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78 #1: You use the Power of Elementalism here, but you don't have to pay any WP! Proposed footnote: "As you are using your Power of Elementalism against the Chaos-birds, you should deduct 1 WILLPOWER point."

148 #1: You use your Wizard's Staff here, but you don't have to pay any WP! Proposed footnote: "As you are using your Wizard's Staff against the Jahksa, you should deduct 2 WILLPOWER points."

2 WP is normal for ranged attacks with the Staff.

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title

Title Page #1: THE WORLD OF LONE WOLF -> <cite>The World of Lone Wolf</cite>

Make that <cite>

ok!

Title Page #2: tumultuous climax to your epic struggle to overthrow -> tumultuous climax of your epic struggle to overthrow

Flows better. Please tell me if this is an innapropriate type of change.

dedicate

acknwldg

Acknowledgements #1: frontmatter -> front matter

as in gs01, gs03, lw05, lw06, lw08-lw12

coming

tssf

The Story So Far . . . #1: Kleasa -> Kleasá

gamerulz

The Game Rules #1: Remove " at the front of this book"

The Game Rules #2: For WILLPOWER, add the standard footnote about going below 0 points.

This is the standard footnote: "It is possible for your WILLPOWER to fall below zero. For example, if you are the victim of an attack that drains your WILLPOWER, your score may be forced below zero. If your WILLPOWER falls to zero or below, you will not be able to cast spells or use your Wizard's Staff until your score is again above zero."

I was thinking, we may want to add some instructions about how to treat the Wizard's Staff in combat if your WP is at 0 or below, namely a normal non-magical weapon that has the normal penalty for not using the Wizard's Staff.

I am not sure of the Staff can be used as a normal weapon? But OK, it does say it looks like a normal quarterstaff and is stronger than all known metals, so I guess it should do. Change then "use your Wizard's Staff" -> "use the magical properties of your Wizard's Staff" and and add "You can still use your Wizard's Staff in combat as a normal weapon, but you must deduct 6 points from your COMBAT SKILL." either to this footnote or as a new footnote in Magical Powers, Wizard's Staff?

The Game Rules #3: Remove "If you run out of space, you can copy out the chart or have it photocopied."

The Game Rules #4: Remove " on the last page of this book"

The Game Rules #5: What happens to an existing CS score? Footnote similar to in 03btng (but note that WP and EP are covered already): "This section of the rules implies that you must re-pick your COMBAT SKILL even though you may have already completed a previous adventure. This is without precedent in other books and therefore appears to be a mistake. In order to preserve rule consistency among the books, you may choose to retain your COMBAT SKILL score."

The Game Rules #6: Endurance Points paragraph

Argh! Again, the sentance "Add *any* ENDURANCE points gained from playing previous Grey Star *adventures* {plural} to your initial score of 30..." is rather problematic. I can't possibly see how it would make sense to add EPs from all three of the previous Grey Star books! Surely it must mean the *last* successfully completed book? (So why use the phrasing as printed, then?). Also, it's standard practice in the Lone Wolf rules to restore your EPs to their original total when carrying them over (Dever explicitly endorses this in a Lone Wolf Club Newsletter) ... but I would hazard a guess that this isn't intended here. (Although the phrase "...points GAINED from playing previous...adventures" certainly doesn't clarify this - the phrase "left over from" would surely be the intended meaning?) ... Adding your restored EP total would just be too much of a bonus, I feel, and spoil gameplay. Hows about the following footnote: "The most likely interpretation of the rules here is that the player can take their final ENDURANCE points total from the end of their last successfully completed Grey Star adventure, and add 30 to this figure. Note that in the rules for the Lone Wolf books, it is standard practice to restore one's ENDURANCE points to their original total when carrying them across from one adventure to the next, but this does not appear to be appropriate here in this scenario with the Moonstone."

The Game Rules #7: Willpower paragraph

I find the sentence "If you possess unused WILLPOWER points from earlier Grey Star adventures, add them to the 50 WILLPOWER points which possession of the the Moonstone grants you" a bit problematic - it clearly says "adventures", plural - but surely it can only mean the *last* adventure you successfully completed? And of course, there's the whole "what WP score do I actually use - your initial total? the score you had at the end of the book?........... on balance, I'd suggest the following footnote: "The most likely interpretation of the rules here is that the player can take their final WILLPOWER total from the end of their last successfully completed Grey Star adventure, and add 50 to this figure."

The Game Rules #8: Combat Skill paragraph

Proposed footnote: "This implies that you must pick a new COMBAT SKILL from the Random Number Table even if have already completed previous Grey Star adventure(s). This conflicts with the rules for the Lone Wolf books, where you can carry over your score from a successfully completed previous adventure. For the sake of consistency, players may wish to carry over their existing CS score from the last Grey Star book they completed."

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Magical Powers #1: physiurgy -> Physiurgy

Magical Powers #2: lesser magicks -> Lesser Magicks

as in the PAMoS

Magical Powers #3: higher magicks -> Higher Magicks

as in the PAMoS

Magical Powers #4: lesser magicks -> Lesser Magicks

as in the PAMoS

Magical Powers #5: higher magicks -> Higher Magicks

as in the PAMoS

Magical Powers #6: lesser magicks -> Lesser Magicks

as in the PAMoS

Magical Powers #7: higher magicks -> Higher Magicks

as in the PAMoS

Magical Powers #8: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

Magical Powers #9: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

Magical Powers #10: higher magicks -> Higher Magicks

as in the PAMoS

Magical Powers #11: to Shasarak once during the -> to Shasarak <em>once</em> during the

Magical Powers #12: magical powers -> Magical Powers

It's wrong in only one place.

Magical Powers #13: power(s) -> Power(s)

There's a shitload of them... It might be worth noting that unlike the other books, this book consistently does *not* capitalize single "Power".

Errata - Project Aon has come so far already, we might as well finish the job we started. ;-)

Magical Powers #14: visionary -> Visionary

Errata

Magical Powers #15: alchemy -> Alchemy

Errata

Magical Powers #16: divination -> Prophecy

Errata

Magical Powers #17: Add a footnote about choosing Powers similar to in 03btng: "The wording of this section of the rules seems to indicate--if read literally--that you may choose your set of Lesser Magicks again if you have completed a previous adventure. This is without precedent in other books. In order to preserve consistency with other books, you should not choose your Lesser Magicks again. If you have currently mastered five Lesser Magicks, you may choose one additional Lesser Magick from the list. If you have already mastered six Lesser Magicks, you keep these. If you choose Alchemy as a new Lesser Magick, or you have not mastered the Lesser Magick of Alchemy but you have selected the Higher Magick of Theurgy, you also receive a Herb Pouch with contents, as detailed in the Equipment section."

damn, this got a bit longwinded.

For the footnote, change "currently master" to "have currently mastered", "already master" to "have already mastered", and "do not master" to "have not mastered".

OK fixed above.

equipmnt

Equipment #1: Add "Mark these 4 items in your Action Chart." below the Alchemny equipment list.

add to Errata!

Done!

Equipment #2: Remove " at the beginning of this book".

Equipment #4: Add a footnote about carrying over old equipment, like in 03btng: "If you have completed a previous adventure, you keep all equipment you had at the end of that adventure. You do not receive any new equipment, unless you have just selected Alchemy as your sixth Lesser Magick, or if you have not mastered the Lesser Magick of Alchemy but you have selected the Higher Magick of Theurgy, in which case you receive a Herb Pouch with contents as indicated in this section."

Change "or you do not master" to "or if you have not mastered".

OK fixed above.

Equipment #5: Add a bookmark about the Herb Pouch similar to in 03btng: "If you have mastered the Lesser Magick of Alchemy or the Higher Magick of Theurgy and therefore have a Herb Pouch, you may choose to keep potions, vials, or ingredients in either the Herb Pouch or your Backpack. All other Backpack Items must be kept in your Backpack."

Equipment #6: If you have chosen Alchemy -> If you have chosen Alchemy or Theurgy

Equipment #7: Un-paragraph the Alchemy equipment list

Equipment #8: It counts as 1 item -> It counts as one item

cmbtrulz

Rules for Combat #1: Remove " on the inside back cover of the book".

Rules for Combat #2: on the page after the Random Number Table -> in the back of this book

Sage Advice #1: confrton -> confront

Sage Advice #2: higher and lesser magicks -> Higher and Lesser Magicks

as in the PAMoS

Sage Advice #3: choose the powers -> choose the Powers

Errata

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sect1

1 #1: excitement. the -> excitement. The

1 #2: speaking to you. -> speaking to you.'

add to Errata!

There is no such fault! See new addition instead.

1 #3: Wytch-king, Shasarak. -> Wytch-king, Shasarak.'

add to Errata!

Done!

1 #4: Kamali -> Karnali

1 #5: speak again. -> speak again.'

Already added to errata.

sect2

2 #1: life force -> life-force

as in the PAMoS

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sect4

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5 #1: power -> Power

Errata - but I don't think this needs changing.

Right you are, I don't understand why I added this one. Rejected.

sect6

6 #1: satety -> safety

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sect8

sect9

9 #1: If you have versed -> If you are versed

Errata - surprisingly.

9 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

9 #3: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

9 #4:

Should the links be reordered with the Higher Magick options together at the bottom?

If there was any standard order we'd have, I think it should be: 1) Higher Magicks 2) Lesser Magicks 3) Items 4) Wizard's Staff 5) Nothing (i.e. spend no WP). But I think Jon's latest command was to not change unless really needed for some reason?

It seems that Ian Page made deliberate choices about how to order certain choices sometimes seeming to place the rash, bad choices first, or I could just be seeing patterns where there are none. If there is no such order in this case - I leave that judgment to you - go ahead and reorder according to the scheme mentioned by Thomas. So let it be written, so let it be done.

I'll go through the book and see how many changes this scheme would require... (and then there's all the other books... but I remember on of the two first actually adhering to this scheme already).

I propose changing. See new errata item.

9 #5: Move the first two choices to the last positions, according to the "qualified before non-qualified" rule.

sect10

10 #1: Theurgey -> Theurgy

10 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

10 #3: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

10 #4: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

10 #5: powers -> Powers

Errata

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sect12

12 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

12 #2: Dimension door -> Dimension Door

12 #3: The wordings of the 1st and 3rd choices are confusing I think. The 1st sounds like you have to use Thaumaturgy if you can, but of course you'd rather use a Temeris potion and save some WP. Therefore I propose that we: 1) move the second choice to the first position, and 2) (see the next errata entry).

12 #4: If you are using -> Otherwise, you may use

This abuses the sentence structure a bit, but it works, or?

sect13

sect14

sect15

15 #1: birdge -> bridge

15 #2: mid-day -> midday

as in all other books

15 #3: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

15 #4: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

15 #5:

Is there a missing link option that should go here? The final link lists 3 Magical Powers you can use, but you are only given the option of two of them. If not, 'Theurgy' should be removed from the final option.

To reach this section, you have to possess Theurgy, so the first choice implies that you use it. We could perhaps modify the choice text to make it explicit?

Ah, right. Would footnoting this would be best?

I vote for clarifying footnote.

OK, but... hm.

15 #6: Explain that the first choice means you use Theurgy.

I have no creative idea here. Anyone?

sect16

sect17

sect18

18 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

18 #2: cognitive powers -> cognitive Powers

Errata - Unsure whether this should be changed.

The phrase "cognitive powers" is used commonly enough that I tend to think that it was used in its mundane, non-capitalized form.

18 #3: these powers -> these Powers

Errata

sect19

19 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

19 #2: these powers -> these Powers

Errata

sect20

20 #1: life-less -> lifeless

as in all other books

sect21

21 #1: life force -> life-force

as in the PAMoS

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sect23

sect24

24 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

24 #2: this power -> this Power

Errata

24 #3: these powers -> these Powers

Errata

24 #4:

Should there be a footnote explaining that only one 3 WP deduction should occur and only if player chooses that option?

I don't think that's necessary.

sect25

25 #1:

Remove all occurrences of '1' from the equipment list.

25 #2: (1) coil of Rope -> Coil of Rope

also

25 #3: Tinder box -> Tinderbox

As everywhere else.

This is Errata.

25 #4: What about those sheaths? In 02tfc we added this footnote: "If you wish to take the Sheath, record it as a Special Item on your Action Chart."

25 #5: 1 Torch counts as 1 Backpack Item -> each Torch counts as one Backpack Item

29 #1: Item-slung -> Item&emdash;slung

29 #2: Item-hung -> Item&emdash;hung

29 #3:

Also, remove all instances of '1' in the equipment list x6

29 #4: high magick -> Higher Magick

This is Errata.

sect30

sect31

sect32

32 #1: half-way -> halfway

as in the PAMoS

This isn't fixed yet although according to the colour in the EC it should already be fixed.

sect33

sect34

34 #1: you. they -> you. They

34 #2: wil -> will

34 #3: you. they -> you. They

Rejected; duplicate.

34 #4: pestle and mortar -> Pestle and Mortar

34 #5: empty vial -> empty Vial

34 #6: saltpetre

34 #7: sulphur

34 #8: empty vials -> empty Vials

34 #9: Zakutsk flower -> Zakutsk Flower

34 #10: Demeril root -> Demeril Root

34 #11: vials -> Vials

34 #12: The Pestle and Mortar are Backpack Items -> The Pestle and Mortar and the Tinderbox are Backpack Items,

Seems odd that everything except the Tinderbox is accounted for.

34 #13: 1 Pestle and Mortar -> Pestle and Mortar

Note, keep numbers of the vials as they are, for contrast and in consistency with the Equipment section.

34 #14: 1 Tinderbox -> Tinderbox

sect35

sect36

36 #1: Tanith have -> Tanith has

Wait here, neither ... nor can be followed by both singular and plural, right?

sect37

sect38

38 #1: persectuion -> persecution

38 #2: dematerilize -> dematerialize

38 #3: warior -> warrior

38 #4: mightly -> mighty

38 #5: feet away. The home -> feet away. 'The home

add to Errata!

Done!

39 #1: lIke -> like

42 #1: ceatures -> creatures

42 #2: despatching -> dispatching

as in the PAMoS

sect43

43 #1: surrrounds -> surrounds

43 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

43 #3: this power -> this Power

Errata

43 #4: these powers -> these Powers

Errata

sect44

sect45

sect46

46 #1: crab-Iike -> crab-like

sect47

47 #1: by the Agarash's inspired state -> by the Agarashi's inspired state

Agarash is a proper noun

Those with the "inspired state of crazed frenzy" are the (other) demons, not Agarash himself, right? I think this should say something else.

Dever later used the term Agarashi when referring to Agarash's minions; does this turn of phrase appear anywhere else in the book? If not, we could get away with inserting "Agarashi's".

I was also thinking about that too, but "Agarashi" is not used anywhere else in any of the GS books.

I vote for changing it to "Agarashi's" and adding an explanatory footnote. Are there any other occurences of this term where this tactic would be helpful?

OK changed above and new footnote issue added.

47 #2: half-way -> halfway

as in the PAMoS

47 #3: The term <cite>Agarashi</cite> is not used in any other place in the <cite>Worls of Lone Wolf</cite> books, but it is used elsewhere for the monstrous servants of Agarash the Damned.

That footnote really sucks. Better ideas anyone?

How about: "The term Agarashi is not found elsewhere in the World of Lone Wolf series. However, in the more recent Lone Wolf books, Dever has used the term to denote any monstrous servant of Agarash the Damned." Still not that great, though.

sect48

sect49

sect50

50 #1: Intinctively -> Instinctively

50 #2: this power -> this Power

Errata

58 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

58 #2: your power -> your Power

Errata

58 #3: Move the 3rd choice up to the 1st position, according to the "qualified before non-qualified" rule.

sect59

sect60

60 #1: Tanith have -> Tanith has

See sect36 #1!

67 #1: stone. and -> stone, and

67 #2: wierd -> weird

67 #3: toadbeasts -> toad beasts

as in 91, 97, 200

67 #4: this power -> this Power

Errata

sect68

68 #1: jubliant -> jubilant

sect69

69 #1: incandesence -> incandescence

79 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

sect80

sect81

sect82

82 #1: reptillian -> reptilian

86 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

86 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

86 #3: This section is missing a choice for what to do if you do not have any of the Magical Powers! However, 280 has one: "If you do not possess any of the above Powers, you must attack the bridge with your Staff; turn to 175."

91 #1: clutches at it's clawed hand -> clutches at its clawed hand

91 #2: strenghtening -> strengthening

91 #3: sorcery -> Sorcery

Is it the Power of Sorcery or sorcery in general?

Errata. Don't know whether to change this or not.

sect92

sect93

93 #1: materialzed -> materialized

97 #1: semi-circle -> semicircle

as in the PAMoS

sect98

sect99

99 #1: fast flowing -> fast-flowing

as in the PAMoS

I assume that there was a "fast-flowing" at the other end of that arrow. :)

Fixed.

104 #1: crowd of demons are -> crowd of demons is

108 #1: enchantment -> Enchantment

Is it the Power of Enchantment or enchantment in general?

Errata

I'm not currently somewhere where I can view the graph to check, but I assume that there was no mention of which power was used when getting to this section. I vote for capitalization.

Section 170 has "If you have the Magical Power of Enchantment...". I don't quite see what you mean?

113 #1: magical Power -> Magical Power

Errata

sect114

sect115

115 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

115 #2: powers -> Powers

Errata x2

125 #1: life forces -> life-forces

as in the PAMoS

129 #1: life force -> life-force

as in the PAMoS

135 #1: gallerys -> galleries

sect136

sect137

137 #1: group of demons are rushing -> group of demons is rushing

141 #1: large, reptilian -> large reptilian

sect142

142 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

142 #2:

Should the links be reordered?

Um... why?

Wasn't sure if the normal Magical Power options should occur before the Higher Magick ones. Is there any clear standard in the book?

There is a tendency to put first a Lesser Magick, then the corresponding Higher Magick, then the next Lesser Magick, etc. There are also other variants, like in this section...

I don't see a need to change this one.

Rejected, then. The original here follows "my scheme".

142 #3: these powers -> these Powers

Errata

147 #1: small, black -> small black

147 #2: half-way -> halfway

as in the PAMoS

154 #1: battle cry -> battle-cry

as in the PAMoS

154 #2: death blow -> death-blow

as in the PAMoS

159 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

159 #2: these powers -> these Powers

Errata

sect160

sect161

161 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

sect162

162 #1: power of Prophecy -> Power of Prophecy

Errata

sect163

sect164

sect165

165 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

sect166

166 #1: clawed feet tells -> clawed feet tell

Wait - note that it says "The scratch and scuffle of clawed feet tells ...". I disagree, even though it's "scratch and scuffle".

sect167

sect168

sect169

169 #1: WILLPDWER -> WILLPOWER

sect170

170 #1: growling and howling of the pack draws -> growling and howling of the pack draw

Disagree, see 166 #1.

170 #2: demon horde are -> demon horde is

170 #3: half-way -> halfway

Duplicate.

170 #4: out-rider -> outrider

as twice in lw15

170 #5: half-way -> halfway

as in the PAMoS

170 #6: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

170 #7: power of Sorcery -> Power of Sorcery

Errata

sect171

sect172

172 #1: retatively -> relatively

172 #2: she cries 'Something -> she cries. 'Something

sect173

sect174

sect175

175 #1:

This raises an interesting precedent. Could this be an alternative rule for negative WP scores?

I'd definately vote that we draw attention to it in the general Rules section where we discuss the possibility of "negative willpower". It still doesn't quite do away with the fact that the text in places has said "if your willpower has fallen to zero OR LESS" (am I remembering that correctly?) but it seems a good workable way to deal with the issue, and I think we'd do well to commend it to players as a rules suggestion.

I don't know if we should include it in the rules sections, but we could add footnotes in the places where you are told to use WP for a spell with no option to abstain. I don't think it's too many places actually; most are probably in the second half of 02tfc. Note that by only allowing it in these places, it is still possible to get negative WP when faced with Kleasas or Mother Magris.

175 #2: ie 2 -> i.e. 2

180 #1: death blow -> death-blow

as in the PAMoS

Again, I assume that we want to change this to "death-blow". Is there an error in the scripts that I need to fix?

Fixed. Nope, human error.

sect181

181 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

181 #2: power of Physiurgy -> Power of Physiurgy

Errata

sect182

sect183

sect184

184 #1: spiralling -> spiraling

Apparently either use is OK. <http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=spiral> The rules that I learned as a wee lad make me think the original "ll" version is preferable.

184 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

191 #1: that of hate, for, indeed, I hate you, -> that of hate, for indeed I hate you,

Talks, like, William,... Shatner.

sect192

sect193

sect194

194 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

194 #2: these powers -> these Powers

Errata

sect195

sect196

196 #1: power of Sorcery -> Power of Sorcery

Errata

200 #1: shuffling column reach -> shuffling column reaches

200 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

sect201

201 #1: shore', he says -> shore,' he says

This is already correct in the XML file?

201 #2: great host of Masbaté warriors wait. -> great host of Masbaté warriors waits.

201 #3: wariors -> warriors

201 #4: you ashore. I am -> you ashore. 'I am

add to Errata!

Done!

sect202

202 #1: half-way -> halfway

Duplicate.

202 #2: half-way -> halfway

as in the PAMoS

sect203

203 #1: this power -> this Power

Errata

203 #2: cause all the demons

'all' should be italicised.

sect204

204 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

208 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

208 #2: these powers -> these Powers

Errata

208 #3: Magical Power of Thaumaturgy -> Higher Magick of Thaumaturgy

Higher Magicks are otherwise always noted as such.

213 #1: look-out -> lookout

as in all other books and even in this book in section 6

Duplicate.

213 #2: look-out -> lookout

as in the PAMoS

sect214

sect215

sect216

216 #1: pupiless -> pupilless (or pupil-less)

I think this is strange enough that I vote for "pupil-less".

Yuk! two hyphenated letter l's, I think that looks very ugly - I much prefer Ian Page's "pupiless"

Urgh, the Shadakine have eyes like female pupils? Any of the others, but not "pupiless"!

I just found a comparable example (in the Oxford Dictionary no less): "tailless" as in "a tailless cat". So I still opt for "pupilless" even though the Internet seems to favour "pupiless" with about 6:5.

sect217

217 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

217 #2: enchantment -> Enchantment

Is it the Power of Enchantment or enchantment in general?

I think this is being used generally and should be left uncapitalised.

Agreed, "enchantment".

Yeah it's a generic use of enchantment.

217 #3: power of Telergy -> Power of Telergy

Errata

sect218

218 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

sect219

sect220

220 #1: enery -> energy

sect221

221 #1: volley of shining javelins that arc -> volley of shining javelins that arcs

In this instance, I believe that it is more appropriate for the javelins to arc as individuals rather than the volley itself arcing. Very subjective in this case, but it is legal to have a group subject use a plural verb when acting as individuals. Very subjective. So, "arc"

The original text is OK. Think of it as one of those "a something of somethings" English constructions (collective nouns). It's more common to say the whole collective phrase in full, rather than just the collective noun on its own. (eg "a pride of lions", "a gaggle of geese"... you never introduce a 'gaggle' into your paragraph without at least having said the full "gaggle of geese" phrase first). Because the collected noun itself is always in its plural form in these contructions, it sounds more natural for the verb to to be in the plural form as well... ...thus the javelins arc, rather than the volley arcs (because you don't say the volley on its own, you say {the volley of javelins} arc. In fact, it's probably easiest to think of the collective noun as behaving more like an adjective...

221 #2: heads and plunge -> heads and plunges

sect222

sect223

223 #1: speed -> speeds

I think the phrase "that speed ..." modifies "denizens" rather than "onslaught". Basically, you must survive the onslaught of those denizens who are coming for you, rather than the idea of surviving the denizen's onslaught that rushes toward you. So, "speed".

The original text is OK. The clauses stack up as: "You survive the onslaught (of the denizens {that speed towards you})

sect224

sect225

225 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

225 #2: these powers -> these Powers

Errata

229 #1: Half-way -> Halfway

233 #1: half-way -> halfway

Duplicate.

233 #2: COMBATSKILL -> COMBAT SKILL

233 #3: half-way -> halfway

as in the PAMoS

233 #4: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

233 #5: Encode the combat correctly.

sect234

234 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

234 #2: these powers -> these Powers

Errata

sect235

sect236

sect237

237 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

237 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

237 #3: power of Necromancy -> Power of Necromancy

Errata

237 #4: power as a Visionary -> Power as a Visionary

Errata

237 #5: these powers -> these Powers

Errata

sect238

sect239

239 #1: fulfilment -> fulfillment

fulfilment is correct (British)

sect240

sect241

sect242

242 #1: you gasp, Beyond -> you gasp. Beyond

255 #1: sorcery -> Sorcery

I think this should be changed, yes.

268 #1: miles lies -> miles lie

280 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

280 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

280 #3: the above powers -> the above Powers

Errata

280 #4: Choice #4's link to 59 is obviously wrong. 175 is the right target (and this section is otherwise an orphan).

sect281

sect282

282 #1: crosed -> crossed

282 #2: reinforcments -> reinforcements

287 #1: realise -> realize

sect288

sect289

289 #1: this power -> this Power

Errata

sect290

sect291

291 #1: shield of sorcery -> Shield of Sorcery

And mark it as a <spell>. We did similarly in 02TFC.

Errata. Note issue 2 refers to this issue.

OK, removing issue 2.

sect292

sect293

293 #1: horde begin -> horde begins

This is debatable, but I don't think a horde can gloat as a group, therefore "begin". I know this ignores other instances of the same rule, but this is a subjective rule.

I really think "begins" sounds better here, but some other cases in this book: sect139 "The horde stop", sect174 "The horde falters", sect221 "The horde comes". I'd change 139.

293 #2: battle cry -> battle-cry

as in the PAMoS

sect294

294 #1: backpack -> Backpack

Errata

294 #2: empty vial -> empty Vial

This is Errata.

298 #1: over Tanith imperils -> over Tanith imperil

Disagree. I read "Mother Magri and her power over Tanith" as a unity. Is there a clear rule for this?

Absolutely - the original text is fine & correct.

298 #2: magical powers -> Magical Powers

Does GS refer to the "game term" or...?

I would leave this alone since it isn't referring to a specific Magical Power.

I vote to change it because it refers to Grey Star's powers which are the Magical Powers not generic magical powers.

yup

sect299

299 #1: lies -> lie

sect300

300 #1: Should be Kazim's song be formatted as verse?

The song is verse-formatted in the original.

sect301

sect302

302 #1: ememy -> enemy

sect303

sect304

304 #1: Turn 235 -> Turn to 235

309 #1: zig-zag -> zigzag

sect310

sect311

sect312

312 #1: sombre -> somber

sombre is correct (British)

312 #2: guildsmen -> Guildsmen

as everywhere else in this book

317 #1: fomation -> formation

317 #2: Combat last -> Combat lasts

sect318

sect319

sect320

320 #1: kock -> knock

sect321

321 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

sect322

sect323

sect324

324 #1: war horn -> war-horn

as in the PAMoS

328 #1: Shadkine -> Shadakine

328 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

328 #3: The first choice seems to allow you to teleport without cost! Proposed footnote: "If you possess a Temeris Potion you can teleport without using any WILLPOWER points. If you are versed in the Higher Magick of Thaumaturgy you can teleport by deducting 2 WILLPOWER points from your total. To use the Dimension Door of the Moonstone to teleport, deduct 4 WILLPOWER points. (Cf. Section 12.)

sect329

sect330

sect331

331 #1: six items -> eight items

sect332

332 #1: tree-tops -> treetops

as in gs02, gs03, lw11, lw15 (2x)

336 #1: Remember that your Herb Pouch will hold up to six items may be stored in your Backpack. -> Remember that your Herb Pouch can hold up to eight items, and any other potions may be stored in your Backpack.

sect337

337 #1: melée -> mêlée

337 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

337 #3: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

337 #4: hail of arrows that fly -> hail of arrows that flies

337 #5: Move the 1st choice to the last position, according to the "qualified before non-qualified" rule.

sect338

sect339

sect340

340 #1: forboding -> foreboding

sect341

sect342

sect343

343 #1: superstitous -> superstitious

347 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

347 #2: beleagured -> beleaguered

352 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

sect353

353 #1: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

353 #2: higher magick -> Higher Magick

as in the PAMoS

353 #3: This section is missing a choice for what to do if you do not have any of the Magical Powers! However, 280 has one: "If you do not possess any of the above Powers, you must attack the bridge with your Staff; turn to 175."

Combat Rules Summary #1: cross reference -> cross-reference

as in the PAMoS

Combat Rules Summary #2:

Add 'Pick a number from the Random Number Table.' as the fourth step.

Combat Rules Summary #3: Turn to Combat Results Table. -> Turn to the Combat Results Table.

The Passing of the Shianti #: Wytch-Queen -> Wytch-queen

just like Wytch-king

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Jonathan Blake

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Ingo Klöcker

Christopher Lundgren

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18: Detect Evil -> Sense Evil

18: <spell> Sense Evil

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title

title #1: Most everything needs to be updated, inluding the name of the license.

Title Page #2: Warrlord -> Warlord

dedicate

dedicate #1: Insert real dedication.

To the spirit of San Diego - America's Finest City

acknwlg

coming

tssf

The Story So Far . . . #1: Footnote the Nyraz vs. Nyras discrepancy.

In the Magnamund Companion, and in Newsletter Summer Special 1987 it is spelled Nyraz. In TDC it is consistently spelled Nyras.

Perhaps we could include a footnote in "The Story So Far . . ." explaining the discrepancy. I don't think we should change it here, being later and presumably more thought-out, but if we ever finish XML versions of the Newsletters and MC, we could change it there.

The Story So Far . . . #2: freestate -> Freeland (as in The Story So Far in LW13 and LW14)

The Story So Far . . . #3: Grand Master disciplines -> Grand Master Disciplines

The Story So Far . . . #4: Somrnlending -> Sommlending

The Story So Far . . . #5: occuning -> occurring

The Story So Far . . . #6: Magnarnund -> Magnamund

The Story So Far . . . #7: fotil -> foul

The Story So Far . . . #8: Nadziranium -> Nadziranim

The Story So Far . . . #9: doomstone -> Doomstone (2x)

The Story So Far . . . #10: Magnaam -> Magnaarn (as 84+ times in this book)

The Story So Far . . . #11: aftercareful -> after careful

The Story So Far . . . #12: Kai lord -> Kai Lord

The Story So Far . . . #13: Naar, the King of the darkness -> Naar, the King of the Darkness

The Story So Far . . . #14: monastery so that may teach -> monastery so that they may teach

The Story So Far . . . #15: razing It to the ground -> razing it to the ground

The Story So Far . . . #16: unconvinced by envoy's plea -> unconvinced by the envoy's plea

The Story So Far . . . #17: Yes, I Shall help you. -> Yes, I shall help you.

The Story So Far . . . #18: elite -> élite

as in the PAMoS

The Story So Far . . . #19: feted -> fêted

The Story So Far . . . #20: Right-Handed -> Right-handed

The Story So Far . . . #21: Left-Handed -> Left-handed

(2x) Have we standardized on this?

If we hadn't before we have now. 14tcok already conforms, but there are two incorrect instances in TPLOR.

The Story So Far . . . #22: Darklands-- and -> Darklands--and

gamerulz

gamerulz #1: Remove ' that you will find in the front of this book. For ease of use, and for further adventuring, it is recommended that you photocopy these pages' from the first paragraph.

gamerulz #2: Remove ' on the last page of this book' in the second paragraph.

gamerulz #3: Encode the dashes in 'Books 1-14', 'Books 1-5' and 'Books 6-12' as &endash;

gamerulz #4: Remove "Korlinium Scabbard" and "Silver Bracers" from the allowed Special Items list.

gamerulz #5: Include standard footnote.

gamerulz #6: ie -> i.e.

discplnz

Grand Master Disciplines #1: Magi-Magic -> Magi-magic

Grand Master Disciplines #2: four disciplines, -> four Disciplines,

Grand Master Disciplines #3: gods -> Gods

Grand Master Disciplines #4: left-handed > Left-handed (x2)

Grand Master Disciplines #5: 'you have mastered four' - 'four' should be italicised

Grand Master Disciplines #6: 'skilled in two of' - 'two' should be italicised

Grand Master Disciplines #7: listed overleaf -> listed below

Grand Master Disciplines #8: 'Advanced Curing', 'Advanced Divination' and 'Advanced Invisibility' shouldn't be in BOLD, but should be Italicised

Grand Master Disciplines #9: together with your extra Grand Master Discipline -> together with your extra Grand Master Discipline(s)

discplnz #10: Include standard footnote.

. . . Disciplines #11: your Action Chart in Book 16.

add TLoV link to "Book 16."

. . . Disciplines #12: place period outside of Action Chart link

. . . Disciplines #13: Note the following in the errata list: In description of "Deliverance", changed COMBAT SKILL to ENDURANCE, as in later editions, and also because it does not make sense - it is not possible (or very, very unlikely) for your Combat Skill to fall to below 8.

. . . Disciplines #14: fortresses eases -> fortresses increases

powers

equipmnt

Equipment #1: safe-keeping -> safekeeping (2x) (as in PAMoS)

Equipment #2: eg -> e.g.

Equipment #3: arrow -> Arrow

(x5)

Equipment #4: arrows -> Arrows

(x5)

Equipment #5: bow -> Bow

(x8)

Equipment #6: Equipment (How to use / Money) Remove the reference to Palmyrion and Lune. Replace with: 'The currency of Nyras is the Kika. The exchange rate is 10 Kika for 1 Gold Crown.'

[This section does not appear at all in the original text]

equipmnt #7: Make 'map' a link to the map.

equipmnt #8: Remove ' (see the inside front cover of this book)' from the first paragraph.

equipmnt #9: Make 'Random Number Table' and 'Action Chart' in the first paragraph links to the respective sections.

equipmnt #10: Encode the dash in 'Books 1-14' as &endash;

equipmnt #11: Fix the items list (list items shall be paragraphed).

Equipment #12: Note the following in the errata list: In "Equipment - How to use it", under "Weapons", changed the bonus for combat skill from "3" to "5", once again as in later editions and due to the description of Grand Weaponmastery at the beginning.

cmbtrulz

cmbtrulz #1: Fix the stages list (list items shall be paragraphed).

cmbtrulz #2: Make 'Combat Results Table' in stage 4 a link to the section.

cmbtrulz #3: Remove ' on the inside back cover of this book' in stage 4.

cmbtrulz #4: Encode the minus in '35-30' as &endash;

should be −

cmbtrulz #5: Encode the minus in '35-30' as −

cmbtrulz #6: Change 'on the page after the Random Number Table' to 'in the back of this book'.

Rules for Combat #7: Make the following change: In the example for the rules of combat, the bonus for using Kai-surge is changed from "3" to "8", for consistency with the rules in the Grand Master disciplines section. Therefore I changed all the numbers in the example further on where appropriate.

Made the same changes as in The Plague Lords of Ruel.

lorecrcl

levels

imprvdsc

Improved Grand Master Disciplines #1: discipline -> Discipline

Improved Grand Master Disciplines #2: eg -> e.g.

Improved Grand Master Disciplines #3: Distipline -> Discipline

Improved Grand Master Disciplines #4: lncreases -> Increases

Improved Grand Master Disciplines #5: Discipines -> Disciplines

Improved Grand Master Disciplines #6: <spell> Strength and Halt Missile

imprvdsc #7: Include the Kai Grand Guardian improvements too... ah, they are already there in the XML but commented out.

(they don't appear in the original text, but I think they should appear in the PA editions).

imprvdsc #8: Make an <ul> of the Kai-alchemy spells instead of a <blockquote>.

imprvdsc #9: Encode the dash in '2-3' as &endash;

imprvdsc #10: Remove single quotes around 'Improved Grand Master Disciplines' in the last paragraph.

Improved . . . Disciplines #11: infra-vision -> infravision

as in 94 and 139

Improved . . . Disciplines #12:

We should probably footnote the Strength spell advising that it doesn't always seem to be used in unarmed combat.

Improved . . . Disciplines #13:

We should make formatting of the spell lists match

Improved . . . Disciplines #14: (e.g. Broadsword, Quarterstaff, Spear etc)

Should we convert that to a definitive list. We should at least do: etc -> etc.

Yes we should. It would look better and make the rules easier to apply in-game.

Improved . . . Disciplines #15: <spell> Flameshaft

Improved . . . Disciplines #16: etc[.] -> etc.

Improved . . . Disciplines #17: <spell> Splinter

1 #1: transversed -> traversed

1 #2: italicize Skyrider

1 #3: formatly -> formally

1 #4: decision to ??? King Sarnac's aid

sect2

2 #1: add illustration of sword here

2 #2: Turn to 184 -> Turn to 184.

This is ne in my copy.

sect3

sect4

sect5

5 #1: rnouldering -> mouldering

5 #2: curiousity -> curiosity

5 #3: needs puzzle footnote.

Section 5 requires a footnote to say 'This is the correct answer to the door lock puzzle in section 221.'

5 #4: <onomatopoeia> click

sect6

6 #1: tunnel stalker -> Tunnel Stalker

sect7

7 #1: swellng -> swelling

sect8

8 #1: beginning of section missing

sect9

sect10

10 #1: fix item list

10 #2: potions -> Potions

sect11

11 #1: Emphasize "and" in the first choice.

11 #2: Pathsmanship, and -> Pathsmanship and

sect12

sect13

13 #1: Teritarias -> Tentarias

sect14

sect15

sect16

16 #1: cautiousy -> cautiously

16 #2: distracted. -> distracted,

16 #3: turn 124 -> turn to 124

and create link

sect17

17 #1: BrotherHood -> Brotherhood

17 #2: rnagnify -> magnify

17 #3: renegrades -> renegades

17 #4: <spell> Halt Missle

17 #5: linkify "map"

sect18

18 #1: sound; -> sound:

18 #2: tunnel stalker -> Tunnel Stalker

18 #3: " or higher" in "Sun Knight or higher" is superfluous as Sun Knight is the higest rank you can have in this book.

Fair point, although I think all the books always this phrasing, do they not? And there's nothing to *stop* you playing the books in the wrong order, is there...? (Seriously, when *I* were a lad, I remember I got 'The Chasm of Doom' before 'The Caverns of Kalte', cos the bookshop didn't have it in stock!

This will only serves to confuse those that play in order. We decided when creating the Rules Handbook to ignore the concerns of those who insist on abusing the rules. ;)

18 #4: Emphasize "and" in the first choice.

18 #5: Pathsmanship, and -> Pathsmanship and

sect19

sect20

20 #1: Should 'Ziran' here be <foreign> instead of <quote>?

in addition to <quote>

sect21

sect22

22 #1: gap but -> gap, but

22 #2: approaching and -> approaching, and

22 #3: Mastership -> Mastery (?)

re: 22 and 223, what did we decide upon in the previous books? I know we relplaced Grandmastery -> Grand Mastery. Should we do the same in these instances with Mastership, or is it OK?

I found instances of both terms in my quick survey of the books. I think this may come down to personal preference, or just leaving the book as is even though it's inconsistent.

22 #4: Emphasize "and" in the second choice.

22 #5: Kai-alchemy, and -> Kai-alchemy and

22 #6: Kai-surge, and -> Kai-surge and

sect23

23 #1: river bank -> riverbank

23 #2: arrow -> Arrow

23 #3: woodsmoke -> wood smoke

as in the PAMoS

23 #4: raised -> razed

'raised to the ground' suggests the buildings were originally underground!

23 #5: incident and, shortly -> incident, and shortly

sect24

24 #1: mawtaw -> Mawtaw (cf. 24, 121, 258, 297)

24 #2: imniediately -> immiediately

24 #3: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship

24 #4: immiediately -> immediately

sect25

25 #1: headquarters In -> headquarters in

25 #2: awkward ellipsis

25 #3: or, failing -> or failing

25 #4: aknowledge -> acknowledge

25 #5: ante-chamber -> antechamber (2x) (as in LW05 (4x), LW06, LW09, LW13 (18x), GS01 (7x))

25 #6: ante-chamber -> antechamber

only one (of 2) occurrences was fixed

25 #7: assauge -> assuage

25 #8: If, you -> If you

25 #9: complication . . . -> complication . . .

too many spaces

25 #10: area . . . -> area . . .

too many spaces

29 #1: linkify "map"

30 #1: Kal-alchemy -> Kai-alchemy

sect31

31 #1: aimed ready -> aimed, ready

31 #2: They comprise a line -> They comprise of a line

not sure I agree but it's 4.30 AM so I can hardly speak Swedish either...

No, I don't think this is valid - "They comprise a line" is fine, like saying "they make a line", as opposed "they consist of a line" or "they are made up of a line"....

Here's a handy phrase: the whole comprises its parts, the parts compose the whole. The word "comprise" should be almost synonymous with "contain".

sect32

sect33

33 #1: floroa -> Floroa (2x) (can be picked up)

33 #2: how many handfuls?

Section 33 - As a rules note, it isn't clear how many handfuls of the plant you can take

I'd guess from the wording you are only supposed to take 1, but if there are several (i.e. 4), and you use one in the section, you should be able to take up to a maximum of 3 with you.

33 #3: floroa fungi -> Floroa Fungi

can be picked up and we changed other occurrences of floroa

33 #4: The footnote anchor is missing class="footnote", with strange side effects.

sect34

sect35

35 #1: Pck -> Pick

sect36

36 #1: word of advice -> words of advice

36 #2: steps and, as -> steps, and as

sect37

37 #1: <onomatopoeia> crack and remove quotation

37 #2: Suuddenly -> Suddenly

sect38

38 #1: arrow -> Arrow

(x2)

sect39

39 #1: most of the mercenaries ... has deserted -> most of the mercenaries ... have deserted

39 #2: remnants have -> remnants had (to match the tense of the other sentences)

39 #3: Lenicians -> Lencians

39 #4: Samac -> Sarnac (as everywhere else in this book)

39 #5: seige -> siege

sect40

40 #1: <onomatopoeia> click

40 #2: puzzle footnote

Section 40 requires a footnote to say 'This is the correct answer to the combination lock in section 89.'

40 #3: The footnote anchor is missing class="footnote", with strange side effects.

sect41

41 #1: treeline -> tree-line (as in 227 and in LW04, LW05 (4x), LW06, LW09)

41 #2: psi-surge -> Psi-surge

sect42

sect43

43 #1: directions and, with -> directions, and with

43 #2: cascades the passageway -> cascades into the passageway

43 #3: an almighty -> a mighty

is it really all-powerful? :)

A quirk of British-English. 'Almighty' can acceptably (colloquially?) be used in this way despite being inaccurate to the point of hyperbole, so I'd leave as-is.

sect44

sect45

45 #1: west and -> west, and

45 #2: Prarg and -> Prarg, and

45 #3: Antah and -> Antah, and

sect46

46 #1: Drakkarim backpack (I think this is OK uncapped)

assuming that the backpack wasn't meant to be picked up

sect47

47 #1: lchor -> ichor

sect48

48 #1: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship

sect49

49 #1: grotind -> ground

sect50

50 #1: anger and -> anger, and

50 #2: shoulder and, as -> shoulder, and as

50 #3: and, judging -> and judging

sect51

51 #1: much-needed -> much needed

as in the PAMoS

I've made some changes to the MoS

59 #1: The old well-beaten cumulative-or-not horse strikes again. Surely those two effects cannot be cumulative?

I doubt they're intended to be cumulative, no (very few bonuses of this type are, right back to the rules of the Kai Discipline of Weaponskill - perhaps add a footnote to clarify this?)

59 #2: " (or higher)" in "Sun Knight (or higher)" is superfluous as Sun Knight is the higest rank you can have in this book.

sect60

60 #1: Hellswarnp -> Hellswamp

sect61

sect62

sect63

63 #1: elite -> élite

63 #2: Krnght -> Knight

63 #3: breastplace -> breastplate (as in 348)

sect64

sect65

65 #1: argument, then -> argument. Then

65 #2: Forge -> forge

65 #3: open and -> open, and

65 #4: recently-cleared -> recently cleared

sect66

66 #1: Emphasize "and" in the phrase "and have reached".

sect67

sect68

68 #1: Link "Action Chart"

68 #2: backpack -> Backpack

sect69

sect70

70 #1: now and -> now, and

sect71

71 #1: turn to 217 -> turn to 267

sect72

72 #1: no sections lead here

Section 72 mirrors section 349 and 185, both of which are linked. It needs footnoting that it is superfluous.

sect73

73 #1: horizon and -> horizon, and

73 #2: linkify "map"

sect74

74 #1: ahead, to -> ahead to

sect75

75 #1: '(with Nyras Sceptre)' should be italicised

sect76

76 #1: arrow -> Arrow

76 #2: turn 174 -> turn to 174 (and link)

sect77

77 #1: upright you -> upright, you

77 #2: barner -> barrier

77 #3: linkify "map"

sect78

sect79

79 #1: Magnaam's -> Magnaarn's (as 84+ times in this book)

79 #2: escape and -> escape, and

79 #3: spy and, as -> spy, and as

79 #4: platform, and, as -> platform, and as

sect80

80 #1: seen Soon -> seen. Soon

sect81

81 #1: frees -> trees

81 #2: Pathsrnanship -> Pathsmanship

81 #3: crack and, almost -> crack, and almost

81 #4: <onomatopoeia> crack

sect82

82 #1: Shugkona -> Shugkona.

sect83

sect84

84 #1: watch and, hungry -> watch, and hungry

84 #2: weight. they -> weight, they

sect85

85 #1: Kai alchemy -> Kai-alchemy

sect86

86 #1: spell: Invisible Shield

sect87

87 #1: trench but -> trench, but

87 #2: edge and -> edge, and

87 #3: french -> trench (there's a funny one: headfirst into the french!)

sect88

sect89

89 #1: puzzle footnote?

89 #2: The even more user friendly version of this kind of footnote includes <p>To turn to the section of your choice, there are several methods. One is to turn to the <a idref="numbered">Numbered Sections</a> and choose the appropriate section from the list.</p>

The problem is when the reader is reading this in a non-hypertext context (e.g. printed PDF). That language doesn't make sense in that context. One of these days, I'll update the DTD to include a facility to choose between media.

sect90

90 #1: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship

sect91

91 #1: tunnel stalker -> Tunnel Stalker

sect92

sect93

93 #1: invisibility -> Invisbility

sect94

94 #1: nexus -> Nexus

94 #2: ,, -> ,

94 #3: infra-vision -> infravision (as in LW13 and LW14)

94 #4: Magi-magic -> Magi-Magic

sect95

95 #1: battlements; engulfing -> battlements, engulfing

100 #1: open but -> open, but

sect101

101 #1: otherwise, and -> otherwise and

sect102

sect103

sect104

104 #1: spell: Sense Evil

104 #2: Sense -> Detect

should Sense -> Detect as in LW14?

The later books also seem to use Sense. We should change the one occurrence in 14TCoK.

104 #3: ahead and -> ahead, and

sect105

sect106

106 #1: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship

sect107

107 #1: 'and' should be italicised in 1st option

sect108

108 #1: themsleves -> themselves

sect109

sect110

110 #1: "Concussion" shall be encoded as a <spell>, not a <quote>.

110 #2: feet and, using -> feet, and using

sect111

111 #1: arrow -> Arrow

111 #2: bow -> Bow

111 #3: immediately It -> immediately it

There is something seriously wrong with the 1st paragraph's 2nd sentence.

Very small change, actually.

sect112

sect113

sect114

114 #1: consumate -> consummate

sect115

115 #1: animal control -> Animal Control

sect116

sect117

sect118

118 #1: on to -> onto

sect119

sect120

sect121

121 #1: Kai-akhemy -> Kai-alchemy

121 #2: " (or higher)" in "Sun Knight (or higher)" is superfluous as Sun Knight is the higest rank you can have in this book.

121 #3: Oh no, one of those tricky modify ENDURANCE and then revert it back situations. I believe it should be something like "Treat the ENDURANCE point increase like this: Note down your current ENDURANCE score, and then add 5 to each. Fight the combat. If your ENDURANCE score is then still higher than your original value, decrease it to the original value. If it is lower, keep it as it is."

This seems to be the effects of the Strength spell that comes with Kai-alchemy at the rank of Sun Knight, although in the description of it is says it applied to unarmed combat... oh well, better keep that can of works closed.

Well, yeah, I suppose this is OK - the alternative is that if your EP drops to 5, then you die - which rather defeats the point of the spell!! (unless that 5EP lasts long enough for you to swallow some Laumspur before the spell wears off

121 #4: Emphasize "and" in the first choice.

121 #5: Kai-alchemy, and -> Kai-alchemy and

sect122

122 #1: distented -> distended

sect123

sect124

sect125

125 #1: Len clans -> Lencians

sect126

126 #1: Its ends -> It ends

sect127

sect128

sect129

129 #1: Tlmberwolves -> Timberwolves

sect130

sect131

sect132

132 #1: curing -> Curing

sect133

sect134

134 #1: Kai-shield -> Kai-screen (?)

sect135

135 #1: much-needed -> much needed

as in the PAMoS

I've made some changes to the MoS

sect136

136 #1: remove dashes around Mind Charm

136 #2: <spell> Mind Charm

136 #3: Drakknr -> Drakkar

sect137

sect138

138 #1: semi-circular -> semicircular (as semicircles in PAMoS)

sect139

139 #1: infra-vision -> infravision (as in LW13 and LW14)

sect140

140 #1: seiges -> sieges

140 #2: Remove central justification of the first line of paragraph 4

This is automatically fixed by the XML, but doesn't require an entry in the errata list.

140 #3: hard pressed -> hard-pressed

as in the PAMoS

140 #4: counter-attack -> counterattack

as in the PAMoS

140 #5: abroad the Skyrider -> aboard the Skyrider

140 #6: yourself are piped -> you are piped

I don't know about the grammar on this one, but I prefer 'yourself' to 'you'.

"Yourself" sounds a little better even though it is used incorrectly. It's a reflexive noun that's used in the subject of a sentence which is a common grammatical overcorrection.

sect141

141 #1: recognizes Its -> recognizes its

sect142

142 #1: <onomatopoeia> click

142 #2: the, guards -> the guards

sect143

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sect145

145 #1: <onomatopoeia>bang</onomatopoeia>

145 #2: can and, using -> can, and using

sect146

sect147

147 #1: omes -> comes (?)

147 #2: link Action Chart

sect148

sect149

149 #1: succcess -> success

149 #2: the second a stables -> the second is a stables

not necessary IMO

"the second a stables" is perfectly fine (and actually rather poetic)! don't change it.

I don't know about poetic, ;) but it is an acceptable ommission of the verb.

149 #3: Gaol

Should we standardize between "gaol" and "jail"?

In 07CD we left all instances of gaol / gaoler.

To this foreigner "gaol" sounds far more archaic and flavourful, while "jail" sounds modern and American :-)

Yup - I'd put money on the fact that Joe Dever used "goal" precisely to achieve the literary effect of flavoursome archaism

Among the LW books, 03tcok, 06tcok, 07cd, 08tjoh, now 15tdc, and also 18dtod and 19wb all use "gaol/gaoler". 02fotw has one "jail" and 05sots one "jailer". In the GS series, 01gstw consistently uses "jailer". FW has only "gaols" in 01hh, 02smr and 03oz. Anyway, I don't see a standardization being necessary, but if it is done I think only 02fotw and 05sots should be changed. The GS books do after all have a different author and the letters "Jailer's Keys" are probably already imprinted in the minds of all surviving Grey Stars this far :-)

I don't see any reason at all to standardize this - in English, there are two spellings, "gaol" and "jail", both perfectly valid, but with different literary connotations - so Dever or Page will have used them as such...... we've no business "correcting" this!

Don't mistake an effort to enforce consistency with a fussy and misguided decision about correctness. ;) I agree that only 02fotw and 05sots should be changed.

sect150

150 #1: Lenician -> Lencian

150 #2: Ellipsis missing space

150 #3: weapons enough -> weapons, enough

or "enough weapons"

not necessary IMO

! again, "you'll have weapons enough to" is a nice turn of phrase, don't go putting commas in, you'll ruin it!

150 #4: eyes and, for -> eyes, and for

sect151

151 #1: it Is -> it is

sect152

152 #1: Botherhood spell - 'Lightning Hand' - and -> Brotherhood spell Lightning Hand [italicised] and

sect153

153 #1: pfatform -> platform

sect154

154 #1: barnlike -> barn-like (?) (as all other xyz-like words)

154 #2: Lenclan -> Lencian

sect155

155 #1: hard-worn -> hard-won

155 #2: much-needed -> much needed

as in the PAMoS

sect156

156 #1: breakthrough -> break through

156 #2: Maybe we should change the text put a note here that if your ENDURANCE is below 15, do nothing. Or is that too obvious?

Worth clarifying in my opinion.

sect157

sect158

158 #1: Kai Alchemy -> Kai-alchemy (x2)

#2: Kai-alchemy, and -> Kai-alchemy and

158 #3: The links for the Kai alchemy with and without rank Sun Knight should be swapped - you learn "halt missile", which you use in section 17, at the rank of Sun Knight

158 #4: Emphasize "and" in the first choice.

158 #5: Kai-alchemy, and -> Kai-alchemy and

sect159

159 #1: 'and' should be italicised in 1st option

sect160

160 #1: on to -> onto

(x2)

sect161

161 #1: Magnaam -> Magnaarn (as 84+ times in this book)

sect162

sect163

163 #1: Wha . . . -> Wha. . . .

I'm not sure that this is what was intended. See next entry.

163 #2: Wha . . .What's -> Wha . . . What's

sect164

164 #1: french -> trench

sect165

sect166

166 #1: Drakkarirn -> Drakkarim

166 #2: you swept -> you are swept

170 #1: arrow -> Arrow

170 #2: bow -> Bow

The word is used in a quotation where it seems inappropriate to capitalize thereby coloring the emphasis of the sentence.

sect171

sect172

sect173

173 #1: 'and' should be italicised in 1st option

sect174

sect175

175 #1: 'and' should be italicised in 1st option

sect176

176 #1: curing -> Curing

sect177

sect178

178 #1: Drakkarlm -> Drakkarim

sect179

179 #1: Magnaam -> Magnaarn (as 84+ times in this book)

179 #2: '(with Nyras Sceptre)' should be italicised

sect180

180 #1: arrows -> Arrows

Need to check the rest of the book for "Arrows"

180 #2: arrow -> Arrow

180 #3: bow -> Bow

180 #4: (Remember to erase three arrows from your quiver.) - Italicised (*ne)

180 #5: (Remember to erase three arrows from your quiver.) - Also, maybe put this before the options

sect181

181 #1: compafiion -> companion

sect182

sect183

183 #1: arrow -> Arrow

183 #2: soldiers and -> soldiers, and

sect184

sect185

185 #1: death cry -> death-cry

as in the PAMoS

185 #2: <onomatopoeia>splash</onomatopoeia>

It's a tough call. I don't think that there's a right or wrong answer, but an onomatopoeia is a sound word that mimics the sound itself. It's not clear here and in the other places that I rejected "splash" that it's used in that way and not just describing the physical splash of water or snow.

sect186

186 #1: curing -> Curing

192 #1: If you do not possess this skill -> If you do not possess this skill, or have yet to reach this level of Kai training

192 #2: 'and' should be italicised in 1st option

192 #3: " or higher" in "Sun Knight or higher" is superfluous as Sun Knight is the higest rank you can have in this book.

sect193

sect194

194 #1: no sections lead here

Section 194 appears to be completely superfluous, repeating the events of Section 19 but missing out on much of the information. Nothing currently links to it; nothing can or needs to. It needs footnoting that it is such.

sect195

sect196

sect197

197 #1: Sehera -> Schera

200 #1: Magaarn -> Magnaarn (as 84+ times in this book)

200 #2: portlcullis -> portcullis

not porticullis

sect201

201 #1: arrow -> Arrow

201 #2: dedth -> death

sect202

sect203

203 #1: backpack -> Backpack

sect204

204 #1: Item -> item (?)

Did we decide not to capitalise 'item' in such an instance?

Yes.

sect205

sect206

206 #1: <foreign> 'Gaz rekenarim! Gaz rekenarim!'

sect207

207 #1: <spell> Lightning Hand

sect208

208 #1: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship

sect209

sect210

sect211

211 #1: backpack -> Backpack

sect212

212 #1: I believe the "turn to 30" link should be "turn to 304", as in section 109. 30 is where you go if you fail to solve the puzzle!

sect213

213 #1: link Action Chart

217 #1: Magnakal -> Magnakai

217 #2: mindforce -> Mindforce (it's capitalized in all other books)

sect218

sect219

219 #1: Praerg -> Prarg (as everywhere else in this book)

219 #2: deside -> decide

219 #3: Should war-hog be capitalised? The Giak name is Nad-Jaguz

It seems that "Nad-jaguz" is considered to be the proper name of the war-hogs.

sect220

220 #1: add "You hurry to the door and examine the lock. It is a" to the start of the section

sect221

221 #1: The last paragraph should be an option (i.e. indented)

221 #2: puzzle footnote?

221 #3: See 89.

221 #4: It is very hard to read the dragons' numbers. I thought the first one said 19, not 15, which caused me some confusion. Is it possible to do anything about the illustration?

I've made it as big as possible with the current format.

221 #5: have swore -> have sworn

sect222

222 #1: hocklng -> shocking

sect223

223 #1: Mastership -> Mastery (?)

see 22

sect224

sect225

225 #1: towds -> towards

225 #2: yet, as -> yet as

225 #3: upon an upright -> up on an upright

This is an ugly phrase, isn't it. I'd be inclined to add 'to' into the phrase: 'up onto an upright'.

"up onto" it is.

225 #4: still and -> still, and

sect226

226 #1: <onomatopoeia>splash</onomatopoeia>

226 #2: arrow but, fortunately -> arrow, but fortunately

sect227

sect228

228 #1: arrow -> Arrow

228 #2: bow -> Bow

sect229

sect230

230 #1: woodsmoke -> wood smoke

as in the PAMoS

sect231

231 #1: ramshakle -> ramshackle

sect232

sect233

sect234

234 #1: crusader's -> crusaders'

236 #1: dow -> down

238 #1: "If the weapon you are using is a Special Item, add 2 to the number you have picked. If it is a Mace, a Warhammer, an Axe, or a Broadsword, add 1. If it is a Dagger, a Quarterstaff, or a Short Sword, deduct 1." Are these cumulative? Jewelled Mace, +3? Dagger of Vashna, only +1? However unlikely it is that people use these as their main weapons...

sect239

sect240

sect241

241 #1: arrow -> Arrow

241 #2: second arrow -> second Arrow

i.e. another one in addition to the already correct(ed?) one

sect242

sect243

243 #1: killing bow -> killing blow

243 #2: Fix broken link to Action Chart

249 #1: Should war-hog be capitalised? The Giak name is Nad-Jaguz

see 219

sect250

sect251

251 #1: linkify "map"

sect252

sect253

sect254

254 #1: elite -> élite

sect255

sect256

256 #1: <spell> Strength

sect257

257 #1: less-enchanting -> less enchanting (?)

sect258

258 #1: arrow -> Arrow

258 #2: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship

262 #1: pin-points -> pinpoints

as in the PAMoS

262 #2: bank and, as -> bank, and as

sect263

sect264

264 #1: much-needed -> much needed

as in the PAMoS

I've made some changes to the MoS

sect265

265 #1: <onomatopoeia>bang</onomatopoeia>

sect266

sect267

267 #1: Drakkarlm -> Drakkarim

sect268

sect269

269 #1: inate -> innate

269 #2: linkify "map"

sect270

270 #1: arrow -> Arrow

270 #2: quiver -> Quiver

270 #3: "If you have Grand Weaponmastery with Bow, add 4 to the number you have picked.": should this be +3 consistent with just being a reminder about the standard bonus?

insufficient reason to overide explicitly granted bonus.

270 #4: block and, at -> block, and at

sect271

sect272

272 #1: '(in battle frenzy)' should be italicised (Errata)

272 #2: <onomatopoeia> clang

272 #3: battle frenzy -> battle-frenzy

as in the PAMoS

272 #4: remove <onomatopoeia> from clang

sect273

sect274

274 #1: smoothwalled -> smooth-walled (as in 5 and 325)

sect275

sect276

276 #1: add "You scramble to your feet to see that your horse is" to the start of the section

sect277

sect278

278 #1: arrow -> Arrow

278 #2: bow -> Bow

not Lone Wolf's bow

278 #3: linkify "map"

sect279

279 #1: 'and' should be italicised in 1st option

279 #2: <onomatopoeia>splash</onomatopoeia>

sect280

sect281

sect282

282 #1: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship

sect283

sect284

284 #1: Ellipsis missing space

284 #2: much-needed -> much needed

as in the PAMoS

I've made some changes to the MoS

sect285

285 #1: distented -> distended

sect286

sect287

287 #1: linkify "map"

287 #2: Should 'Ziran' here be <foreign> instead of <quote>?

in addition to <quote>

sect288

sect289

289 #1: Emphasize "and" in the phrase "and have reached".

289 #2: Weaponmastery, and -> Weaponmastery and

sect290

sect291

291 #1: 'and' should be italicised in 1st option

sect292

sect293

293 #1: corpses; human -> corpses, human

sect294

294 #1: alongside-the -> alongside the

294 #2: suggestion and, after -> suggestion, and after

294 #3: length and, upon -> length, and upon

sect295

sect296

sect297

297 #1: See 121.

297 #2: Remove " (or higher)".

297 #3: Emphasize "and" in the first choice.

sect298

sect299

299 #1: Action Charts -> Action Chart

303 #1: Ciquati -> Ciquali (as everywhere else in this book)

sect304

304 #1: <onomatopoeia> click

304 #2: sixth sense -> Sixth Sense

304 #3: backpack -> Backpack

sect305

305 #1: inate -> innate

305 #2: Window -> window

sect306

306 #1: Backpack item -> Backpack Item

sect307

sect308

308 #1: Ellipsis missing space

308 #2: --'Sense Evil'-- -> Sense Evil

sect309

309 #1: Should war-hog be capitalised? The Giak name is Nad-Jaguz

see 219

sect310

310 #1: larger, unit -> larger unit

310 #2: area and, aided -> area, and aided

sect311

sect312

312 #1: but, as -> but as

sect313

313 #1: unconscious, companion -> unconscious companion

313 #2: Action Chart needs to be turned into a link

313 #3: temperature Your -> temperature. Your

313 #4: face and, within -> face, and within

sect314

314 #1: Drakkarlrn -> Drakkarim

314 #2: batk -> back

314 #3: <onomatopoeia> crack

319 #1: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship

sect320

320 #1: sn ow -> snow

320 #2: Mastery, and -> Mastery and

320 #3: 'and' should be italicised in 1st option

320 #4: It says that 'and' has been italicized, but it is not. If this to be done generally, consider also sections 11, 18, 22, 66, 121, 158, 289, 297 and 347.

There's no real need for the emphasis. We should limit future changes to those that are emphasized in the original.

sect321

321 #1: arrow -> Arrow

321 #2: bow -> Bow

sect322

sect323

323 #1: momentoes -> mementoes (?)

323 #2: less-noble -> less noble (?)

I think this is OK, actually.

"less" is an adverb which makes the hyphen unnecessary

323 #3: etc -> etc.

323 #4: jadin amulet -> Jadin Amulet

(not capitalized in first paragraph, but it is in the next paragraph)

323 #5:

Is this meaning to hit with or to avoid being hit by normal missiles?

323 #6: Random Number Table needs to be turned into a link?

327 #1: inate -> innate

332 #1: <spell> Lightning Hand

332 #2: but, as -> but as

sect333

333 #1: Mastery, and -> Mastery and

unable to locate

333 #2: 'and' should be italicised in 1st option

338 #1: <spell> Lightning Hand and remove dashes

sect339

339 #1: <spell> Lightning Hand

339 #2: blue-fire -> blue fire

339 #3: arcs.through -> arcs through (remove period)

sect340

340 #1: <spell> Levitation and remove dashes

sect341

341 #1: weaken centre -> weakened centre

sect342

342 #1: axe -> are

342 #2: <onomatopoeia>bang</onomatopoeia>

sect343

sect344

344 #1: Items in the list are not separated

344 #2: potions -> Potions

344 #3: Action Chart needs to be turned into a link

sect345

345 #1: hll -> hit

sect346

sect347

347 #1: Mastery, and -> Mastery and

347 #2: 'and' should be italicised in 1st option

347 #3: " or higher" in "Sun Knight or higher" is superfluous as Sun Knight is the higest rank you can have in this book.

sect348

sect349

349 #1: CiqualI -> Ciquali

sect350

350 #1: remnants . . . is -> remnants . . . are (subject-verb don't agree)

350 #2: correct link to The Legacy of Vashna

350 #3: Nyras and, after -> Nyras, and after

Map #1: fix map title

action

crsumary

crsumary #1: If we really want to, stage 3 and 4 could be made to look like in e.g. 02TFC.

New Errata: In my copy of TDC, stage 4 says 'Combat Results Tables'. Tables Table. The alterations suggested would need to be implemented in ALL preceding Lone Wolf Books. It's probably a good idea, though.

Combat Rules Summary #2: Combat Results Tables -> Combat Results Table

FYI. This has already been fixed but is not mentioned on the Errata page.

crtable

random

Random Number Table #1: replace the blank spot in the table with a '0' as in the US edition. Need to add entry to errata list.

errata

Errata #1: Pathmanship -> Pathsmanship

there are a lot of occurrences (5) of the the following form (or similar): Replaced "pathmanship" with "Pathmanship". which have to be changed to Replaced "pathmanship" with "Pathsmanship".

Errata #2: with "barnlike" -> with "barn-like"

in (154)

Errata #3: (104) Removed the quotation marks around 'Sense Evil' and 'ahead and' with 'ahead, and'. -> (104) Removed the quotation marks around 'Sense Evil' and replaced 'ahead and' with 'ahead, and'.

Errata #4: Move '(Remember -> Moved '(Remember

Errata #5: Pathmanship -> Pathsmanship

in (333)

footnotz

Footnotes #1: it's consistent -> its consistent

'It' never uses the possessive apostrophe

Footnotes #2: The Drakkim land -> The Drakkarim land

Is Drakkim the correct word here, or should it be Drakkarim?

Footnotes #3: The numbering on the actual pages begins to be off with Section 5.

Footnotes #4: The Grand Master Disciplines footnote is missing from the footnotes page.

Footnotes #5: not 3) -> not 3).

in the footnote for section 59

illstrat

license

license #1: It's ancient.

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Small Illustrations

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Small 1 = Section 89 (as per book)

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Small 2 = Section 221 (as per book)

Not much room for argument there. :)

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Small 3 = Section 85, 118, 136, 201, 253 ("Axe")

118 is the description of the executioner's block. The others follow 118 in the storyline.

But 118 already has Illustration 7?

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Small 4 = Section 78, 274, 138 ("tunnel")

This tunnel is first described (including chain, and water running to the side of the walkway) in 78, but 119 and 162 describe this tunnel as it is in the illustration: with the gate winched open.

Ah, I see what I did. I searched for 'grille' instead of 'grill' (and found no results).

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Small 5 = Section 25* 124, 266, 295 ("Wine")

25 is the most appropriate due to the Lencian swan on the top of the bottle (it's the Lencian King serving the "rare vintage"). The other sections describe a cork in the bottle.

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Small 6 = Section 262 ("Lencian Knight"); 95, 81, 275, 125 ("Lencian")

I believe 262 is going to be covered by Illustration 14. 125 is the most appropriate of those suggested. 140 with its description of the newly successful Lencian crusade would also be appropriate.

Added to 140 only.

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Small 7 = Section 140 ("chart"), 53, 329, 266, 140, 124 ("table")

Since the illustration is a close shot that shows that the chart is only

a diagram of the encampment, 53, 124, and 266.

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Small 8 = Section 45 ("Temple")

100 (the next section) is better.

Yeah, actually. (Wish I'd thought to dig out the flowchart now!)

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Small 9 = Section 54 (?), 63 (?), 295, 305, 337 (?) ("Sword")

Anyone know offhand whose arms are the blue dragon shown on the map? The hilt of the sword is crafted to resemble a dragon--a clue perhaps. This may end up as just an accent that isn't tied to any particular scene.

I would tentatively guess Lencia since it is in an opposing position to Magnaarn's banner.

Added to 2.

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Small 10 = Section 10, 96, 213, 344 ("Hourglass")

Agreed, but maybe instances where time is critical: 1, 65?, 238, 263?

65 already has ill 4, don't think 263 fits, but agree with 1 and 238.

Also added to 156.

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Small 11 = Section 45, 71, 105, 149 ("swords") 206 (?)

Magnaarn's emblem and that of the Tukodakim: 45, 71, 105, 149.

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Small 12 = Section 125(?) ("Lencian Crusaders"), 21, 234, 272, 95 ("battle")

125. I'm not crazy about that section, but I can't seem to see any better.

It seems to be unrelated to the actual text. If there's nothing better, 125 sounds the closest.

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Small 13 = Section 83, 79, 45, 39, 36, 308, 221, 200, 179, 161 all (?) ("Doomstone")

36, 83, 161, and 200. 179 will have Illustration 5 otherwise it would have been a good choice.

Added to 36 and 161. 83 immediately precedes 161, and 200 has a large illustration.

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Small 14 = Section 2, 23, 73, 293, 296 ("Ruin")

23.

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Questions

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back-to-back vs. back to back:
32: Stand back-to-back.
250: Stand back-to-back.
LW10 329: Stand back to back,

back-to-back

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The Legacy of Vashna: Corrections

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Key

Erratum (Uncorrected)

Erratum (Corrected)

Erratum (Rejected)

Non-erratum (Uncorrected)

Non-erratum (Corrected)

Non-erratum (Rejected)

Footnote (Unimplemented)

Footnote (Implemented)

Footnote (Rejected)

Unknown (erratum vs. non-erratum)

Comment

Jonathan Blake

David Davis

Ingo Klöcker

Simon Osborne

Timothy Pederick

Keith Sheldon

Jennifer Sigman

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Corrections

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The Story So Far . . . #1: Right-Handed Magic -> Right-handed Magic

compare Left-handed Magic in PAMoS

redundant with the more complete issue #3

The Story So Far . . . #2: elite -> élite

as per PAMoS

Corrected, please verify errata/non-errata

It is definitely Errata; élite is always spelled 'elite' in TSSF throughout the series, to the best of my knowledge.

The Story So Far . . . #3: Right-Handed Magic -> Right-handed magic

as most other occurrences

The Story So Far . . . #4: forrner -> former

The Story So Far . . . #5: mystery quickly and so you -> mystery quickly, and so you

The Story So Far . . . #6: vigilant for he fears -> vigilant, for he fears

Disagree with these commas

The word "for" is a valid conjunction requiring a comma to separate clauses.

The Story So Far . . . #7: Dark God and rarely -> Dark God, and rarely

Disagree with these commas

The Story So Far . . . #8: hellish strongholds fierce fighting -> hellish strongholds, fierce fighting

The Story So Far . . . #9: practitioners of Right-Handed Magic -> practitioners of Right-handed magic

Left-handed and Old Kingdom above have a lower-case "magic, and "Handed" should be lower-case.

redundant with issue #3

The Story So Far . . . #10: their new-found responsibilities -> their newfound responsibilities

This has already been fixed in the Project Aon version.

I found "new-found skills" and "newfound responsibilities" in this section. Are both errata?

Yes, in the original text both occurrences are in the hyphenated form.

The Story So Far . . . #11: that no Kai lord -> that no Kai Lord

The Story So Far . . . #12: its forrner glory -> its former glory

redundant with #4

The Story So Far . . . #13: Paragraph 4, Line 3: "forrner" should be "former"

redundant with #4

The Story So Far . . . #14: Paragraph 13, Line 6: "extra vigilant". I would write this as a compound, "extra-vigilant"

"Extra" is a perfectly cromulent adverb - no need for a hyphen.

The Story So Far . . . #15: free-state -> Freeland

The Story So Far . . . #16: Kai lord -> Kai Lord

redundant with #11

The Story So Far . . . #17: Right-Handed -> Right-handed

redundant with #3

The Story So Far . . . #18: Vashna's body, and those of his loathsome troops, was -> Vashna's body, and those of his loathsome troops, were

However, I don't much like this correction. I think it would be better to alter it this way--Vashna's body, along with those of his loathsome troops, was . . . because that keeps the subject fixed on Vashna and not on his army.

I like your correction better.

The Story So Far . . . #19: north-east -> northeast

as elsewhere

gamerulz

The Game Rules #1: that you will find in the front of this book. For ease of use, and for further adventuring, it is recommended that you photocopy these pages

Remove this.

The Game Rules #2: on the last page of this book

Remove this.

The Game Rules #3: (ie, -> (i.e.

The Game Rules #4: The Discipline bonuses mentioned do not affect your permanent scores. If you have completed previous adventures, the Disciplines that you have mastered may still be beneficial. See the Grand Master Rules section of the Rules Handbook for details.

copied directly from TDC.

The Game Rules #5: Note that this list is not identical to the one used in The Plague Lords of Ruel: this list is missing the Silver Bracers and Korlinium Scabbard. These items are restored to the list of permissible items from the Kai and Magnakai series again in The Deathlord of Ixia. Presumably, therefore, it should be permissible to leave the Silver Bracers and Korlinium Scabbard in safekeeping at the monastery during the intervening books and retrieve them at the outset of The Deathlord of Ixia.

copied directly from TDC.

discplnz

. . . Disciplines #1: If you successfully complete the mission as set in this, the first of the Lone Wolf Grand Master series jb: check all books for this, you may add a further Grand Master Discipline of your choice to your Action Chart in Book 16. -> If you successfully complete the mission as set in this, the fourth of the Lone Wolf Grand Master series, you may add a further Grand Master Discipline of your choice to your Action Chart in Book 17.

Still need to check for occurrences of this error in previous books.

. . . Disciplines #2: Grand Defender, with which you -> Grand Defender, at which you

"With" makes the rank sound like a possession, "at" might not be the best answer, but sounds more appropriate.

It's common for ranks, Disciplines, etc. to be referred to like possessions. I think it's just a quirk of Joe Dever's style, not necessarily something to correct.

Although I tend to agree that "at" sounds better, I don't think it makes so much difference that I want to start correcting every instance of it in all of the books.

. . . Disciplines #3: hearing, smell and night vision. -> hearing, smell, and night vision

Comma for last item in a list before "and"?

Disagree with these commas

We've adopted using the serial comma in lists of three or more items. Famous example of how things can go very wrong without it: book dedication "To my parents, Ayn Rand and God".

. . . Disciplines #4:

Newsletter 24 contains the following information: "Please note that in some early editions of Grand Master gamebooks 13-17 a literal error appears in the rules for the Grand Master Discipline of Deliverance. The section should read "their ENDURANCE is reduced to 8 points or less" (not "COMBAT SKILL" is reduced).

. . . Disciplines #5: gods -> Gods

. . . Disciplines #6: Magi-Magic -> Magi-magic

. . . Disciplines #7: opposite and overleaf -> below

. . . Disciplines #8: COMBAT SKILL is reduced to 8 -> ENDURANCE is reduced to 8

redundant with #4

powers

equipmnt

Equipment #1: eg -> e.g.

Equipment #2: jb: update for this book and add to errata These are always carried in the Belt Pouch. It will hold a maximum of fifty Crowns. The currency of Nyras is the Kika. The exchange rate is 10 Kika for 1 Gold Crown. -> The currency of Magador is the Gold Crown. These are always carried in the Belt Pouch. It will hold a maximum of fifty Crowns.

Omitted from the original book.

Equipment #3: it adds 3 points to your -> it adds 5 points to your

This has already been corrected in the PA version.

Equipment #4: Wolf adventures. (Books 1-14), -> Wolf adventures (Books 1-15),

Two errors: eliminate period between adventures and ( and change 14 to 15.

Equipment #5: Magador you take -> Magador, you take

Disagree with these commas

Long initial adverbial phrase needs a comma.

Equipment #6: map of the area -> map of the Maakengorge and surrounding territories

And remove "(see the inside front cover of this book)"

Equipment #7: safe-keeping -> safekeeping

Equipment #8: (see the inside front cover of this book

remove this.

Equipment #9: map

encode as link to map.

Equipment #10: safe-keeping -> safekeeping

redundant with #8

Equipment #11: (eg -> (e.g.

redundant with #1

Equipment #12: arrow -> Arrow

Equipment #13: bow -> Bow

Equipment #14: adds 3 points -> adds 5 points

redundant with #3

Equipment #15: quiver -> Quiver

Equipment #16: map of the the Maakengorge -> map of the Maakengorge

cmbtrulz

Rules for Combat #1: reducing his ENDURANCE points -> reducing its ENDURANCE points

Encompasses female opponents as well as creatures of unknown gender.

Seems a bit PC for my tastes. ;) "His" is (or was, before the PC police attacked the language) an acceptable pronoun for nonspecific genders.

I'm not a fan of gender neutral revisionism either.

Rules for Combat #2: on the inside back cover of this book

Remove this

Rules for Combat #3: on the page after the Random Number Table -> in the back of this book

Rules for Combat #4: Lone Wolf (Combat Skill 32) -> Lone Wolf (Combat Skill 27)

Rules for Combat #5: adds 3 points to his -> adds 8 points to his

lorecrcl

levels

imprvdsc

Improved . . . Disciplines #1: Kai-Blast -> Kai-blast

2x; as Kai-surge

Improved . . . Disciplines #2: eg -> e.g.

redundant with #3

Improved . . . Disciplines #3: eg: -> e.g.

Improved . . . Disciplines #4: eg: water -> e.g. water

redundant with #3

Improved . . . Disciplines #5: kinds of surface, -> kinds of surfaces,

Disagreed. Only kind needs to be pluralised. One kind of surface, many kinds of surface.

I think a good analogy is "many different kinds of people" - you wouldn't say "many different kinds of person".

Improved . . . Disciplines #6: body-weight -> body weight

Improved . . . Disciplines #7: Kai-Blast -> Kai-blast

Everything else that is hyphenated is lower-case for the second word. Should this follow suit?

redundant with #1 - but yes, it should be lowercase

Improved . . . Disciplines #8: Grand Mastery you will -> Grand Mastery, you will

This is the original script, but the PA version may be correct. It seemed right with a comma to me.

There's definitely a comma in the original text ("...higher levels of Kai Grand Mastery, you will...") Whether it should be there or not is another matter.

Improved . . . Disciplines #9: Paragraph headed "Kai Surge" - A footnote may be required to further explain the rules for Kai-Blast. Firstly, how do you generate a random result between 2 and 18? Presumably the idea is to add two picks from the Random Number Table (which is not actually stated in the description) but this gives a range of 0-18. Should you: a) Treat any result of 0-1 as 2? b) Re-pick any 0s you get from the RNT? Option a) makes Kai-Blast less powerful, of course. It trebles the chance of doing 2 EP damage to your opponent at a cost of 4 EP to yourself. Secondly, no indication is given of whether it is permissible to use Kai-Blast over and over again instead of actually fighting your opponent - should any kind of limitation be stipulated?

I think this is accurate. It will probably be worth footnoting this in TLoV for clarity, even with the addendum of the missing sentence taken from Newsletter #24. (See "16tlov imprvdsc #9:" )

"Also, since kai blast/kai ray cannot be used in conjuction with any other mindforce attack, does it mean that during a battle where you are using Kai Surge +8 cs, and during one of the rounds you wish to use kai blast/ kai ray, you will need to reduce your cs by 8, conduct that round, include additional ep loss by yourself & enemy through kai blast, then resume your +8cs the following round?"

Added as erratum.

Improved . . . Disciplines #10: lava -> lava,

commas have been used before the word "and" in lists previously in book

This is errata.

Improved . . . Disciplines #11:

Were we ever going to add a footnote, explaining the means by which one resolves a Kai-blast? If I recall, there was an official ruling on this. It might be helpful to mention it here.

Newsletter 24: "In Lone Wolf 16, the Improved Discipline of Kai-surge (at rank of Sun Lord) is not fully explained (a sentence is missing from the paragraph). A Kai Sun Lord using Kai Blast (Errata, should say Kai-blast) determines the damage inflicted on an enemy by picking two numbers from the Random Number Table. These numbers should be added together (a '0' = 1) and the resultant total equals the damage inflicted."

redundant with #9

Improved . . . Disciplines #12: spectrum, jb: i.e. ie. they -> spectrum, i.e. they

redundant with #13

Improved . . . Disciplines #13: ie. -> i.e.

Improved . . . Disciplines #14: Kai Surge -> Kai-surge

Improved . . . Disciplines #15: Kai-Blast -> Kai-blast

x2. This is then consistent with Kai-surge.

redundant with #1

Improved . . . Disciplines #16: eg: -> e.g.

redundant with #3

Improved . . . Disciplines #17: arrow,or -> arrow, or

rejected in preference for #21

Improved . . . Disciplines #18: How often can a Kai-blast be used? How is a number between 2 and 18 generated?

I would venture 'once per combat'. I would advocate pick two numbers, ignoring all 0s.

There's nothing official that I can see leaving this open to reader's preference.

Actually, I think this can go away. Having played around with the LWAC java program, since the enemy gets to fight back each round, there appears to be no reason to limit the number of Kai-blasts a Kai Grand Master can make per combat. Perhaps instead footnote that you must conduct the round of combat as normal, but ignore all points lost by your opponent. I confess I never worked that out before now. >_<

Improved . . . Disciplines #19: 'Lightning Hand' -> Lightning Hand

and encode as Spell.

Improved . . . Disciplines #20: 'Improved Grand Master Disciplines' -> Improved Grand Master Disciplines

Improved . . . Disciplines #21: arrow,or -> Arrow or

Improved . . . Disciplines #22: arrow -> Arrow

many occurences

Improved . . . Disciplines #23: Guardian -> Kai Grand Guardian

kaiwisdm

. . . Wisdom #1: the completion Of this -> the completion of this

. . . Wisdom #2: Incorrect order

In my UK copy of TLoV, Grand Master's Wisdom appears before Improved Grand Master Disciplines and Levels of Kai Grand Mastership. Books 17 and 18 also have this change in order, but books 19 and 20 have the normal order.

Made note of this change in the errata list.

1 #1: skyship Skyrider. -> skyship, Skyrider.

1 #2: "aided by your innate Kai skills of invisibility" Invisibility? This is a question of house style more than anything else, but the book is consistent throughout. I will assume PA intends to follow suit, please advise me if wrong.

This seems to be referred to in the generic sense encompassing Camouflage and Invisibility.

1 #3: Skyrider

italicise

1 #4: Also in this section you are given a scroll without any instruction to record it on your Action Chart. The same happens with the Deathstaff later on. Should any footnotes be added in these cases?

1 #5: scroll -> Scroll

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2 #1: animal kinship -> Animal Kinship

capitalise discipline name

2 #2: of animal kinship. -> of Animal Kinship.

The Kai Disciplines were always capitalized in books 1-5.

redundant with #1

2 #3: the first-floor window -> the first floor window

"first-floor" is correct when used as an adjective, but if you're referring to the first floor of a building. . .

sect3

3 #1: Knight, or higher, turn to 31. -> Knight or higher, turn to 31.

3 #2: "the basalt island and the entire fiery plain beyond is engulfed" "are engulfed"? Both things are engulfed.

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sect5

sect6

6 #1: upper tier and -> upper tier, and

6 #2: This is the correct answer to the Crystal Dais code puzzlein Section 164.

sect7

7 #1: Huntmastery and Assimilance

italicise and

sect8

8 #1: boat which is -> boat, which is

8 #2: first-floor ruins of -> first floor ruins of

cf. Section 2 #3

sect9

9 #1: panther you leap -> panther, you leap

9 #2: appear but the -> appear, but the

9 #3: in hand you climb -> in hand, you climb

sect10

10 #1: This is the correct answer to Shamath's riddle in section 189.

sect11

11 #1: most-favoured -> most favoured

seems idiosyncratic, if permissible, and PAMoS appears to support me on it

11 #2: horse-meat -> horsemeat

as in 208

11 #3: rounds, by turning -> rounds by turning

11 #4: Sun Knight, or higher, -> Sun Knight or higher,

11 #5: skull and, as the -> skull, and as the

11 #6: weakened state and this -> weakened state, and this

11 #7: Vorndarol jackals -> Vorndarol Jackals

11 #8: rounds, by turning -> rounds by turning

redundant with #3

11 #9: Durncrag scavenger -> Durncrag Scavenger

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12 #1: morning sun and the -> morning sun, and the

sect13

sect14

14 #1: two rounds, by turning -> two rounds by turning

14 #2: Vakovarian brigand captain -> Vakovarian Brigand Captain

sect15

15 #1: strong will and you -> strong will, and you

sect16

16 #1: T'is -> 'Tis

apostrophe at the point of contraction

16 #2: 'not less you be -> 'not 'less you be

My guess here is that "less" is a contraction for "unless", therefore using the same apostrophe to fill in missing letters as her dialect in the rest of the sentence would indicate.

16 #3: At length you come -> At length, you come

Short adverbial phrase, comma unnecessary

sect17

17 #1: is grey-bearded man -> is a grey-bearded man

sect18

sect19

19 #1: a sudden massive bolt -> a sudden, massive bolt

19 #2: energy which buckles -> energy that buckles

"which" is fine here

19 #3: erect a psi-screen to protect -> erect a Psi-screen to protect

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20 #1: Vashna's Dagger -> Vashna's dagger

Unless the abbreviation of the Dagger of Vashna receives caps because it's a special item.

the point of the capitalisation is so players know whether or not they can pick up the Item in question and add it to their Action Chart

It's like the Sommerswerd - someday I hope to make some other distintion with items rather than capitalization, too much confusion

20 #2: "from the tip of Vashna's Dagger" -> "from the tip of Vashna's dagger?"

See #1

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21 #1: city guard never patrol -> city guards never patrol

"City guard" can refer to a unit of guardsmen, as well as its members.

21 #2: open doorway and the -> open doorway, and the

Both work fine without commas, to my reading.

comma necessary to separate independant clauses.

21 #3: This section assumes you have 1 GC, but you may have spent all your money already...

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23 #1: your sixth sense, -> your Sixth Sense,

This Discipline was always capitalized in the earlier books.

If it were any other Discipline, I'd agree, and if it were anyone but a Kai Lord, I'd disagree. As it is, it's hard to say. Unlike other Disciplines, it works fine without a capital, and drawing attention to it serves no purpose--Sixth Sense is assumed at this point, and so this is just flavour text. As such, I think it works better without capitals.

There are other examples where other assumed Disciplines are used and capitalized. The safe answer is to capitalize this one to fend off the impression of a mistake.

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25 #1: The brigands give chase but they soon lose you among the dense pines and they give up the pursuit. -> The brigands give chase but they soon lose you among the dense pines and give up the pursuit.

No need to repeat the subject pronoun, IMO.

The brigands give chase, but they soon lose you among the dense pines and give up the pursuit.

25 #2: Rather than fight them you decide it better to escape whilst you still can and so you take to your heels, pausing only to snatch up the captain's satchel as you leave. -> Rather than fight them, you decide it better to escape whilst you still can; you take to your heels, pausing only to snatch up the captain's satchel as you leave.

Reads like a run-on sentence, although it may be fine grammatically.

Reads well enough to me, though it could perhaps do with a comma after "fight them".

With one exception - a new sentence instead of a semicolon.

25 #3: brigand captain -> Brigand Captain

not sure about this one

According to our manual of style, "Captain" only when before person's name, not on its own.

29 #1: 'You will not escape this time,' shouts Cadak, as if he has been reading your mind. 'Not while I am alive.' -> 'You will not escape this time!' shouts Cadak, as if he has been reading your mind. 'Not while I am alive!'

Since he's shouting, shouldn't this be imperative?

The exclamation mark isn't mandatory, and it actually strikes me as redundant since we're told he's shouting anyway.

29 #2: second strike an umbrella -> second strike, an umbrella

Both work fine without commas, to my reading.

29 #3: Bow and arrow -> Bow and Arrow

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30 #1: Remove "or higher"

Sun Lord is highest rank possible for this book.

sect31

31 #1: prey on which -> prey with which

Both are acceptable, "on which to feed" is a rearrangement of the verb "to feed on".

31 #2: life force -> life-force

as in the PAMoS

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32 #1: plateau which is -> plateau that is

*or* plateau, which is

Disagreed. This is IMO one of those technical rules like not ending a sentence with a preposition.

http://www.wsu.edu/~brians/errors/which.html

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33 #1: huntmastery -> Huntmastery

capitalise discipline name

33 #2: swarthy-face villain -> swarthy-faced villain

33 #3: Magnakai skill of huntmastery -> Magnakai skill of Huntmastery

redundant with #1

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34 #1: Kraagenskul -> Kraagenskûl

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36 #1: Vortex -> Vortexi

as elsewhere in this section and others

36 #2:

Is this Endurance boost meant to be a permanent addition to your current score, or merely a buffer that prevents up to 5 damage from occurring in this battle alone? Why would possessing the Sommerswerd heal you in this situation? Soaking up the psychic rays or something?

Good point. The text does explicitly state that the Combat Skill bonus is only for the duration of the fight, and then the next sentance speaks of the Endurance bonus (with no "only for the duration of this fight" caveat) - moreover, there'd be little practical point having an +5 EP bonus which only lasted for the duration of a fight, because if you really did win the fight with less than 5 EP left, and then took away the bonus 5EP in the next section, you'd be dead! /laughs/ So - that can't possibly be the intention. The question is then, is the +5EP an addition to your basic EP score? Or is it just a normal +5EP, as if you'd just swigged a potion of laumspur? (which means that your EP total can't go above the original). The former is quite a special situation - it would surely be flagged as such in the text, and it seems implausible that simply wielding the Sommerswerd against this enemy would permanently increase your EP total by 5! So it must be the rather mundane latter scenario. It is definately confusing - it's the word "add" which does it - usually the word "restore" is used. How about this footnote: If you possess the Sommerswerd, restore 5 ENDURANCE points to your total before the combat begins. Remember that your number of ENDURANCE points cannot rise above the number you have when you start the adventure." (Not sure if the second sentance is the best way to phrase this

since you could find a special item which gave you an extra few ENDURANCE points beyond the basic score you rolled at the start of the adventure

but I've lifted it directly from 'The Game Rules' page 18 of the 16tLoV.)

I would imagine this is purely for the duration of the combat. If, during the combat, you lose less than 5 EPs, you must reduce your EP total to your original amount before the battle. If you lose 5 or more, leave your EP score unchanged.

The originally published edition of this book instructed you to add 5 points to your ENDURANCE score. We believe that our alteration to specify restoration instead of addition is closer to the intent of the author. The original led to several questions. Would this additional score be a permanent increase of your maximum ENDURANCE? Permanent alterations of basic scores in the middle of an adventure are rare making this option unlikely. Nor does the context support this conclusion. Then would this addition only be for the duration of the combat similar to the bonus to COMBAT SKILL? This makes the bonus useless. If you were to complete the combat with fewer than 5 ENDURANCE points remaining and then removed the bonus after the combat was over, you would be just as dead as without the bonus. Another proposal was that you should remove the bonus from your score only if it leaves your score above the normal maximum after the combat. Although reasonable, this probably wasn't the intent of the author since he didn't specify this procedure. We have opted for the simplest, most straightforward choice: that this is just a restorative effect.

36 #3:

If you possess the Sommerswerd, restore 5 ENDURANCE points to your total before the combat begins. Remember that your number of ENDURANCE points cannot rise above the number you have when you start the adventure.

see #2

36 #4: vortexi -> Vortexi

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39 #1: six rounds, by turning -> six rounds by turning

39 #2: Magnakai curing skills -> Magnakai Curing skills

39 #3: Vakovarian brigands -> Vakovarian Brigands

sect40

40 #1: 'Lightning Hand' -> Lightning Hand

and encode as Spell

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sect42

42 #1: Grand Huntmastery and have reached

italicise and

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44 #1: the light and in its dim -> the light, and in its dim

44 #2: Confidently you walk -> Confidently, you walk

44 #3: A dim blue vista -> A dim, blue vista

44 #7: streches -> stretches

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45 #1: region; -> region

stray semicolon

redundant with #4

45 #2: says, as he places -> says as he places

45 #3: near to a tributary -> near a tributary

Sounds better (IMO)

The original wording seems OK to me, but . . .

"Near TO a tributary" scans better when read out loud

45 #4: this region; has been -> this region has been

This semi-colon appears to be a comma with an ink-smudge above it, a bit too far to the right to have been intended as a dot. Anyone else agree? Either way, it doesn't belong.

An odd one. I'd suggest that it isn't actually supposed to be a semi-colon at all, in which case this is "ne", but it should certainly be changed.

noted the smudge in the errata list

45 #5: storms which have swept -> storms that have swept

45 #6: parchment which he spreads -> parchment, which he spreads

45 #7: says, as he places -> says as he places

redundant with #2

45 #8: map

encode as link to map?

I don't think this really refers to the map given in the book.

sect46

46 #1: vortexi -> Vortexi

as elsewhere

sect47

sect48

48 #1: Black corvayl -> Black Corvayl

48 #2: bow -> Bow

48 #3: arrow -> Arrow

sect49

49 #1: engraving which depicts -> engraving, which depicts

sect50

50 #1: dodge them they swirl -> dodge them, they swirl

sect51

51 #1: Magnakai discipline of Nexus -> Magnakai Discipline of Nexus

sect52

52 #1: six rounds, by turning -> six rounds by turning

52 #2: psychic ability that -> psychic abilities that

Sounds better, at least IMO. Anyone else?

A case could certainly be made for this change.

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54 #1: invisibility yet it -> invisibility, yet it

54 #2: Should Arch Druid Cadak be immune to Mindblast and Psi-surge? The wording of the section would seem to suggest that he is.

This was first mentioned by Andrew Godfrey in April 2003. He wrote: "Also, as a rules point on the fight with Cadak - should he not be immune to Mind Blast and Psi-Surge? This is not a transcription error - just a consideration of a few other points. Firstly, in Bk13, the Cener High Priest that you fight is immune to both, and Cadak is surely just a more powerful version of him. Secondly, if you attack him with Kai Surge in passage 267, it says his 'inner mind is well-shielded.'

I can see the case for this, but does this rise above the threshold where we can say this with any weight of authority? Maybe a footnote here and in the other sections where you fight him?

sect55

55 #1: acolytes -> Acolytes

capitalise as name of the order, Acolytes of Vashna

sect56

56 #1: second storey -> second story

This isn't actually an error, but the UK-english spelling. It shouldn't be changed. Though the reverse confused me many times when I read US-published books until I discovered the variant spelling was also accurate! ;-)

56 #2: eagle eyes -> eagle-eyes

sect57

57 #1: Brotherhood spell Net -> Brotherhood Spell Net

Should we be capitalizing Spell after Brotherhood like we do Discipline after Grand Master?

yes

57 #2: 'Net' -> Net

and encode as Spell

sect58

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59 #1: safety and mindful -> safety, and mindful

part of the same long clause

59 #2: bandits and you have to -> bandits, and you have to

sect60

60 #1: ascend but you -> ascend, but you

60 #2: hard pressed -> hard-pressed

as in the PAMoS

sect61

61 #1: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship

this one's debatable--used as discipline name or not?

61 #2: outcrop which overlooks -> outcrop, which overlooks

61 #3: pathsmanship skills -> Pathsmanship skills

redundant with #1

61 #4: peak but you -> peak, buy you

^_^ I think you mean: peak but you -> peak, but you

sect62

62 #1: reach to your belt -> reach for your belt

Sounds awkward, to me anyway.

I agree it's unusual, but not incorrect.

62 #2: gods -> Gods

maybe?

sect63

63 #1: shadow gate -> Shadow Gate

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64 #1: huntmastery -> Huntmastery

disciple

64 #2: streets and a square -> streets, and a square

64 #3: desolate but it -> desolate, but it

64 #4: skill of huntmastery -> skill of Huntmastery

redundant with #1

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66 #1: storms and has -> storms, and has

same clause - no comma

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67 #1: base of a gulley -> base of a gully

71 #1: Brotherhood spell -> Brotherhood Spell

Capitalize like "Discipline"?

71 #2: 'Counterspell' -> Counterspell

and encode as Spell

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72 #1: a shadow gate. Her -> a Shadow Gate. Her

Again, this is usually capitalized, although apparently not in this book.

I think Shadow Gate is always capitalised, yeah.

72 #2: closing of the shadow gate and you -> closing of the Shadow Gate, and you

Most instances of this that I've seen are capitalized, also feels like it needs a comma. Peregrine may disagree with the second suggestion. ;)

I think Shadow Gate is always capitalised, yeah.

72 #3: successful summonation -> successful summoning

Or perhaps successful resurrection?

I think summoning is a better alternative (summonation??).

72 #4: downpour you can -> downpour, you can

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73 #1: flood you lose -> flood, you lose

73 #2: edge of the gulley. -> edge of the gully.

73 #3: along the gulley, -> along the gully,

sect74

74 #1: strong and you fear -> strong, and you fear

sect75

75 #1: We wern't after -> We weren't after

This might be part of the 'dialect' of the brigand, but I can't imagine eliminating a silent vowel to do so. I think it's an error.

I agree!

I agree it doesn't make sense when read aloud, but on the printed page it does serve the purpose of emphasizing his vulgarity (to use an archaic meaning of the word).

75 #2: arm lock and demand -> armlock and demand

75 #3: wern't -> weren't

redundant with #1

sect76

76 #1: Kai camouflage skills -> Kai Camouflage skills

This is an iffy one. I would definitely say to capitalize it if 'skills' were singular, but since it's plural, I'm just not sure. Have at it! :)

sect77

77 #1: furrier's -> furriers'

as in 161, 174

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79 #1: dais or the Deathstaff -> dais, or the Deathstaff

sect80

80 #1: huntmastery -> Huntmastery

disciple

80 #2: desolate but it is -> desolate, but it is

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82 #1: deck and the -> deck, then the

Repetetive use of "and"

see #3

82 #2: Weapons -> Weapons

not sure about this

I assume you meant "Weapons -> Weapon". I assume that you lose both weapons when you drop your belt, you're not just handing over one weapon.

82 #3: deck and the -> deck, and the

two separate clauses

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83 #1: Kai Grand Guardian, turn to 36. -> Kai Grand Guardian or higher, turn to 36.

83 #2: Kai Grand Guardian, turn to 103. -> Kai Grand Guardian or higher, turn to 103.

83 #3: vortexi -> Vortexi

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84 #1: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship

not so debatable, capitalise discipline name

84 #2: Kai pathsmanship skill -> Magnakai Pathsmanship skill

Or at least "Kai Pathsmanship skill" if nothing else is changed.

84 #3: The Black Talisman is called Black Amulet everywhere else in this book! (I.e. sections 178, 294 and 323.)

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86 #1: Brotherhood spell Sense Evil -> Brotherhood Spell Sense Evil

86 #2: 'Sense Evil' -> Sense Evil

and encode as Spell

sect87

87 #1: Durncrag scavengers -> Durncrag Scavengers

sect88

88 #1: clack! needs encoding as onomatopoeia.

88 #2: arrow -> Arrow

88 #3: arrow -> Arrow

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90 #1: ice which stretches -> ice, which stretches

90 #2: drop and the great -> drop, and the great

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91 #1: dawn the storm -> dawn, the storm

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92 #1: shadow gate -> Shadow Gate

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94 #1: Crack! needs encoding as onomatopoeia.

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96 #1: heat and shock of the explosion rips -> heat and shock ofthe explosion rip

I believe it's the 'heat and shock' that are doing the ripping, instead of the 'explosion'.

96 #2: flame and suddenly -> flame; suddenly

Feels like a run-on.

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97 #1: Kai Blast -> Kai -Blast or Kai-blast

I know Joe lists it as Kai-Blast elsewhere, but considering the rules for Kai-surge and Psi-surge I imagine it should be lower case for the 'blast' part.

97 #2: Kai Blast -> Kai-blast

redundant with #1

97 #3: Kai Blast -> Kai-blast

redundant with #1

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98 #1: one his brutish -> one, his brutish

sect99

99 #1: rounds, by turning -> rounds by turning

99 #2: Knight, or higher, -> Knight or higher

99 #3: jackals -> Jackals

99 #4: Vorndarol jackals -> Vorndarol Jackals

I missed the "x4" in #3 - now fixed

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100 #1: t'is -> 'tis

apostrophe at the point of contraction

100 #2: 'At first I, too, made -> 'At first, I too made

100 #3: 'Aye, t'is so,' -> Aye, 'tis so,'

redundant with #1

100 #4: t'is -> 'tis

redundant with #1

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102 #1: investigate and your Kai -> investigate. Your Kai

Sounds like a run-on, IMO.

102 #2: Silently you draw -> Silently, you draw

Clause is short enough to not need comma.

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103 #1: vortexi -> Vortexi

103 #2: Endurance bonus

See 36 #2.

103 #3: If you possess the Sommerswerd, restor 5 points to your ENDURANCE score

should be restore

103 #4: If you possess the Sommerswerd, add 5 to your ENDURANCE points score. -> If you possess the Sommerswerd, restore 5 points to your ENDURANCE score.

103 #5: restor -> restore

103 #6: restor -> restore

according to the EC this has already been fixed

done

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104 #1: gulley -> gully

as elsewhere

sect105

105 #1: destoyed -> destroyed

105 #2: experience at Vakovar -> experience in Vakovar

105 #3: beggar-city -> beggar city

Hyphenation in compound noun-noun OK.

105 #4: Citystate -> City-state

not sure about this one

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106 #1: life force -> life-force

as in the PAMoS

sect107

107 #1: the, churning water. -> the churning water.

107 #2: 'Invisible Fist' -> Invisible Fist

and encode as Spell

107 #3: amidst the, churning -> amidst the churning

sect108

108 #1: hesitation he picks -> hesitation, he picks

sect109

109 #1: bow -> Bow

109 #2: arrow -> Arrow

sect110

110 #1: shadow gate beneath -> Shadow Gate beneath

110 #2: This is the correct answer to the Crystal Dais code puzzle in Section 235.

110 #3: shadow gate -> Shadow Gate

sect111

111 #1: Sun Lord, or higher, -> Sun Lord or higher,

May even be able to remove "or higher" altogether, since that is the highest rank available at this point.

removed or higher

sect112

112 #1: Unless you possess Grand Huntmastery, you must eat 2 meals or lose 6 ENDURANCE points. -> Unless you possess Grand Huntmastery, you must eat 2 Meals or lose 6 ENDURANCE points.

Should there be a note about the option to eat one meal and lose only 3 EP?

112 #2: shore and you are -> shore, and you are

112 #3: jackals -> Jackals

I may reconsider this someday: "Jackals" in a sentence seems too much.

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113 #1: chase but they -> chase, but they

113 #2: still can and so you -> still can; you take

Or add a comma after "fight them", near the beginning of the sentence. I think this came up before. . .

Comma after "them" and "can", removed comma after "heels".

113 #3: yourself off-balance. -> yourself off balance

113 #4: brigand captain -> Brigand Captain

not sure about this

117 #1: hours' uninterrupted sleep -> hours uninterrupted sleep

Or "hours of uninterrupted sleep"

It may be colloquial, but a counterexample is "a full day's work".

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118 #1: Endurance bonus

cf. 36 #2

118 #2: For possessing the Sommerswerd, add 5 to your ENDURANCE points score.

I'd make the language match the one above it, just for constistancy's sake (it's the same battle).

118 #3: sun-sword -> Sun-sword

I noticed this, but ignored it, on my first pass through. I had the vague notion that this had come up before and a decision had been made not to capitalize. But since you did in section 166 and 176, here's the heads-up.

118 #4: For possessing the Sommerswerd, add 5 to your ENDURANCE points score. -> For possessing the Sommerswerd, restore 5 points to your ENDURANCE score.

118 #5: sun-sword -> Sun-sword

redundant with #3

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120 #1: bow -> Bow

120 #2: arrow -> Arrow

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122 #1: healing -> Healing

not sure about this

sect123

123 #1: Brotherhood spell Lightning -> Brotherhood Spell Lightning

Like "Kai Discipline"

123 #2: 'Lightning Hand' -> Lightning Hand

and encode as Spell

123 #3: see 267 re Cadak's immunity to mental attacks.

sect124

124 #1: adgana -> Adgana

as in 07cd and 12tmod

124 #2: long discordant tone. -> long, discordant tone.

sect125

125 #1: reflexes are sleep-dulled -> reflexes are sleep dulled

125 #2: erect a psi-screen -> erect a Psi-screen

125 #3: far sinister origin. -> far more sinister origin.

Or "more sinister origin."

125 #4: psi-screen -> Psi-screen

not sure about this one; the context makes it an unusual usage.

redundant with #2

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sect127

127 #1: If you possess Kai-alchemy, turn to 57. If you do not possess this Grand Master Discipline, turn to 282.

Is this even necessary? Obviously the player does, or they couldn't have reached this section to begin with! I think it should say "Turn to 57." at the bottom of the page.

127 #2: Brotherhood spell Levitation you -> Brotherhood Spell Levitation, you

127 #3: 'Levitation' -> Levitation

and encode as Spell

sect128

128 #1: keen sixth sense -> keen Sixth Sense

128 #2: animal control to calm -> Animal Control to calm

128 #3: mountain wolf -> Mountain Wolf

Since you never fight the wolf...

128 #4: animal control -> Animal Control

redundant with #2

sect129

129 #1: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm

encode as Spell

sect130

130 #1: Vasha -> Vashna

sect131

131 #1: weapon -> Weapon

not sure about this

sect132

132 #1: including Kai Blast -> including Kai-blast

or Kai-Blast, whichever we've decided on.

132 #2: Kai Blast -> Kai-blast

redundant with #1

sect133

sect134

134 #1: an acolyte Elder comes -> an Elder comes

Does this sound wrong somehow?

sect135

135 #1: see 54 re Cadak's immunities

sect136

136 #1: Magnakai skills of invisibility -> Magnakai skills of Invisibility

136 #2: arrow -> Arrow

136 #3: brigand leader -> Brigand Leader

not sure about this

never capitalized in this book, and doesn't rise to high enough status to stand on its own

136 #4: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm

and encode as Spell

sect137

137 #1: Kai camouflage skills -> Kai Camouflage skills

137 #2: unconscious and quickly -> unconscious, and quickly

137 #3: camouflage -> Camouflage

redundant with #1

sect138

138 #1: vortexi -> Vortexi

as elsewhere

sect139

139 #1: fire-escape ladder -> fire escape ladder

sect140

140 #1: battle frenzy -> battle-frenzy

as in the PAMoS

sect141

141 #1: shadow gate -> Shadow Gate

sect142

142 #1: Endurance bonus

sect143

143 #1: 'we celebrate this -> 'We celebrate this

This may be okay, but I imagine it is the beginning of a sentence on the speakers' parts and that it should be capitalized.

143 #2: Spluttering candles -> Sputtering candles

This may be okay, but the definitions of the latter seem more like what he meant IMO.

Not enough of a difference to change this word choice - "splutter" may be an alteration of "sputter" anyway.

143 #3: words, 'we -> words, 'We

cf. sect150

redundant with #2

143 #4: You only add 2 if you possess any of the Disciplines. You do not add 4 if you possess two of the Disciplines mentioned.

sect144

144 #1: vortexi -> Vortexi

144 #2: Vortexi horde swoop -> Vortexi horde swoops

Although horde refers to multiple Vortexi, the word is singular, so I think swoops is in order.

sect145

145 #1: brigand captain's -> Brigand Captain's

not sure about this one

sect146

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sect148

148 #1: coited -> coiled

or something else?

148 #2: a coited heap -> a coiled heap

This is correct in the text.

redundant with #1

sect149

149 #1: command and suddenly -> command, and suddenly

sect150

150 #1: Spluttering candles dimly -> Sputtering candles dimly

Same as entry 143.

150 #2: see ft 143

sect151

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sect153

153 #1: If you do not possess these skills, or if you have yet to attain the rank of Sun Lord, turn to 232. -> If you do not possess these skills, or if you possess Telegnosis but you have yet to attain the rank of Sun Lord, turn to 232.

Seems obvious to me the way it was originally worded what one must do, but I wonder if somebody else might get confused.

I almost feel bad simplifying it down so much - feels like throwing away the author's work. *grin*

sect154

154 #1: the rusty guttering -> the rusty gutter

"guttering"is a verb, this is clearly used as a noun, hence "gutter" is the proper form of the word.

sect155

sect156

sect157

157 #1: shadow gate -> Shadow Gate

sect158

158 #1: five rounds, by turning to 276. -> five rounds by turning to 276.

sect159

159 #1: mind and it makes it impossible -> mind which makes it impossible

Sounds repetetive

159 #2: vortexi -> Vortexi

sect160

sect161

161 #1: If you wish to enter the furrier's shop, turn to 226. ->If you wish to enter the furriers' shop, turn to 226.

Might be off-base on this one, but since there are multiple furriers, shouldn't this be pluralized?

sect162

162 #1: vortexi -> Vortexi

162 #2: If you possess Kai-surge, add 4 to this number. If you possess Kai-screen, add 2. If you possess Assimilance, add 1. Also, if your current ENDURANCE points total is 18 or more, add 1; if your current ENDURANCE points total is 17 or less, deduct 1.

Should be one paragraph, not two.

The original seems to be separating discipline bonuses from ENDURANCE bonuses. Reasonable enough.

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sect164

164 #1: legacy of vashna, page 164 and 253, missing dias puzzle illustrations...

164 #2: There is no grid of numbers

redundant with #1

164 #3: Illustration needed after third paragraph.

redundant with #1

164 #4: close the shadow gate. -> close the Shadow Gate.

164 #5: of the shadow gate. -> of the Shadow Gate.

164 #6:

It's missing the standard footnote about how you get one chance to go to the numbered section that represents the answer to the riddle

sect165

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166 #1: vortex of whirling cloud is -> vortex of whirling cloudsis

Sounds better to me, anyone else?

166 #2: here, Kai lord. -> here, Kai Lord.

166 #3: in our midst,' screams Cadak, -> in our midst!' screams Cadak,

I feel his screaming requires an exclamation mark.

166 #4: sun-sword -> Sun-sword

not sure about this one

166 #5: maniacally, 'You -> maniacally. 'You

not sure about this one

166 #6: Kai lord -> Kai Lord

redundant with #2

166 #7: Sun-sword -> sun-sword

as in the PAMoS; alternatively change the PAMoS and all occurrences (at least 28) in all previous books

sect167

167 #1: Magnakai skills of invisibility -> Magnakai skills of Invisibility

167 #2: invisibility -> Invisibility

redundant with #1

167 #3: arrow -> Arrow

167 #4: brigand leader -> Brigand Leader

not sure about this

167 #5: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm

and encode as Spell

sect168

sect169

169 #1: plus

italicise

sect170

170 #1: sparks which blister -> sparks that blister

sect171

sect172

sect173

173 #1: later I fancy -> later, I fancy

not sure about this one

sect174

174 #1: the furrier's shop, -> the furriers' shop

As stated elsewhere.

sect175

175 #1: acolytes of Vashna -> Acolytes of Vashna

unsure about this one

sect176

176 #1: sun-sword -> Sun-sword

unsure about this one

176 #2: Sun-sword -> sun-sword

as in the PAMoS; alternatively change the PAMoS and all occurrences (at least 28) in all previous books

180 #1: paces for you -> paces, for you

180 #2: bow -> Bow

180 #3: scavengers -> Scavengers

180 #4: Durncrag scavengers -> Durncrag Scavengers

sect181

sect182

sect183

183 #1: arrow -> Arrow

183 #2: bow -> Bow

not sure about this one

sect184

184 #1: whom you almost collided with -> with whom you almost collided

sect185

185 #1: drunkard, when you -> drunkard when you

Yes, I'm actually suggesting eliminating a comma for a second time! ;)

185 #2: screwjaws -> screwjaw

since there is only one of Lone Wolf . . . ?

Doubled vision can be a side effect of a life drowning in the Bor Brew.

sect186

186 #1: your tunic, and hurl it away. -> your tunic and hurl it away.

Yes, I'm actually suggesting eliminating a comma for a change! ;)

sect187

sect188

188 #1:

The list has both a dot and a close parenthesis

188 #2: ) 6 Arrows -> 6 Arrows

x10, not sure where those parentheses in the item list came from.

redundant with #1

sect189

189 #1: Are we going to alter the riddle to offer the correct solution?

We'll wait on an answer from Joe Dever. Until then, what has been done should suffice.

195 #1: thousand jets of flame, which roar from jets set into the smooth, glassy floor. -> thousand flames, which roar from jets set into the smooth, glassy floor.

Sounds redundant IMO.

I agree, but "jets of flame" is much more evococative than a simple flame. I'd hate to lose that. Can't think of a better way to word it without losing that phrase.

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sect197

197 #1: man on to the balcony, turn to 9. -> man onto the balcony, turn to 9.

sect198

198 #1: its gaping jaw. -> its gaping jaws.

Sounds better IMO.

198 #2: bow -> Bow

198 #3: arrow -> Arrow

sect199

part2

sect200

200 #1: face it you see, two -> face it, you see two

Or perhaps eliminate this comma altogether.

200 #2: acolyte Elders -> Acolyte Elders

200 #3: acolytes of Vashna -> Acolytes of Vashna

200 #4: counter-attack -> counterattack

as in the PAMoS

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sect203

203 #1: Vakovarian bandits -> Vakovarian Bandits

sect204

204 #1: acolytes of Vashna -> Acolytes of Vashna

sect205

205 #1: Sun Lord, or higher, turn to 229. -> Sun Lord, turn to 229.

Sun Lord is currently the maximum attainable rank.

sect206

sect207

207 #1: Huntmastery you must -> Huntmastery, you must

sect208

208 #1: after four rounds, by turning to 222. -> after four rounds by turning to 222.

208 #2: Sun Knight, or higher, you -> Sun Knight or higher, you

208 #3: their most-favoured food: -> their favorite food:

Or 'their most favoured food:'

most favoured

208 #4: Durncrag scavenger -> Durncrag Scavenger

208 #5: jackals -> Jackals

sect209

209 #1: so you suddenly -> so, you suddenly

209 #2: skill of animal kinship. -> skill of Animal Kinship.

209 #3: animal kinship -> Animal Kinship

redundant with #2

209 #4: gulley -> gully

as elsewhere

sect210

sect211

211 #1: camouflage -> Camouflage

sect212

212 #1: Brotherhood spell -> Brotherhood Spell

If we are changing to this format.

212 #2: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm

and encode as Spell

sect213

213 #1: her, Kai lord? -> her, Kai Lord?

213 #2: Kai lord -> Kai Lord

redundant with #1

217 #1: healing -> Healing

not sure about this one

222 #1: horse to the gallop -> horse to a gallop

222 #2: jackals -> Jackals

sect223

223 #1: gulley -> gully

as elsewhere, occurs twice

sect224

sect225

225 #1: of the shadow gate. -> of the Shadow Gate.

sect226

226 #1: Coney-skin mitts -> Coney-skin Mitts

226 #2: Wolfskin cloaks -> Wolfskin Cloaks

226 #3: Wildcat pelts -> Wildcat Pelts

226 #4: Bearskin cloaks -> Bearskin Cloaks

226 #5: White wolf pelts -> White Wolf Pelts

226 #6: Kalkoth hides -> Kalkoth Hides

226 #7: Black corvayl cloaks -> Black Corvayl Cloaks

226 #8: furrier's -> furriers'

as in 161, 174

sect227

227 #1: furs clutching a loaded -> furs and clutching a loaded

sect228

228 #1: here, Kai lord. -> here, Kai Lord.

228 #2: Kai lord -> Kai Lord

redundant with #

sect229

229 #1: Kai blast -> Kai-blast

x2 unsure about this one

229 #2: Endurance bonus

229 #3: Is this a Kai-blast without EP penalty?

Footnote that LW should really lose 4EP.

sect230

230 #1: in a horseshoe circle -> in a horseshoe shape

If it's shaped like a horseshoe, it isn't a circle, is it?

sect231

sect232

232 #1: Crypt spawn: COMBAT -> Crypt Spawn: COMBAT

232 #2: cloud of crypt spawn -> cloud of Crypt Spawn

232 #3: crypt spawn -> Crypt-spawn

I think this is how it is presented in the preceding books

redundant with #2

sect233

233 #1: glittering ice which -> glittering ice, which

Due to length of sentence.

I can understand the urge to break up the sentence, but I just don't like separating the adjective phrase from what it modifies.

233 #2: freezes and -> freezes, and

sect234

234 #1: amulet -> Amulet

234 #2: acolytes of Vashna -> Acolytes of Vashna

sect235

235 #1:

Illustration still needs to be added.

235 #2: shadow gate in time. -> Shadow Gate in time.

235 #3:

It's missing the standard footnote about how you get one chance to go to the numbered section that represents the answer to the riddle

sect236

236 #1: weapon -> Weapon

sect237

sect238

238 #1: questioning

first instance should be italicised

sect239

239 #1: here, Kai lord. -> here, Kai Lord.

239 #2: Kai lord -> Kai Lord

redundant with #1

sect240

sect241

241 #1: Your Kai hunting skills -> Your Kai Hunting skills

Maybe, maybe not on this one.

241 #2: hunting -> Hunting

redundant with #1

241 #3: arrow -> Arrow

241 #4: brigand leader -> Brigand Leader

not sure about this

241 #5: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm

and encode as Spell

241 #6: longer , -> longer,

247 #1: 80 GC? That is way more that you can carry; is this correct?

It is correct. Just because you can't take them doesn't mean they wouldn't have them. They are Brigands after all ;) .

sect248

248 #1: Elder-magi -> Elder Magi

as everywhere else

should have been 288

sect249

249 #1: power of animal control -> power of Animal Control

249 #2: animal control -> Animal Control

redundant with #1

sect250

250 #1: rock, shaped like -> rock shaped like

250 #2: vortexi -> Vortexi

250 #3: Then, as -> Then as

sect251

251 #1: arrow -> Arrow

sect252

sect253

253 #1: legacy of vashna, page 164 and 253, missing dias puzzle illustrations...

Actually should be in 235.

sect254

254 #1: domain, a temperature -> domain: a temperature

254 #2: beast approaching. -> beast approaching from.

Sounds better IMO.

254 #3: arrow -> Arrow

254 #4: bow -> Bow

sect255

255 #1: The runic disc -> The Runic Disc

Special item: should be capitalized.

255 #2: runic disc -> Runic Disc

redundant with #1

sect256

256 #1: north-easterly direction. -> northeasterly direction.

sect257

257 #1: Black corvayl: -> Black Corvayl

Capitalize both words for an opponent?

257 #2: corvayl -> Corvayl

redundant with #1

sect258

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sect260

260 #1: fleeing Vythaz herd -> fleeing vythaz herd

I tend to agree, but that's not how the books have been written this far. Someday, it may be good to go back and change this (I mean "Jackal"?!) but that is not today. *wink*

260 #2: herd of Vythaz -> herd of vythaz

Not a race but an animal.

sect261

261 #1: enter the shadow gate -> enter the Shadow Gate

sect262

sect263

263 #1: vortexi -> Vortexi

sect264

264 #1: reflexes are pain-dulled -> reflexes are pain dulled

Modifies reflexes, so no hyphen when it appears after the noun, correct?

Hmm... noun-adjective modifier I believe is OK to hyphenate.

264 #2: erect a psi-screen -> erect a Psi-screen

sect265

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sect267

267 #1: See 54 re Cadak's immunities

sect268

268 #1: six rounds, by -> six rounds by

268 #2: Vakovarian brigands: -> Vakovarian Brigands:

sect269

269 #1: Brotherhood spell of -> Brotherhood Spell of

We always capitalize Discipline when directly associated with the use of one, why not Spell when listed with one?

269 #2: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm

and encode as Spell

sect270

sect271

sect272

272 #1: arrow -> Arrow

272 #2: The hardened steel tip of your Arrow penetrates the roof of the creature's mouth and skewers its brain.

Don't need the capital A

sect273

273 #1: the legacy of vashna, page 273, text seems to have some code visible: There is a terrific jb: crack! Crack! as the tip penetrates the energy wall and, with a breathtaking suddenness, the wall disappears.

273 #2: Crack!

encode as onomatopoeia

sect274

274 #1: fire-escape ladder -> fire escape ladder

sect275

275 #1: acolyte Elders -> Acolyte Elders

275 #2: tracking -> Tracking

natural tracking instincts

sect276

276 #1: Sun Knight, or higher -> Sun Knight or higher

sect277

277 #1: humble-but-honest -> humble but honest

277 #2: acolytes of Vashna -> Acolytes of Vashna

281 #1: has just seen a ghost. -> had just seen a ghost.

Sounds better imo

Matches present tense of sentence.

281 #2: the first-floor window -> the first floor window

I can't remember what we decided on this one, but dictionary.com doesn't list it with a hyphen.

sect282

sect283

283 #1: Sun Lord, or higher, -> Sun Lord,

This is currently the highest rank available.

sect284

284 #1: vortexi -> Vortexi

sect285

285 #1: fast-flowing -> fast flowing

Modifies River Storn, but comes after the noun. Should be no hyphen, yes?

sect286

286 #1: chasm of doom -> Chasm of Doom

Not sure, but would this be capitalized if it were another accepted name for the proper noun "Maakengorge"?

286 #2: a shadow gate which -> a Shadow Gate which

sect287

287 #1: 'F' sure -> 'F'sure

unsure about this one

Not incorrect enough for me to correct. *smile*

287 #2: gold crowns -> Gold Crowns

sect288

288 #1: Elder-magi -> Elder Magi

as everywhere else

288 #2: Gloar. ->

Should be italicized, it is in the book. Companion wouldn't let me use brackets to put the i's in.

288 #3: the power-word of -> the Power-Word of

Capitalizing spells? Also may need italics

I'm not convinced that this is a spell.

288 #4: Gloar

encode as Spell

Is it a spell?

288 #5: "Gloar" - should this be italicised?

sect289

sect290

290 #1: belt pouch -> Belt Pouch

unsure about this one

sect291

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sect293

293 #1: backpack -> Backpack

293 #2: The reader might think that the Meals restore EP too (which I assume that they don't). Footnote?

Maybe they do?

sect294

294 #1: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm

and encode as Spell

sect295

sect296

296 #1: ever-nearer to the storm. -> ever nearer to the storm.

sect297

297 #1: your tracking skills -> your Tracking skills

Again: maybe or maybe not.

297 #2: Guardian, or higher, -> Guardian or higher,

297 #3: tracking -> Tracking

redundant with #1

sect298

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sect300

300 #1: camouflage skills, -> Camouflage skills,

Maybe, maybe not. Thought I'd mention it anyway.

300 #2: camouflage -> Camouflage

redundant with #1

sect301

301 #1: bow -> Bow

301 #2: arrow -> Arrow

301 #3: quiver -> Quiver

sect302

302 #1: Kai pathsmanship Discipline -> Kai Pathsmanship Discipline

-or- Magnakai Pathsmanship Discipline

My own pref is the second one since Pathsmanship is a Magnakai Discipline.

302 #2: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship

redundant with #1

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304 #1: Thok -> thok

as 2x in 13tplor; actually, this should be <quote>thok</quote> as in 13tplor 225

We should correct 13tplor

304 #2: Thok -> thok

encode as onomatopoeia

redundant with #1

304 #3: a loud Thok!

In the text, the word Thok! (is that a word?;)) is italicized.

It's onomatopoeia and should be encoded as such. There are no real rules governing onomatopoeic words since they're all made up! ;-)

redundant with #1

304 #5: arrow -> Arrow

304 #6: brigand leader -> Brigand Leader

304 #7: Thok!

encode as onomatopoeia

redundant with #1

304 #8: Vakovarian brigands -> Vakovarian Brigands

304 #9: "with a loud Thok!" (house style?)

redundant with #1

sect305

305 #1: vortexi -> Vortexi

sect306

306 #1: corvayl -> Corvayl

sect307

307 #1: Magnakai pathsmanship skills -> Magnakai Pathsmanship skills

307 #2: north-easterly direction -> northeasterly direction

I could be wrong about this one, but thought I'd at least mention it.

307 #3: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship

redundant with #1

sect308

308 #1: weapon -> Weapon

unsure about this

sect309

sect310

sect311

311 #1: energy comes arching -> energy comes arcing

Never seen "arching" energy or electricity, it's always "arcing". Just my thoughts. . . ;)

sect312

312 #1: brigand captain's -> Brigand Captain's

sect313

sect314

314 #1: Elder is wide-eyed -> Elder is wide eyed

Not sure if the hyphen rule applies to this one or not.

Hyphenated seems to be in general use.

sect315

315 #1: the king's death -> the King's death

Important office title capitalized here?

I think capitalising King is probably best in this instance because it is talking about a specific King; it's not a general term.

sect316

316 #1: token -> Token

or, Black Token

sect317

sect318

318 #1: the shadow gate. -> the Shadow Gate.

sect319

319 #1: rank of Kai Grand Mastership, -> rank of Kai mastery,

I can't think of anywhere else that a choice was phrased that way, does this seem odd to anyone else? Everything else I saw was Kai mastery.

I think we decided before to leave occurrences of 'Grand Mastership', although it is a weird phrase.

319 #2: Huntmastery and have reached the Kai rank of Grand Guardian, or higher, -> Huntmastery, and have reached the Kai rank of Grand Guardian or higher,

319 #3: without trace. -> without a trace.

Never heard it that way before. Could be me. . .

The original is probably a UK variant. 'Vanished without trace' is quite acceptable.

319 #4: Guardian, or higher -> Guardian or higher

319 #7: Kai rank of Grand Guardian -> rank of Kai Grand Guardian

This occurs in multiple places throughout the book, and doesn't seem too odd.

319 #8: gulley -> gully

as elsewhere, occurs twice (once in the caption)

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sect322

322 #1: acolyte Elder -> Acolyte Elder

sect323

sect324

324 #1: vortexi -> Vortexi

sect325

325 #1: safety of the ruins, by turning -> safety of the ruins by turning

Leads to an ambiguous statement: who's turning the to 275, you or the acolyte? *grin*

325 #2: acolytes of Vashna -> Acolytes of Vashna

sect326

326 #1: Grand Guardian, or higher, -> Grand Guardian or higher,

sect327

327 #1: circle of stalagtites -> circle of stalactites

Stalactites hang from a ceiling or wall, stalagmites rise from a floor. No such thing as stalagtites.

327 #2: young teenage girl -> young, teenage girl

unsure about this one

327 #3: semi-circular -> semicircular

as in the PAMoS

Occurs on a line-break

sect328

328 #1: arrow -> Arrow

sect329

sect330

330 #1: bow -> Bow

330 #2: arrow -> Arrow

330 #3: arrows -> Arrows

330 #4: quiver -> Quiver

sect331

sect332

332 #1: This section assumes you have 1 GC, but you may have spent all your money already...

sect333

sect334

334 #1: automatons -> Automatons

334 #2: Kai Blast -> Kai-blast

also, italicised in original--unnecessary IMHO

sect335

sect336

336 #1: corvayl -> Corvayl

sect337

337 #1: Magnakai pathsmanship skills -> Magnakai Pathsmanship skills

337 #2: pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship

redundant with #1

sect338

338 #1: your sixth sense warns -> your Sixth Sense warns

Yes, no, maybe?

338 #2: sixth sense -> Sixth Sense

unsure about this one

redundant with #1

sect339

339 #1: first-floor ruins -> first floor ruins

I think the original hypenated form is OK here.

I'd never seen it that way, and dictionary.com didn't recognize it either, so I would still recommend the latter. Just my thoughts.

Ambiguity: ruins of the first floor or first ruins of the floor.

339 #2: first-floor ruins -> first floor ruins

redundant with #1

sect340

340 #1: 'T'as -> ''T'as

340 #2: black corvayl -> Black Corvayl

sect341

341 #1: towards the north-east. -> towards the northeast.

Just suggesting. . .

341 #2: a north-easterly route -> a northeasterly route

Again, not sure on this one.

A ruling on hyphenated (or not) compass points would be a welcome addition to the MoS.

sect342

342 #1: insignia identify him -> insignia identifies him

342 #2: trees so you -> trees, so you

342 #3: acolyte of Vashna -> Acolyte of Vashna

342 #4: gulley -> gully

as elsewhere

sect343

343 #1: your sixth sense -> your Sixth Sense

Yes, no, maybe. . . I don't know.

343 #2: sixth sense -> Sixth Sense

unsure about this one

redundant with #1

sect344

344 #1: skim the tree-tops -> skim the treetops

sect345

345 #1: the shadow gate and -> the Shadow Gate and

345 #2: forwards on to -> forwards onto

345 #3: shadow gate -> Shadow Gate

redundant with #1

sect346

sect347

347 #1: jackal -> Jackal

sect348

348 #1: skills of invisibility -> skills of Invisibility

348 #2: invisibility -> Invisibility

redundant with #1

348 #3: Brigand leader -> Brigand Leader

348 #4: 'Mind Charm' -> Mind Charm

and encode as Spell

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sect350

350 #1: consumed ... everything, -> consumed . . . everything,

Appears the ellipses are not spaced correctly, but I may be wrong.

I think this might be caused by an extra space before the encoded ellipsis.

350 #2: collapsing shadow gate -> collapsing Shadow Gate

350 #3: the shadow gate and -> the Shadow Gate and

Combat Results Table #1: It's missing!

online version fine

random

Random Number Table #1: It's missing!

the online version works fine.

errata

Errata #1: In Lone Wolf Club Newsletter 24: 'In -> Lone Wolf Club Newsletter 24 states: 'In

I think it sounds better this way.

Errata #2: Disc'both -> Disc' both

Errata #3: 'ENDURANCE' according to Lone Wolf Club Newsletter 24 -> 'ENDURANCE' as per Lone Wolf Club Newsletter 24

Personal preference, perhaps, but I think it sounds better this way.

Errata #4: (223) Replaced both occurrences of 'gulley' with 'gulley'.

I guess the error is obvious

Errata #5: (283) Removed ', or higher' from 'Sun Lord, or higher'since Sun Lord is the highest available rank in this book.

space missing between higher' and since

Errata #6: (340) Replaced 'T'as' with ''T'' -> Replaced 'T'as' with ''T'as'

Errata #7: The drunkard errata item for 185 seems to be the reverse of the actual change.

footnotz

illstrat

Table of Illustrations #1: The Action Chart and the map are not in the same order as in the XML file (and thus in the index too)... (well, my scripts complain about this :-)

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ridge-backed jackal vs. Ridge-backed Jackal (11, 208)?

brigand(s) vs. Brigand(s)? (i.e. 113)

acolyte(s) vs. Acolyte(s)? (i.e. 126)

Kai mastery vs. Kai Mastery? (i.e. 193)

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