn-id: https://projectaon.org/data/trunk@2385 f6f3e2d7-ff33-0410-aaf5-b4bee2cdac11 --- diff --git a/en/xml/01fftd.xml b/en/xml/01fftd.xml index 0c4cbc0..f37338a 100644 --- a/en/xml/01fftd.xml +++ b/en/xml/01fftd.xml @@ -1284,7 +1284,7 @@

It would seem that the heavens have not heard your prayers. A spear whistles past your head and embeds itself in the neck of your galloping horse. With a shriek of pain, the horse topples forward and you both roll in a tangled heap on the highway.

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Dazed and pinned down by the weight of the dead body of your horse, the last thing you remember are the sharp penetrating spearheads of the Giak lances.

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Dazed and pinned down by the weight of the dead body of your horse, the last thing you remember is the sharp penetrating spearheads of the Giak lances.

You have failed in your mission. @@ -2587,7 +2587,7 @@

You are dizzy from your wound and you stumble through the trees like a blind man.

Suddenly you fall forward as if the ground has been snatched from beneath your feet. You have fallen head-first into a hunting pit. As you look up, you can see four Drakkarim levelling their bows at you, evil sneers spreading simultaneously across their ugly faces.

- As the world darkens, the last things you feel are the black shafts of their arrows deep in your chest. You have failed in your mission. + As the world darkens, the last thing you feel is the black shafts of their arrows deep in your chest. You have failed in your mission. @@ -5669,6 +5669,7 @@

(41) Added a period to the end of the illustrations caption.

(46) Moved the last choice (about Sixth Sense) into the first position.

(51) Added a period to the end of the illustrations caption.

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(54) Replaced the last thing you remember are with the last thing you remember is.

(57) Replaced liquids and with liquids, and.

(58) Made the choice that led to Section 286 to lead to Section 251 instead. Many readers have realized that there was an error here but assumed that the original numbers for the choices should simply be reversed, giving Lone Wolf a chance at survival for hiding and certain death for riding on. Actually, there is no certain death possibility here. Hiding is supposed to grant you certain survival. The proof of this correction is that there is no other path to Section 251, and it works perfectly.

(61) Replaced blood-smeared and with blood-smeared, and.

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(151) Added If you wish to remove the pin, turn to 337. This is the only other possible choice for what is a strangely one-sided option in the original text. More flavourful language might make more sense, such as If you still wish to remove the pin with your hands, but to best preserve the integrity of the text, we simply copied the choice from Section 23.

(152) Added a period to the end of the illustrations caption.

(153) Replaced Durncrag range with Durncrag Range.

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(154) Replaced head first with head-first. Replaced last thing you feel are the black shafts with last things you feel are the black shafts.

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(154) Replaced head first with head-first. Replaced last thing you feel are the black shafts with last thing you feel is the black shafts.

(163) Replaced nearly an half with nearly half.

(166) Replaced tortuous with torturous.

(167) Moved the last choice (about Sixth Sense) into the first position.

diff --git a/en/xml/03toz.xml b/en/xml/03toz.xml index f01e6e2..2e7546d 100644 --- a/en/xml/03toz.xml +++ b/en/xml/03toz.xml @@ -2960,7 +2960,7 @@ 205 -

Blinded by the glare of their spotlight, you struggle to avoid the oncoming truck and swerve sharply to the right. Captain Frankland, who is manning the heavy machine gun, is poised to fire when you make your move. Not only does the sudden change of direction ruin his aim, it hurls him out of the jeep into the path of the pick-up truck. The loss of your commander distracts your attention from the road, and you fail to see the steep ravine that is looming out of the darkness. The last thing you hear, as the jeep plummets sixty feet into an empty reservoir, are the terrified screams of Haskell and Knott.

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Blinded by the glare of their spotlight, you struggle to avoid the oncoming truck and swerve sharply to the right. Captain Frankland, who is manning the heavy machine gun, is poised to fire when you make your move. Not only does the sudden change of direction ruin his aim, it hurls him out of the jeep into the path of the pick-up truck. The loss of your commander distracts your attention from the road, and you fail to see the steep ravine that is looming out of the darkness. The last thing you hear, as the jeep plummets sixty feet into an empty reservoir, is the terrified screams of Haskell and Knott.

Tragically, your life and your mission end here. @@ -5342,6 +5342,7 @@

(196) Replaced spyhole with spy-hole.

(199) Replaced stationary, then with stationary; then. Replaced ascend, then with ascend, and then.

(200) Replaced OK Jack with OK, Jack.

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(205) Replaced are the terrified screams with is the terrified screams.

(208) Replaced Backpack, then with Backpack and belt, and then (cf. Section 306).

(209) Replaced much-needed with much needed. Replaced to the west with to the east.

(213) Replaced shockwave with shock wave. Replaced counter-fire with counterfire. Replaced on to with onto. Added (Remember to deduct the relevant number of rounds from your Ammo Pouch.).

diff --git a/en/xml/04cc.xml b/en/xml/04cc.xml index 064fc80..8e34b05 100644 --- a/en/xml/04cc.xml +++ b/en/xml/04cc.xml @@ -1741,7 +1741,7 @@ 99 -

Those responsible for looting Eloy did a very thorough job of cleaning out the gun store. Virtually every item of stock has been taken, including a collection of animal trophies that were once displayed around the walls. The only thing displayed there now are crude skull-and-crossbones motifs, daubed on with shiny black paint.

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Those responsible for looting Eloy did a very thorough job of cleaning out the gun store. Virtually every item of stock has been taken, including a collection of animal trophies that were once displayed around the walls. The only things displayed there now are crude skull-and-crossbones motifs, daubed on with shiny black paint.

You sift through the debris-covered floor, but it is not until you look in the basement that you discover some items of practical value: